South Windsor High School
March 18, 2008
School: South Windsor High School
Town: South Windsor
Slug: Locks of Love
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Ok.
INTERVIEWS: Good sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Good community service story.
WRITING: Nice job telling the story.
VIDEO: Where did these stills come from? Want to make sure you have the right to use them on broadcast television.
AUDIO: The voiceover was a bit muffled. The interview audio was ok.
EDITING: Good, but would have liked to have seen video from an event or actual cutting of hair.
OVERALL: Story needs to be resubmitted with photos or footage that we have permission to broadcast.
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Date Posted: March 18, 2008
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Autism
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: The reporter spoke clearly but was a little rushed. Nice job wrapping up the story in the stand up.
INTERVIEWS: Great job. Interesting and informative.
ORIGINALITY: Newsworthy.
WRITING: Well written. Nice job giving the facts of the disease and relating the scale of it. Would have like to have heard what progress is being made in research for the disease.
VIDEO: Good shots. Nice job getting a variety of tight, medium and wide shots.
AUDIO: Consistant levels.
EDITING: Good. Story flowed nicely.
OVERALL: Good story. Informative and well put together.
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Date Posted: March 18, 2008
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Causes of Global Warming
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Clear delivery.
INTERVIEWS: Great job getting two opinions on this controversial topic. Nice job getting two sides.
ORIGINALITY: Timely story.
WRITING: Nice job showing balance in the story.
VIDEO: Nice job incorporating stills to illustrate a hard topic to visualize.
AUDIO: Opening had an echo. There was a lot of ambient sound in the first interview.
EDITING: Flowed well but there seemed to be some glitches in the video.
OVERALL: Good work.
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Date Posted: February 19, 2008
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Stand Up to CF
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Nice job.
INTERVIEWS: Good sound bites. Good people to interview.
ORIGINALITY: Good topic.
WRITING: Nice job finding the family behind the event.
VIDEO: Lighting and camera work was good.
AUDIO: Consistant levels.
EDITING: Good.
OVERALL: Good job. Nice community service story.
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Date Posted: February 19, 2008
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Project Lead the Way
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Work on your enunciation. "Project Lead the Way" sounded almost like one word and was hard to understand.
INTERVIEWS: Good sound bites and interview choices. Nice job keep camera at eye level with person being interviewed.
ORIGINALITY: Interesting.
WRITING: Story was well told. Nice job writing into the interviews.
VIDEO: Good footage. Nice job
AUDIO: Consistant levels.
EDITING: Nice mix of tight medium and wide shots. Good job using introduction shots of the interviewees before hearing them.
OVERALL: Nice job.
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Date Posted: February 19, 2008
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Veteran's Day
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good.
INTERVIEWS: Good bites and good people to interview. Show us the person you are introducing before their sound bite.
ORIGINALITY: Good story subject.
WRITING: Good job telling the story.
VIDEO: Good but both interviewees were turned way too much to the side. They should be looking just off to the side of the camera.
AUDIO: There was way too much background noise on the first interview. Otherwise good.
EDITING: There wasn't a lot visually available for this story. You did your best with the B-roll you were able to get.
OVERALL: Pretty good. Next time just pay more attention to the angle of the interviewees.
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Date Posted: February 19, 2008
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Animal Shelter
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Nice place for the stand up. Good wrap up of the story. Nice tight shot. Well composed.
INTERVIEWS: Very good. Nice choice of people to interview and good bites. Nice job writing into the sound bites. Good job using establishing shots. Good composition on the interview shots.
ORIGINALITY: Excellent story idea.
WRITING: Very good job telling the story.
VIDEO: Nice use of close ups. Good variety of shots.
AUDIO: Good job. Consistant levels.
EDITING: Nice job matching the video to the script.
OVERALL: Great job.
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Date Posted: February 19, 2008
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Kids-n-Kritters
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good energy. Nice job dressing up for the stand up.
INTERVIEWS: Good interviews. Creative idea to have snake around neck of interviewee. The second interview started with the end of another thought. Tighten it up for a cleaner sound bite.
ORIGINALITY: Very good.
WRITING: Well told story. Stayed focused.
VIDEO: Nice job showing different angles, different animals and people interacting.
AUDIO: The voiceover was recorded someplace with a bit of an echo. The stand up had background noise as well.
EDITING: Matched up the video with script well. Would have been nice to see the interviewees before their sound bite. Use establishing shots.
OVERALL: Nice job.
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Date Posted: February 19, 2008
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Top Soccer
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Very good job. Energetic.
INTERVIEWS: Good bites.
ORIGINALITY: Good choice of subject.
WRITING: Very well told. Excellent writing.
VIDEO: The color was a little off on the first interview but good composition. Otherwise good. Nice shots.
AUDIO: Good.
EDITING: Smooth. Good variety of shots. Nice use tight, medium and wide shots. Good job getting different activities that you were referring to including stretching, cheering, and playing.
OVERALL: Excellent!
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Date Posted: February 19, 2008
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Food Drive
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good job. Great stand up.
INTERVIEWS: Nice choice of lifts. Good people to interview. Interview subjects were too angled. Should be looking just off camera.
ORIGINALITY: Nice job.
WRITING: Very well written.
VIDEO: Nice job showing the shots of the food being collected, bags being stuffed. Great angles.
AUDIO: Good job. Nice use of natural sound.
EDITING: Nice job. Good use of variety of shots including great tight shots.
OVERALL: Great job!
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Date Posted: February 19, 2008
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Breast Cancer Walk
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good. A bit too much headroom on stand up.
INTERVIEWS: Good people to talk to. Well-composed shots on the interviews.
ORIGINALITY: Good community service story.
WRITING: Good story telling.
VIDEO: Nice video.
AUDIO: Very good. Nice use of natural sound.
EDITING: Nice mix of shots.
OVERALL: Great job.
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Date Posted: February 19, 2008
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Café Stealing
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 45
DELIVERY: Good.
INTERVIEWS: Good examples of people to talk to. Café lady and policeman.
ORIGINALITY: Ok.
WRITING: The story made it sound like a serious problem but there was nothing to back that up. Try to illustrate that with something concrete like, "Each year it costs the tax payers of South Windsor $X amount per year."
VIDEO: There were some shaky shots at beginning. Always use a tripod.
AUDIO: Too much background noise on the stand up.
EDITING: You used a recognizable shot of a student walking up to a freezer and taking food out when you are talking about students stealing. This student is viewed as a thief by the way the story is edited. You want to avoid painting a student in that light. To avoid that by just using a tight shot of a hand reaching into the freezer to take out food.
OVERALL: Right now your story is too short. Needs to be 50 seconds. At 45 it will not fit into our broadcast schedule. Add a line about cost, how it affects the day-to-day service, something to highlight the seriousness of the problem. That will get you to the right length. Fix audio on the stand up so there isn't so much background noise. Also, re-edit with a tight shot so you aren't using an identifiable student when you are talking about students stealing.
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Date Posted: February 19, 2008
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: CT Science Center
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 45
DELIVERY: Good.
INTERVIEWS: Nice use of establishing shots. The teacher was a good person to talk too but didn't add much to the story. If he was more specific or enthusiastic it could have benefited the story. If he had another sentence it would also help with the time because right now you are too short. Is there a why question he can answer?
ORIGINALITY: Good subject
WRITING: Nice job of writing into the interviews. Good job telling the story.
VIDEO: Nice camera work.
AUDIO: Good levels.
EDITING: Nice job.
OVERALL: Good but too short to broadcast at 45 seconds. Add another line and you'll have a great story.
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Date Posted: February 19, 2008
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Supporting Veterans
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Pretty good but work on enunciating. Also, be careful of where you are shooting your stand up. You are in the middle of the road with your back to traffic. The location did not have a tie in with the story so it was really unnecessary. Move off to the side of the road and you essentially would have had the same shot but in a safer location.
INTERVIEWS: Good.
ORIGINALITY: Good story idea.
WRITING: Good but needed more B-roll to illustrate the story.
VIDEO: There was not enough B-roll. Your story is about soldiers but there are no images of them. Could have used stills. Maybe they have photos of soldiers opening baskets oversees from a thank you note. Need shots of volunteers working on baskets, handing off to post office, etc. The shots of the post office trucks were jumpy.
AUDIO: There were places when the sound bites sounded good but the voiceover was muffled.
EDITING: Needed more B-roll to better illustrate the process. Show step by step from the beginning. Show volunteers gathered and assembling the baskets.
OVERALL: Great idea for a story but with more footage you could have a very good story here. If you re-edit it could fit into the United Way category.
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Date Posted: February 19, 2008
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Worms for Charity
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Great!
INTERVIEWS: Great sound bites
ORIGINALITY: Excellent.
WRITING: Very well told.
VIDEO: Great shots. More tight shots would have benefited the story. Show the t-shirts that were sold in the drive.
AUDIO: Very good.
EDITING: Nice job. You could have held off on the shots of the worms until a little later in the story. Show the t-shirts that didn't make enough money.
OVERALL: Great job!
*********2006-2007 Evaluations**********
Date Posted: April 20, 2007
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: The Learning Center
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY:
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EDITING:
OVERALL: Good work adding B-roll and re-editing.
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Date Posted: April 20, 2007
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Composting
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY:
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EDITING:
OVERALL: Nice job re-editing.
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Date Posted: April 20, 2007
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Diversity
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY:
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OVERALL: Good job fixing the audio issues, re-writing and editing. Good work.
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Date Posted: April 20, 2007
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: School Safety
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY:
INTERVIEWS:
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EDITING:
OVERALL: Good job with the re-write.
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Date Posted: April 20, 2007
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Mentors
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY:
INTERVIEWS:
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AUDIO:
EDITING:
OVERALL: Good job adding B-roll. Next time work on focusing the writing a bit more.
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Date Posted: April 20, 2007
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Landfill
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY:
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EDITING:
OVERALL: Good job re-editing. The sound bite makes more sense now. Nice job adding B-roll.
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Date Posted: April 20, 2007
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Out to Pasture Farm & Rescue
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Very good. Good location for the stand up.
INTERVIEWS: Great sound bite. Good background. The interview was in exactly the right place!
ORIGINALITY: Great story.
WRITING: Very well told.
VIDEO: Very good use of B-roll. Well illustrated. Good angels. Great job getting the camera down to the animals level for most of shots. Great full frame shots of animals and close ups. Good job showing a variety of animals and issues.
AUDIO: Good levels.
EDITING: Very good. At the start you say horses and horses but don't see them when until a few seconds later. Try to show them when you are mentioning them.
OVERALL: Excellent!
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Date Posted: February 5, 2007
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Wapping Wall
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.56
DELIVERY: Very good. Easy to understand. Good confidence.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices. The first sound bite was good, but the second interview didn't add to the story. Make sure the sound bite you pick adds to the story. A better bite would be to have her talk about why she was involved. Was someone in her family a veteran or currently serving in the military. If there was time we would have liked to have an interview from a veteran.
ORIGINALITY: Good.
WRITING: Nice job. The first interview introduction was weak, but you did a good job with the intro to the second interview.
VIDEO: Good, but since the story is about veterans it really should have had more shots of them.
AUDIO: Good.
EDITING: Good job writing to your video. Leave establishing shot of student up longer so you don't cut to her talking before we hear her.
OVERALL: Nice job.
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Date Posted: February 5, 2007
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: The Learning Center
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.40
DELIVERY: Good job. Nice energy and tone. Flowed very nicely.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices. Look for stronger bites.
ORIGINALITY: OK.
WRITING: Good job covering the basics.
VIDEO: Good shots and variety. Needed more close ups of the interaction. Try to get establishing shots. Instead of showing talking heads.
AUDIO: No problems.
EDITING: More B-roll would have helped the story flow better. You should have had footage between your two interviews instead of showing the talking heads.
OVERALL: Nice job.
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Date Posted: January 18, 2007
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Unified Theater
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Great enthusiasm.
INTERVIEWS: Very good choices. Would have been great to hear from one of the participants. Maybe a bridge was needed between the v/o and the teacher interview.
ORIGINALITY: Good story selection. Nice story idea for the Connecticut Commission for Human Rights category.
WRITING: Very good. Interesting and easy to follow. Try not to use the passive voice. In the stand up you said, "can possibly be."
VIDEO: Good shots. Started out well. You needed more shots of the play. More close ups are needed. You could have used the video from the pad in the story. A creative way to shoot the stand up would be to do it on stage or in a seat in the theater. The background of just a wall was boring. More shots of the play and less in the classroom would improve this story.
AUDIO: Use a mic. Use natural sound of kids on stage in story.
EDITING: OK. The shot of the second interview was up for way too long. You need more B-roll including more footage from the play.
OVERALL: Great story idea but if you added more B-roll this could be considered for a nominee in the Connecticut Commission for Human Rights category.
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Date Posted: January 18, 2007
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Landfill
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good job.
INTERVIEWS: Very good source for the first interview, but the second interview was just echoing what the first interview said. Look to get the balance from a second interview. Someone who doesn't think this landfill cover will make the land usable. You talked about some people being uncomfortable with the choices so it would have been better to find one of them for your second interview.
ORIGINALITY: Newsworthy topic.
WRITING: Good facts. Watch the editorial. You say some residents are uncomfortable with this decision. Find them and use them as a sound bite. Nice job trying to balance the story but use an interview to back it up.
VIDEO: Good shots but you need to add more B-roll. It was especially needed over the interviews. We were staring at the talking heads for a while before their sound bites came on.
AUDIO: No problems.
EDITING: More B-roll would have help with overall editing. We were looking at a talking head for much too long before the first interview.
OVERALL: Look for someone who is opposed to the turning the landfill into usable land to interview or re-write the voiceover so that it doesn't seem like that is what the sound bite is going to be about.
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Date Posted: January 18, 2007
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Composting
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Nice job.
INTERVIEWS: Very good. Nice student sound bite. Very natural.
ORIGINALITY: Good school story.
WRITING: Good job answering the questions and telling the story of this interesting school program.
VIDEO: Good shots but you needed footage to roll over the jump cuts. Add more B-roll to cover that and mix in more close ups and additional shots to improve the story.
AUDIO: Was the mic on? Check levels because the stand up sounded low.
EDITING: Some editing glitches. There was one in the beginning and one in the first interview. Take out the first shot and add composting video.
OVERALL: Roll footage over the jump cuts to cover the glitches. It is very obvious and needs to fixed to broadcast. Please re-submit without the glitches.
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Date Posted: January 18, 2007
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Recycling
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good job. A bit fast at times. Nice location for your stand up.
INTERVIEWS: Great job seeking out good sources.
ORIGINALITY: Unique take on recycling. Nice job.
WRITING: Excellent. Good facts and detailed information. Nice job writing into the interviews. Nice detailed information. Great research. Very informative story.
VIDEO: Great shots. Nice variation of long shots, close ups, action, etc.
AUDIO: Use a mic on your interviews.
EDITING: Very good.
OVERALL: Good work.
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Date Posted: January 18, 2007
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Susan King
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good job. Very easy to follow. Great stand up. Nice job using it as a bridge.
INTERVIEWS: Great choices and sound bites. An interview from a doctor on how she beat the odds might have been a good addition.
ORIGINALITY: Very good. Excellent story idea for the Trantolo & Trantolo category.
WRITING: Great human interest story. Great job telling her story. Adding a few facts from an interview with a doctor would have been great.
VIDEO: Great job. Very well thought out. Good close ups and shots of the family.
AUDIO: Use a mic on the interviews.
EDITING: Excellent job! Great establishing shots. Nice job writing to the video.
OVERALL: Great job!
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Date Posted: January 18, 2007
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Mentors
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Too fast. Hard to keep up and understand.
INTERVIEWS: The first interview had no energy. Choose bites that add to the story and people that are enthusiastic. The student was really a great example of an interview with good energy.
ORIGINALITY: Good.
WRITING: It takes way too long to get to the information about the grant. Get to the point of the story from the start. You never told us who the grant was from or what is was for. You could lead the story talking about the program and it is in danger of being cancelled. Then explain what the program is, tell what the grant is, who it is from, and why it may not be given this year.
VIDEO: This story was about high school students mentoring children but you never showed it. There were no shots of kids in the whole story. You need close ups and action shots. More B-roll is needed. What were the hoola hoops for? If they were used in the workshop show them being used too or else it seems like an out of place shot.
AUDIO: Need mic for the interviews.
EDITING: Ok, but you needed more B-roll.
OVERALL: Good story idea but you need to re-work it and re-submit.
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Date Posted: January 18, 2007
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Locks of Love
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.30
DELIVERY: Good job.
INTERVIEWS: Nice interviews. Great first interview. Another great addition would have been to interview someone who has benefited from the program.
ORIGINALITY: Good.
WRITING: Nice job telling about the organization and the donations. Great stand up.
VIDEO: Good. You were at the salon you should have gotten a close up of hair being cut. It would have been great in the story. Shots of people sweeping up hair and close ups of scissors or clippers would have been great. Nice job getting the picture of the hair cut donation.
AUDIO: Good.
EDITING: Ok. More footage would have added to the story and allowed you to do quicker shots.
OVERALL: Nice job.
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Date Posted: January 18, 2007
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Second Chance Ranch
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Very good. Great enthusiasm.
INTERVIEWS: Good sound bites. Really added to the story. You said, "Kids love Sunny," but you never mention what program the ranch has for the kids. Either explain or clip that part out of the sound bite.
ORIGINALITY: Great community service story.
WRITING: Great opening line. Nice job covering the facts and telling the story of the ranch. Be careful not to be repeative. You say talk about the purpose of the ranch in the voiceover and then in the interview. Use other language to write into the interview or choose a different bite.
VIDEO: Very good footage. Nice shots of the horses and interaction. Good job rolling footage over interview. Good variation of close ups, long shots and medium shots. Be careful of the sun when shooting outside.
AUDIO: Good. Could have added natural sound if you had any.
EDITING: Very good. You talk about everything we do is for the
OVERALL: Nice job.
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Date Posted: January 18, 2007
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Freshman
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Very good. Confident and easy to understand.
INTERVIEWS: Great interviews. Second interview was excellent. Really explained the issue. Would have been interesting to hear from someone in support of the cuts or a student athlete.
ORIGINALITY: Good.
WRITING: Nice job talking about the issue and getting informative sources. Watch out for editorial in the intro and in the stand up. Is this a proposal or a cut that has been approved? That was not clear. Also, remember to keep the story balanced. You only had information for one side of the story. Why are people in support of the cut?
VIDEO: Good action shots. Need close ups in the gym, someone tying their shoes, feet running, etc. More b-roll would really add to this story. You only showed basketball. Show other sports.
AUDIO: Good levels.
EDITING: Nice job. Be careful not to cut to the interview too quick. Cover the talking head with B-roll.
OVERALL: Nice job. You need more B-roll, different angels, and different shots (long, medium, close-up) for next time or to make this story better. Remember to keep the writing balanced and keep editorial out of the story.
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Date Posted: January 18, 2007
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: School Health
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Ok. Make sure you read through the voiceover until you are comfortable. There were some awkward pauses in the voiceover.
INTERVIEWS: Nice job talking to a student and the person who runs the cafeteria, but be more selective of your sound bites. The first interview lacked energy. It would have been interesting if he was saying he missed Doritos, Cheetos, or one of his favorite snacked that was banned.
ORIGINALITY: Ok.
WRITING: Nice job introducing your interviews, but we weren't sure what the second interview was referring to. Nice job adding good facts and doing research.
VIDEO: Nice shots, but they were all medium to wide shots. Make sure to have close ups such as someone getting something out of the vending machine, close up of foods, etc. The first interview was shot in front of a blank wall. Select a more interesting backdrop.
AUDIO: You needed a mic on the interviews and stand up. Some ambient sound was too loud.
EDITING: Good. More B-roll would help with editing.
OVERALL: Nice job.
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Date Posted: January 18, 2007
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Unified Sports
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Clear and easy to understand. Make sure you are comfortable with the copy you paused a few times. Good confidence.
INTERVIEWS: Good first interview. It was a good idea to interview a volunteer but the sound bite from the second interview really didn't add and it lacked energy. It would have been great to have a sound bite from one of the participants.
ORIGINALITY: This could be a great submission for the Connecticut Commission on Human Rights category.
WRITING: Nice job telling the history of the program and discussing it. Watch out for the editorial! "Each day kids improve their skills," "volunteers make it an enjoyable atmosphere," these types of comments need to be attributed. Who says? "Coaches here say each day kids improve their skills." Good job adding facts in the stand up.
VIDEO: Great action shots and shots of the participants and volunteers. You need more close ups such as a basketball, feet running, hands, etc. Remember interviews should not be in front of a blank wall (2nd interview). Also, don't shoot the interview from the side. It's too much profile.
AUDIO: Good levels. Some natural sound would have fit well with the story such as a whistle blowing or basket being made.
EDITING: Nice job.
OVERALL: Great story idea but the writing needs to be attributed or needs facts to back it up. Make sure you say, "coaches here say" or "the parents say." Attribute the statements and re-submit. With these changes this story could be considered for a nominee for the Connecticut Commission on Human Rights category.
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Date Posted: January 18, 2007
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Diversity
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Not bad. Practice until you are comfortable with the script. You stumbled over a few words.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices, but it would have been nice to hear from a student. What is their reaction to his program? Nice job with the intros. The second interview could have been swapped out with a student reaction.
ORIGINALITY: Good. Great submission for the Connecticut Commission for Human Rights category. With some re-writing this could also could fit the Trantolo & Trantolo category.
WRITING: Ok. Try to add more detail or facts to the story.
VIDEO: More close ups and more B-roll will add to this story. Show students listening and participating. Be aware of the natural light of the story. Use B-roll to cover some of the interview.
AUDIO: Great idea to use natural sound but it was way too loud. Bring down the level so it doesn't over power the voiceover.
EDITING: Shots were a bit long. More B-roll would help add to this story. Shoot much more than you think you will use. You could add some shots of some handouts or documents he gave out to fill in some more shots.
OVERALL: Good story idea. Next time shoot more footage. The natural sound levels are much too high now. Please bring down the audio level on the natural sound and add a few more shots and re-submit. This could be a nominee for the Connecticut Commission for Human Rights category with a little work. If you added in a student reaction talking about how inspirational or what a good role model the guest speaker is it would be able to be submitted for the Trantolo & Trantolo category as well.
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Date Posted: January 15, 2007
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: School Safety
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good pace and easy to understand. Just be careful with the enunciation. Toward the end it was a little loose.
INTERVIEWS: Good sources but would have like to have heard from a student or parent. Do they feel that the school is safe? Do they think these drills are good or just a joke?
ORIGINALITY: Good. School safety is still a timely issue.
WRITING: You never explain what or why. What is Gold Team Drill? Tell us at the top what this is. What is the purpose of these drills? Had there been a scare at South Windsor High School? Why are they taking these measures? Watch editorial in stand up and in story. What is the source of the information in the stand up?
VIDEO: Good shots. Always use a tripod. Nice action shot with the car. Take your hand out of pocket on the stand up to look more professional.
AUDIO: The start of your voiceover was clipped. Use a mic on interviews. Ambient sound was very loud.
EDITING: Nice job. There was a jump shot into the cop interview. Cover it with footage. You could have used a close up of computer screen or hands on the keyboard since they were both looking at the computer.
OVERALL: Re-write the story answering the what and why of the story and watch the editorial.
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2005-2006 Evaluations
Date Posted: April 26, 2006
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Boundless Playground
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good. Easy to follow.
INTERVIEWS: Great bites. Instead of the second interview, and interview with a parent that has a child that has disabilities or a child would have been a better fit.
ORIGINALITY: Very good
WRITING: Good job. Watch out for editorial. It would sound better if you say, "Many believe play is an important part of growing up" instead of stating it as fact.
VIDEO: Great shots. Nice job showing the blue print.
AUDIO: More natural sound of kids playing.
EDITING: Very good.
OVERALL: Good job. Do not use lower 3rd graphics. It interferes with our post-production wrapper.
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Date Posted: April 26, 2006
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Ashlee Sam's Juvenile Diabetes Concert
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY:
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OVERALL: Great job taking out the talking heads. Nice re-edit.
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Date Posted: April 13, 2006
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Family Awareness Day
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good pace and tone. Be careful not to editorialize.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices. Nice sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Ok.
WRITING: Good job covering the important questions. Work on writing into interviews. Remember to add to the story in your introduction and don't say so and so says. You said, "Colleen Lyons describes…". It would be better as, "Colleen Lyons tells us how this event came together."
VIDEO: Work on adding establishing shots of the interviews. Try not to use "talking heads". Looking at some ones talking but not hearing them is distracting. It would have been better if you had a shot of them doing something else to set up with.
AUDIO: Good levels. Natural sound from event would have added to the story.
EDITING: Pretty good job with editing, but the initial shots are of runners and a fire truck. They do not go along with the script, which is talking about families. Putting the third shot at the front would flow much better.
OVERALL: Good. Work on video and writing into interviews on your next story.
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Date Posted: April 13, 2006
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Crime at Evergreen Walk
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: A bit rushed. Slow down so that it is easier to understand.
INTERVIEWS: Good clip from the cop. The interview with the student really didn't add to the story. An interview with a store manager who has been affected by the crime would have been a better pick.
ORIGINALITY: Timely and newsworthy.
WRITING: More facts are needed to support the story. How many incidences have occurred in the past year? Has it decreased with more police presence?
VIDEO: Good shots, but you need more b-roll of the plaza. Get footage of the storefronts.
AUDIO: Good levels.
EDITING: Add more B-roll and it will help with the editing. Show us the places you are talking about. There was an editing glitch.
OVERALL: Great topic for a story. This story is for air, but consider our suggestions for your next piece. Remember to back up your writing with meaningful facts and find footage to go along with your script. Show us what you are writing about.
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Date Posted: April 13, 2006
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Veteran's Day
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: A bit rushed at times. Nice job on the stand up.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices. Good bites. A quick interview from a veteran who attended would have been great.
ORIGINALITY: Interesting.
WRITING: Good job. Covered all questions. Don't say, "has been organizing". It should be "has organized."
VIDEO: Good shots. Nice variety. More shots of the veterans would have helped support the story.
AUDIO: Ambient sound was a bit too loud. Nice job using ambient sound of the singing, but either lower the volume or use it at full volume as a clip. There were some audio problems going on over both interviews.
EDITING: Good job.
OVERALL: Good. Next time pay more attention to sound and slow down on the delivery.
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Date Posted: April 13, 2006
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Community Center
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 48
DELIVERY: Good job. Nice inflection. Good stand up location.
INTERVIEWS: The sound bite was way too long. The sound bite should be no more than 5 to 8 seconds. Use some of the information he gave you for your voiceover. A second interview with someone who uses the center would have benefited the story.
ORIGINALITY: Why is this newsworthy? What is the hook? Every town has a community center. What makes this one unique?
WRITING: Find the hook and write to it answering who, what, where, when, why and how. The sound bite told the story. Don't editorialize. You say the community center is a valuable resource, but who says this? Add facts to support the story.
VIDEO: You need much more B-roll. Show people participating in the programs and activities that the center offers. You need a 5 second pad at beginning of story.
AUDIO: Always use a microphone. Watch the levels. The voiceover was louder than the interview.
EDITING: More B-roll will help with the over all flow.
OVERALL: Take a closer look at the story and find the hook. Work on the writing and find footage that goes along with the script. Cut down the sound bite.
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Date Posted: April 13, 2006
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Senior Sweeties
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: A bit rushed at beginning. Slowing down will help the viewer follow the story.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices. Great sound bite for the child. I would have liked to hear from a senior, but the teacher's sound bite was did a nice job telling how the seniors feel about the program. It was a great emotional sound bite.
ORIGINALITY: Very good.
WRITING: Good. Nice job covering all the questions and adding emotion to the story.
VIDEO: Use more footage. More B-roll of the seniors and the candy would have helped support the story. Make sure the video is in focus. The 1st interview and the stand up were out of focus. Try not to recycle any shots. With a 50 second story it is too noticeable. Nice variation of long and short shots.
AUDIO: Nice use of ambient sound. Good levels.
EDITING: Good job. Suggestion: Watch the pan of the 1st shot and the 2nd shot. They both went in the same direction. If it came back in the opposite direction or was a still shot, it would flow better.
OVERALL: Good work.
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Date Posted: April 13, 2006
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Teen Center Helps Out
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good nice. Nice location for the stand up.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices. Nice sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Ok.
WRITING: Good job. What ages can go to the teen center? Also, is it only open to South Windsor teens? A suggestion on the writing into an interview. It would have sounded more natural to say "so and so says…" or "so and so tells us", rather than "so and so comments."
VIDEO: Great shots of the activities and students. Remember a tripod at all times. A few more close ups would have been great.
AUDIO: Good levels. Natural sound from pool table or video games would have added to the feel of the story.
EDITING: Nice job.
OVERALL: Nice job!
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Date Posted: April 13, 2006
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Summerville Teenage Workers
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Very good. Nice flow.
INTERVIEWS: Excellent! Great sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Interesting.
WRITING: Great opening line. Good job covering all the questions and writing to the hook. Nice job setting up the story and adding details.
VIDEO: Very good shots. Good variety. Nice framing of the stand-up. Great establishing shots of the waitress.
AUDIO: Nice use of ambient sound. Good levels.
EDITING: Good job. Nice flow. Video matched up well with writing.
OVERALL: Great work!
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Date Posted: April 13, 2006
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Blood Drive
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Use more energy. Work on diction. It was a bit muffled a times. Nice information in the stand up.
INTERVIEWS: Great interviews. Nice sound bites and good choices. Nice job writing into the sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Nice community service story.
WRITING: Nice job. Good information.
VIDEO: Good shots. Great establishing shot of the donor who was interviewed. Stand up should be a tighter shot. Don't use such a wide shot for a stand up unless there is an expressed purpose. Otherwise it just makes it hard to see the reporter. Don't do the stand up in front of a bare wall. Try to find a background that ties in to the story. Be careful to adjust focus and white balance. Remember shooting indoors and outdoors are different color temperatures. Always use a tripod.
AUDIO: Good levels.
EDITING: Very nice job matching video to script. Good flow. No glitches.
OVERALL: Good work!
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Date Posted: April 13, 2006
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Ashlee Sam's Juvenile Diabetes Benefit Concert
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good job. Nice job with the stand up.
INTERVIEWS: Nice choices. Good job finding a student with diabetes and the event coordinator. Great sound bites. Added great information to the story.
ORIGINALITY: Newsworthy event.
WRITING: Very good. Great job setting up the story and answering most of the questions. When is the event taking place? Did the first person interviewed also have diabetes? Nice job telling about the event and the problem of diabetes.
VIDEO: Good. Nice job getting footage. Nice selection of B-roll especially since the event has not yet taken place.
AUDIO: Good. Some natural sound from the students playing music would have been a nice addition.
EDITING: Good work. It flowed nicely and looked crisp. Try not to use a "talking head" as an establishing shot. When a person is talking in the video but you don't hear them it is distracting. On the second interview you started out with a great establishing shot but then switched over to her talking before the sound bite started. It would have worked better if you stayed on the establishing shot of 2nd interview longer and didn't use talking head.
OVERALL: Great job!
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Date Posted: April 13, 2006
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: The Gym Obsession: Addicted to Fitness
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Great job. Very clear and easy to follow.
INTERVIEWS: Great picks. Nice sound bites. Second interview was very good. Informative but short and to the point.
ORIGINALITY: This trend is a newsworthy topic.
WRITING: Pretty good. Nice job covering the basic questions and balancing the piece with both sides of the story. Watch out for editorializing. Add more facts to support your story. Be careful of wording. Is it really an addiction or a trend?
VIDEO: Great job. Good variety of shots. Nice job on action and stills.
AUDIO: No problems. Good consistent levels.
EDITING: Excellent. Great work matching up the audio and video.
OVERALL: Great job!
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2004-2005 Evaluations
Date Posted: April 11, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Relay for Life
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.10
DELIVERY:
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WRITING:
VIDEO:
AUDIO:
EDITING:
OVERALL: Good work. Thanks for bringing up the audio levels on the interviews. It makes the story even better!
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Date Posted: April 11, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Atkins Diet
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.94
DELIVERY: Great. Clear and easy to understand. Good steady pace and flow.
INTERVIEWS: Excellent! Perfect choices. Good job picking subjects with two different perspectives. Good nutritional information from the doctor and good real life experience from the dieter. Great introductions. Very relevant sound bites. Very informative.
ORIGINALITY: Relevant story that many people will be interested in.
WRITING: Very well written. Nice job covering who, what, where, why, when, how. Great transitions. Good work covering both sides of the story.
VIDEO: Lots of great shots. Nice variety of clips that went well with the story.
AUDIO: Good levels throughout.
EDITING: Good job with the quick cuts between your shots. It kept the pace moving and keeps people watching. Nice work matching the writing to the video. Great job taking the time to match up the writing with good footage. Good video of the scale when you mention dropping some pounds.
OVERALL: Great job putting it all together! Wonderful idea and well executed. You offered a lot of information about the positives and negatives of the Adkins Diet. Excellent interviews and good job telling an unbiased story. Great news package.
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Date Posted: April 11, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Campus Rules
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.81
DELIVERY: Good delivery. Nice pace and easy to understand.
INTERVIEWS: Very good. Great job going to another school and getting an interview with their principal. It added great information to your story. Good source. A quick sound bite from the South Windsor principal talking about why they don't let students leave would have been a great addition. Great job getting two different perspectives on the issue.
ORIGINALITY: Good. Very interesting.
WRITING: Well written. Good job showing both sides of the story. Suggestion: To give the story a broader audience, instead of talking specifically about Manchester and South Windsor in the beginning, you could have addressed it as a statewide issue and then referenced the individual town policies when introducing your sound bites.
VIDEO: Good shots.
AUDIO: Good levels.
EDITING: Good job matching the video to the writing.
OVERALL: Nice work. Good interviews and good job showing two sides of the story. Interesting topic.
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Date Posted: April 11, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Censorship
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 49.66
DELIVERY: A bit too fast. The pace of the delivery makes an already complex story harder to understand. Slow down the voice over.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices. Nice work trying to get both sides of the story.
ORIGINALITY: Good.
WRITING: The writing needs work. It needs more set up. Also, there seems to be some confusion as to the focus of the story. It seems that there are two different stories going on. The topic of student's work being censored because of the content is one issue, but very different from the topic of concealing a minor's identity in the press. If the content of students' work is being censored by the school administration that would deal with freedom of speech and be one issue. If the focus is that many people are trying to change the laws regarding publishing a minor's identity in the press, that is a separate issue. Depending on what story you decide to cover there are different hooks and different questions that you would want to answer.
VIDEO: Use a tripod at all times. Some good shots depending on what your story focus will be.
AUDIO: Good levels.
EDITING: Once you re-write the story and match the video to the writing, your editing will come together.
OVERALL: Re-write focusing on one topic and re-submit.
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Date Posted: April 11, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Seasonal Affective Disorder
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 49.43
DELIVERY: Good. Nice pace and clear delivery.
INTERVIEWS: Good information from the nurse. It would have been good to get another interview. One from someone affected by Seasonal Affective Disorder would have been perfect.
ORIGINALITY: Good.
WRITING: Nice job setting up the story and getting in all the important information.
VIDEO: Be careful choosing your footage. You are talking about people having this disorder and then people on screen to go along with the voice over. Unless you set up the clip by interviewing the person first, you do not want to show a recognizable clip of a person associated with a disorder. You are "labeling" that person as having the problem and you don't want to do that unless they actually do. You could interview the person in your story to establish that. Also, the footage inside the house is too dark to use.
AUDIO: Good levels.
EDITING: Add more b-roll and your editing will come together.
OVERALL: Good story idea. Well written, but you need work on your footage. Re-edit with either an interview of the woman you show as having SAD or find new footage to match up with your voice over.
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Date Posted: April 11, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Referendum Money
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.78
DELIVERY: Very good. Great pace. Clear. Consider dressing up for your stand-up. Remember this is a professional news story. Also, don't shot your stand-up in front of a brick wall. If you were going to do the stand-up in front of a building, outside Wapping Elementary would be a better location.
INTERVIEWS: Very good choices. Good sources. Nice job going right to the top to get answers. They added great information to the story.
ORIGINALITY: Great newsworthy story!
WRITING: Good. You did a good job covering who, what, where, when, why, and how.
VIDEO: Well shot clips. The story would have been even stronger with more b-roll. It would have been great to have some shots in the hallway of the elementary school with kids. Something with a little action would add to the story.
AUDIO: Very good, except at the beginning of the second interview the audio was cut off.
EDITING: Great job.
OVERALL: Nice crisp piece. Well done. Great interview choices and a good news story.
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Date Posted: April 11, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Trust House Reading
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50.28
DELIVERY: Slow down the delivery. It was way too fast and made it very difficult to understand.
INTERVIEWS: Great choices. Very nice clip from the child.
ORIGINALITY: Interesting. Great feel good story.
WRITING: Great writing. Good transitions. Nice job getting all the info in, although you will need to edit some of it when you slow the voice over down. Make sure you leave in the vital information.
VIDEO: Good shots of the participants and the facility. It would have been stronger with more shots of kids reading or being read to. They would really add to the story and go along with the voice over.
AUDIO: Use a microphone at all times. The stand up was very hard to hear and the traffic noise was way too loud. Also, when you went into the stand-up, part of the audio from the previous shot was heard.
EDITING: Good aside from the audio overlap at the end. More shots and a variation of shots will make the editing even better. Also, make sure you don't cut anything off. The audio track was cut off at the end. Make crisp cuts.
OVERALL: Good idea and excellent writing. Re-record your voice over and slow down. Re-write and make it shorter, and this will help with your pace. Also, remember a microphone at all times for interviews and your stand-up. When you re-edit see if you have any additional footage you can add for more shots. This came in at over 50 seconds so it is too long. The timing needs to be :50 seconds from the beginning of the voice-over to the end of the voice-over. We don't have the capabilities of editing any time off your piece. Please re-submit at the required 50 second length.
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Date Posted: April 11, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Winter Weight Gain
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.75
DELIVERY: Good. Nice pace. The stand up would have been improved if it was slowed down a bit and shot in a more relevant location instead of the school hallway.
INTERVIEWS: Good information from the nurse. Good introductions. The interview with the student ran a bit too long.
ORIGINALITY: Relevant topic.
WRITING: It was well written, but the interviews told the majority of the story. Good job covering all the questions.
VIDEO: Good, but not enough b-roll. It would have been great to see people all bundled up outside and shots of different winter activities or the gym. If you had these types of shots it would really have added to the story.
AUDIO: Pretty good, but the background noise on the interviews was too loud and distracting. It seemed like there might have been a bad connection or a mic was not used.
EDITING: Good job.
OVERALL: Nice job stating the facts and talking about the topic. It would have been even stronger if you added more footage.
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Date Posted: April 11, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Water vs. Coke
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Very strong delivery. Good pace. Even flow. Great stand-up location!
INTERVIEWS: Great interview. Good introduction. Interview really added to the story. She gave some very insightful information on the negatives of soda. An interview with a student would have been a great addition to the story. To keep the story balanced it would have been good to hear from someone in the soft drink industry to defend there product.
ORIGINALITY: Good topic.
WRITING: Good writing. Nice job covering who, what, where, why, when, and how. Great transitions and good statistics. Good job stating the facts and referencing where you got your information. Instead of referring to soda as "coke" you should have spoken about cola, soda, or soft drinks. It isn't that brand specifically that causes the problem so you want to be sure you don't single them out as the only one drink referred too.
VIDEO: Good shots. Always use a tripod. There were some shaky shots. The shots of people drinking water in the beginning should be action shots. They shouldn't be looking directly into the camera. The profile shot of the girl at the lunch table drinking water was a good shot.
AUDIO: Good, but the ambient sound in the school was distracting. It went from the school shots with natural sound to the doctor's office with no background noise. Suggestion: Leave out the ambient sound unless it adds to the story.
EDITING: Good job matching up the video to the voice over. Fixing the audio would improve the flow.
OVERALL: Good job overall. Next time consider the ambient sound and whether or not it helps the story, and avoid shooting people straight on.
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Date Posted: April 11, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Hybrid Cars
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.62
DELIVERY: Good pace and dictation. Very clear and easy to understand.
INTERVIEWS: Great introductions to interviews. Good interview choices. Both subjects gave good information on the topic. The science teacher gave some great information, but it would have been great to hear from someone at an emissions testing facility or EPA associate.
ORIGINALITY: Good.
WRITING: Good job telling this newsworthy story. Great background information. Very well written, but in order to keep the story from becoming one-sided, it would have been great for you to touch upon what some negatives to hybrid cars may be. Something such as expense, limited availability, or the effect it would have on the traditional automobile industry. Adding some of that information would help keep the story from appearing bias.
VIDEO: Great shots. The video really added to the story. It would have been good to have video of a hybrid car instead of a still. The exhaust shot is great, but it is a bit shaky. Remember to always use a tripod. Although the shots of the classroom set up the interview with the teacher, it might be a little confusing as to the viewer as to how it relates to the story.
AUDIO: Good.
EDITING: Good, except a glitch in your interview with the Hybrid expert. Otherwise nice job editing.
OVERALL: Nice job!
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Date Posted: April 11, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Alternative Medicine
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.87
DELIVERY: Very good delivery. Good pace and nice flow. Nice stand up. Good background choice, and good job dressing the part by being well dressed.
INTERVIEWS: Good interview choices and great introductions.
ORIGINALITY: Original story idea.
WRITING: Good job. You explained the medical practice, and what and how it helps. Is this a new practice? Is this news because it is a new form of medicine or it is less expensive or just a better way to cure some problems. Addressing some of those types of questions would make the story even stronger.
VIDEO: Nice shots. Great video of the patient's therapy and shots of diploma and diagrams.
AUDIO: Good levels throughout.
EDITING: Good job matching video and audio.
OVERALL: Interesting topic. Good job!
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Date Posted: April 11, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Tsunami Aid
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.69
DELIVERY: Good flow. Clear delivery.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices. Good interviews and introductions.
ORIGINALITY: Timely and newsworthy story.
WRITING: Good writing. Nice job setting up the story. You covered who, what, where, when, why, and how questions. Good details about the aid that was given.
VIDEO: Good choices throughout your story. Nice variety of shots. Always use a tripod. It was noticeable that you did not use one for some shots where the video was shaky. It would have been great to see people putting together the donations.
AUDIO: Good levels.
EDITING: Nice job matching your voice-over and your video.
OVERALL: Good work. Very good story. No major problems. Well done. Just remember to use your tripod at all times.
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Date Posted: April 11, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Slug: Relay for Life
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.10
DELIVERY: Very good. Nice pace and well spoken.
INTERVIEWS: Excellent! Great interview choices, especially the cancer survivor. That is how you pick a sound bite! Good introductions.
ORIGINALITY: Very original. Nice heartwarming story.
WRITING: Great writing! You covered all the questions and showed the positive results. Good job telling the history of the walk, talking about this walk and mixing in your interviews.
VIDEO: Great shots of the walk and of people having fun together.
AUDIO: Very good, but the interviews could have been a bit louder to match the other levels.
EDITING: Good. Great flow and excellent job matching video to the audio.
OVERALL: Great job overall! A very heartwarming story. Nice job putting it all together. Good story. We would have loved to hear how to get involved.
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Date posted: March 11, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Town: South Windsor
Slug: "Adkins Diet"
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.94
DELIVERY: Great. Clear and easy to understand. Good steady pace and flow.
INTERVIEWS: Excellent! Perfect choices. Good job picking subjects with two different perspectives. Good nutritional information from the doctor and good real life experience from the dieter. Great introductions. Very relevant sound bites. Very informative.
ORIGINALITY: Relevant story that many people will be interested in.
WRITING: Very well written. Nice job covering who, what, where, why, when, how. Great transitions. Good work covering both sides of the story.
VIDEO: Lots of great shots. Nice variety of clips that went well with the story.
AUDIO: Good levels throughout.
EDITING: Good job with the quick cuts between your shots. It kept the pace moving and keeps people watching. Nice work matching the writing to the video. Great job taking the time to match up the writing with good footage. Good video of the scale when you mention dropping some pounds.
OVERALL: Great job putting it all together! Wonderful idea and well executed. You offered a lot of information about the positives and negatives of the Adkins Diet. Excellent interviews and good job telling an unbiased story. Great news package.
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Date posted: March 11, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Town: South Windsor
Slug: "Campus Rules"
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.81
DELIVERY: Good delivery. Nice pace and easy to understand.
INTERVIEWS: Very good. Great job going to another school and getting an interview with their principal. It added great information to your story. Good source. A quick sound bite from the South Windsor principal talking about why they don't let students leave would have been a great addition. Great job getting two different perspectives on the issue.
ORIGINALITY: Good. Very interesting.
WRITING: Well written. Good job showing both sides of the story. Suggestion: To give the story a broader audience, instead of talking specifically about Manchester and South Windsor in the beginning, you could have addressed it as a statewide issue and then referenced the individual town policies when introducing your sound bites.
VIDEO: Good shots.
AUDIO: Good levels.
EDITING: Good job matching the video to the writing.
OVERALL: Nice work. Good interviews and good job showing two sides of the story. Interesting topic.
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Date posted: March 11, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Town: South Windsor
Slug: "Censorship"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 49.66
DELIVERY: A bit too fast. The pace of the delivery makes an already complex story harder to understand. Slow down the voice over.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices. Nice work trying to get both sides of the story.
ORIGINALITY: Good.
WRITING: The writing needs work. It needs more set up. Also, there seems to be some confusion as to the focus of the story. It seems that there are two different stories going on. The topic of student's work being censored because of the content is one issue, but very different from the topic of concealing a minor's identity in the press. If the content of students' work is being censored by the school administration that would deal with freedom of speech and be one issue. If the focus is that many people are trying to change the laws regarding publishing a minor's identity in the press, that is a separate issue. Depending on what story you decide to cover there are different hooks and different questions that you would want to answer.
VIDEO: Use a tripod at all times. Some good shots depending on what your story focus will be.
AUDIO: Good levels.
EDITING: Once you re-write the story and match the video to the writing, your editing will come together.
OVERALL: Re-write focusing on one topic and re-submit.
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Date posted: March 11, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Town: South Windsor
Slug: "Seasonal Affective Disorder"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 49.43
DELIVERY: Good. Nice pace and clear delivery.
INTERVIEWS: Good information from the nurse. It would have been good to get another interview. One from someone affected by Seasonal Affective Disorder would have been perfect.
ORIGINALITY: Good.
WRITING: Nice job setting up the story and getting in all the important information.
VIDEO: Be careful choosing your footage. You are talking about people having this disorder and then people on screen to go along with the voice over. Unless you set up the clip by interviewing the person first, you do not want to show a recognizable clip of a person associated with a disorder. You are "labeling" that person as having the problem and you don't want to do that unless they actually do. You could interview the person in your story to establish that. Also, the footage inside the house is too dark to use.
AUDIO: Good levels.
EDITING: Add more b-roll and your editing will come together.
OVERALL: Good story idea. Well written, but you need work on your footage. Re-edit with either an interview of the woman you show as having SAD or find new footage to match up with your voice over.
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Date posted: March 11, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Town: South Windsor
Slug: "Referendum Money"
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.78
DELIVERY: Very good. Great pace. Clear. Consider dressing up for your stand-up. Remember this is a professional news story. Also, don't shot your stand-up in front of a brick wall. If you were going to do the stand-up in front of a building, outside Wapping Elementary would be a better location.
INTERVIEWS: Very good choices. Good sources. Nice job going right to the top to get answers. They added great information to the story.
ORIGINALITY: Great newsworthy story!
WRITING: Good. You did a good job covering who, what, where, when, why, and how.
VIDEO: Well shot clips. The story would have been even stronger with more b-roll. It would have been great to have some shots in the hallway of the elementary school with kids. Something with a little action would add to the story.
AUDIO: Very good, except at the beginning of the second interview the audio was cut off.
EDITING: Great job.
OVERALL: Nice crisp piece. Well done. Great interview choices and a good news story.
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Date posted: March 11, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Town: South Windsor
Slug: "Trust House Reading"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50.28
DELIVERY: Slow down the delivery. It was way too fast and made it very difficult to understand.
INTERVIEWS: Great choices. Very nice clip from the child.
ORIGINALITY: Interesting. Great feel good story.
WRITING: Great writing. Good transitions. Nice job getting all the info in, although you will need to edit some of it when you slow the voice over down. Make sure you leave in the vital information.
VIDEO: Good shots of the participants and the facility. It would have been stronger with more shots of kids reading or being read to. They would really add to the story and go along with the voice over.
AUDIO: Use a microphone at all times. The stand up was very hard to hear and the traffic noise was way too loud. Also, when you went into the stand-up, part of the audio from the previous shot was heard.
EDITING: Good aside from the audio overlap at the end. More shots and a variation of shots will make the editing even better. Also, make sure you don't cut anything off. The audio track was cut off at the end. Make crisp cuts.
OVERALL: Good idea and excellent writing. Re-record your voice over and slow down. Re-write and make it shorter, and this will help with your pace. Also, remember a microphone at all times for interviews and your stand-up. When you re-edit see if you have any additional footage you can add for more shots. This came in at over 50 seconds so it is too long. The timing needs to be :50 seconds from the beginning of the voice-over to the end of the voice-over. We don't have the capabilities of editing any time off your piece. Please re-submit at the required 50 second length.
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Date posted: March 11, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Town: South Windsor
Slug: "Winter Weight Gain"
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.75
DELIVERY: Good. Nice pace. The stand up would have been improved if it was slowed down a bit and shot in a more relevant location instead of the school hallway.
INTERVIEWS: Good information from the nurse. Good introductions. The interview with the student ran a bit too long.
ORIGINALITY: Relevant topic.
WRITING: It was well written, but the interviews told the majority of the story. Good job covering all the questions.
VIDEO: Good, but not enough b-roll. It would have been great to see people all bundled up outside and shots of different winter activities or the gym. If you had these types of shots it would really have added to the story.
AUDIO: Pretty good, but the background noise on the interviews was too loud and distracting. It seemed like there might have been a bad connection or a mic was not used.
EDITING: Good job.
OVERALL: Nice job stating the facts and talking about the topic. It would have been even stronger if you added more footage.
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Date posted: March 11, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Town: South Windsor
Slug: "Water vs. Coke"
Status:Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Very strong delivery. Good pace. Even flow. Great stand-up location!
INTERVIEWS: Great interview. Good introduction. Interview really added to the story. She gave some very insightful information on the negatives of soda. An interview with a student would have been a great addition to the story. To keep the story balanced it would have been good to hear from someone in the soft drink industry to defend there product.
ORIGINALITY: Good topic.
WRITING: Good writing. Nice job covering who, what, where, why, when, and how. Great transitions and good statistics. Good job stating the facts and referencing where you got your information. Instead of referring to soda as "coke" you should have spoken about cola, soda, or soft drinks. It isn't that brand specifically that causes the problem so you want to be sure you don't single them out as the only one drink referred too.
VIDEO: Good shots. Always use a tripod. There were some shaky shots. The shots of people drinking water in the beginning should be action shots. They shouldn't be looking directly into the camera. The profile shot of the girl at the lunch table drinking water was a good shot.
AUDIO: Good, but the ambient sound in the school was distracting. It went from the school shots with natural sound to the doctor's office with no background noise. Suggestion: Leave out the ambient sound unless it adds to the story.
EDITING: Good job matching up the video to the voice over. Fixing the audio would improve the flow.
OVERALL: Good job overall. Next time consider the ambient sound and whether or not it helps the story, and avoid shooting people straight on.
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Date posted: March 8, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Town: South Windsor
Slug: "Tsunami Aid"
Status:Broadcast
Length: 49.69
DELIVERY: Good flow. Clear delivery.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices. Good interviews and introductions.
ORIGINALITY: Timely and newsworthy story.
WRITING: Good writing. Nice job setting up the story. You covered who, what, where, when, why, and how questions. Good details about the aid that was given.
VIDEO: Good choices throughout your story. Nice variety of shots. Always use a tripod. It was noticeable that you did not use one for some shots where the video was shaky. It would have been great to see people putting together the donations.
AUDIO: Good levels.
EDITING: Nice job matching your voice-over and your video.
OVERALL: Good work. Very good story. No major problems. Well done. Just remember to use your tripod at all times.
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Date posted: March 8, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Town: South Windsor
Slug: "Kinesiology-Alternative Medicine"
Status:Broadcast
Length: 49.87
DELIVERY: Very good delivery. Good pace and nice flow. Nice stand up. Good background choice, and good job dressing the part by being well dressed.
INTERVIEWS: Good interview choices and great introductions.
ORIGINALITY: Original story idea.
WRITING: Good job. You explained the medical practice, and what and how it helps. Is this a new practice? Is this news because it is a new form of medicine or it is less expensive or just a better way to cure some problems. Addressing some of those types of questions would make the story even stronger.
VIDEO: Nice shots. Great video of the patient's therapy and shots of diploma and diagrams.
AUDIO: Good levels throughout.
EDITING: Good job matching video and audio.
OVERALL: Interesting topic. Good job!
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Date posted: March 8, 2005
School: South Windsor High School
Town: South Windsor
Slug: "Relay for Life"
Status:Broadcast
Length: 49.10
DELIVERY: Very good. Nice pace and well spoken.
INTERVIEWS: Excellent! Great interview choices, especially the cancer survivor. That is how you pick a sound bite! Good introductions.
ORIGINALITY: Very original. Nice heartwarming story.
WRITING: Great writing! You covered all the questions and showed the positive results. Good job telling the history of the walk, talking about this walk and mixing in your interviews.
VIDEO: Great shots of the walk and of people having fun together.
AUDIO: Very good, but the interviews could have been a bit louder to match the other levels.
EDITING: Good. Great flow and excellent job matching video to the audio.
OVERALL: Great job overall! A very heartwarming story. Nice job putting it all together. Good story. We would have loved to hear how to get involved.
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Date posted: April 26, 2004
School: South Windsor High School
Town: South Windsor
Slug: "America's Army"
Status:Re-submit
Length: :46
DELIVERY: Good
INTERVIEWS: Suggestion: interview one of the army recruiters from town. They are always open to getting the message out to the public of their new programs. This would help explaining the benefits of the program from the Army's perspective but also give you additional b-roll from the Army office to help support your script.
ORIGINALITY: Good
WRITING: Good job writing into your sound bites and explaining the program.
VIDEO: More b-roll to support your story. We would like to see additional footage to support your story.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING:
OVERALL: The story needs to be :50 seconds in length from the moment the voice-over begins to the end of the stand-up. Please re-edit for the required length. Thank you.
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Date posted: April 26, 2004
School: South Windsor High School
Town: So. Windsor
Slug: "ATV Riding: Land Use and the Law"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good delivery and wrap-up ending stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices for interview subjects. Your second interview with the police officer added interesting information.
ORIGINALITY: Good
WRITING: Nice job getting the facts in for a little known sport. Be careful to stay impartial in your script. Your script opens with "many find conventional sports boring and therefore turn to ATV riding" – please don't assume ATV riders find conventional sports boring. This is something a sound bite can offer as a reason a particular person chooses to ride.
VIDEO: Good b-roll to support your script.
AUDIO: Good consistent levels throughout.
EDITING: Good job putting your elements together.
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Date posted: April 7, 2004
School: So. Windsor High School
Town: So. Windsor
Slug: "Alleviating Allergies Thru Hyponosis"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY (How is the voice used to tell the story [pitch, tone, diction]): Good voice-over and stand-up.
INTERVIEWS (Sound bites interesting and did they enhance the story?): Good choices
ORIGINALITY (Story creative, unique, statewide appeal?): Good, informative piece.
WRITING (Report written clearly, creatively, & grammatically correct?): Good
VIDEO (Pix illustrated the story? Tri-pod used, lighting, composition?): Good job getting supporting images for your story. Please use a tri-pod at all times to help keep your camera steady. Also, no pans, zooms, etc. – straight shots work best in a news story.
AUDIO (Clarity, natural sound, enhance the story?): Good consistent levels.
EDITING(Pictures and sound used in the proper sequence to tell a story? Pictures match the script?): Good job matching images to your script.
OVERALL(All the elements used to tell an interesting story for the viewer?):
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Date posted: April 7, 2004
School: So. Windsor High School
Town: So. Windsor
Slug: "Link Crew"
Status: "Broadcast"
Length: :49
DELIVERY: Good voice-over and stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices for your subjects and sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Interesting story.
WRITING: Good job covering the facts and writing into your sound bites. Question: is each freshman assigned an upper classman at the beginning of the year and is the "link" for the entire year? If so, a suggestion: your second interview with the freshman, include her upper classman helper to show the benefit to both the upper and younger student.
VIDEO: Good
AUDIO: Good consistent levels.
EDITING:Nice job matching your images to your script, especially in the intro for your first interview.
OVERALL Well done.
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Date posted: April 7, 2004
School: So. Windsor High School
Town: So. Windsor
Slug: "Creatine"
Status: re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: good on your voice-over and stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: You will need an interview from a medical professional covering the effects of the drug on young adults.
ORIGINALITY: good
WRITING: You will need to cover both sides of the issue. For many of our viewers this will be a new product and they would need to hear the positive as well as the negative effects of using this product. Currently, your piece supports the use of the product, a reporter must stay impartial to their subject.
VIDEO: Nice job getting a variation in your images.
AUDIO: Good consistent levels.
EDITING:
OVERALL: Please obtain a second interview with a medical professional and re-address your script. Thank you.
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Date posted: April 7, 2004
School: So. Windsor High School
Town: So. Windsor
Slug: "Teen Fitness"
Status: Broadcast – (L)
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Your voice-over was a little fast, try to slow down and speak as if you were talking to a friend. Good job on your stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Good first choice on interview subjects. Good choice of sound bites used to add information to your story.
ORIGINALITY: Good
WRITING:Good job getting your facts in and writing into your sound bites.
VIDEO: More b-roll with a variation of images is needed to support your script. Never re-use an image in a story. Suggestion: you are talking about over weight teens but we don't actually see any in your school. When shooting over weight kids, please shoot from the neck down, we want to embarrass anyone.
AUDIO: Good levels throughout.
EDITING: Please see the video note. More images are needed to support your script.
OVERALL:
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Date posted: April 7, 2004
School: So. Windsor High School
Town: So. Windsor
Slug: "West Nile Virus"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good voice-over and stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices. Suggestion: more of a sound bite from the two brothers who won the award.
ORIGINALITY: Good. It's nice to hear about Connecticut individuals succeeding on a National level.
WRITING: Good job getting the facts in.
VIDEO: Good variation of images to support your script.
AUDIO: Good consistent levels throughout.
EDITING: There should not be voice-over in your opening pad. This makes it very difficult to cut the Student News wrapper around your story. We need the story to be exactly :50 seconds from the moment the voice-over begins to the end of the stand-up. The beginning pad should only have nat sound.
OVERALL: Please re-edit with a different beginning pad. Do you have additional footage from your opening shot used with your voice-over that you could use in place of the separate image of the boys in the kitchen with their mom? In other words, let your opening shot run long, then start your voice-over a few seconds into the image.
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Date posted: April 2, 2004
School: So. Windsor High School
Town: So. Windsor
Slug: "Read Across America"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Very good delivery and stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Nice choice for interview subjects and your selection of sound bites used. Suggestion: a quick sound bite from one of the students who was in the audience.
ORIGINALITY: Good story with statewide appeal.
WRITING: Nice job getting your facts in as well as introducing your sound bites.
VIDEO: Overall, well done. Suggestion: a few more shots of the kids faces while listening to the story. Kids expressions are always a great way to tell what they are thinking.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING: Good job matching images to your script.
OVERALL: Well done story.
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Date posted: March 25, 2004
School: South Windsor High School
Town: South Windsor
Slug: School Starting Times
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good voice-over and stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Good 1st interview. We would like to see the second interview with a person of authority for the swim team IE: coach? Currently, you don't have facts to support your "serious jeopardy" statement you use to set up the negative effects.
ORIGINALITY: The sports take on the changing of school times is a good premises. Be careful to focus on one premise throughout your story.
WRITING: How much time are we talking about here: 10 minutes, 15 minutes, an hour? If it's just a few minutes then your second interview will sound like a drama queen. The extra time requested from the school board is needed.
Please be careful not to editorialize when writing your script. Focus on the facts. Also, be careful to focus on one story. You begin with the late time opening working for one school, then switch to the sports programs for another school. Does the first school have a swim team, how did they handle the time change? You'll need your entire :50 to cover the 5 W's and H for the one topic.
VIDEO: Good. Try to get plenty of b-roll so you want have to reuse any images.
AUDIO: Good, consistent levels.
EDITING: Nice job matching images to your script.
OVERALL We'll need you to give your script a once over to cover the 5 W's and H. Thanks.
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Evaluations for 2002-2003
Date:7/10/03
School: South Windsor High School
Town: South Windsor
Slug: CT Blood Supply
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good voice-over and stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Good interview choices and sound bites used.
ORIGINALITY: Good interesting story.
WRITING: Good job writing into your sound bites and covering the facts of the story.
VIDEO: Good variation in your images and nice job on framing some of your shots. Go ahead and get in close for your stand-ups. A stand-up is best as a medium or close-up, rarely as a wide.
AUDIO: Good consistent levels.
EDITING: Good
OVERALL Good job with a story that has statewide appeal.
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Date:7/3/03
School: So. Windsor High School
Town: So. Windsor
Slug: "Budget Crisis"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY (How is the voice used to tell the story [pitch, tone, diction]): Good voice-over delivery. Nice job placing your stand-up on the steps on the capital.
INTERVIEWS (Sound bites interesting and did they enhance the story?): Wonderful. You are the first Student News team to get an interview with the Governor Rowland.
ORIGINALITY (Story creative, unique, statewide appeal?): Good, current affairs story.
WRITING (Report written clearly, creatively, & grammatically correct?): Good job writing into and out of your sound bites.
VIDEO (Pix illustrated the story? Tri-pod used, lighting, composition?): Good b-roll to support your story.
AUDIO (Clarity, natural sound, enhance the story?): Good consistent levels.
EDITING(Pictures and sound used in the proper sequence to tell a story? Pictures match the script?): Good job matching your images to your script.
OVERALL(All the elements used to tell an interesting story for the viewer?): We applaud your professionalism and initiative in obtaining an interview with Governor Rowland.
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Date:7/3/03
School: So. Windsor H.S.
Town: So. Windsor
Slug: "Closed Captioning"
*The reporter is hearing impaired and has elected to insert close captioning on her
story – please be careful not to cover with the Fox 61 & WB 20 Student News wrappers
Status: Broadcast
Length: :48
DELIVERY: Good
INTERVIEWS: Good choices on your interviews and sound bites
ORIGINALITY: Good, interesting story.
WRITING: Good job writing into your sound bites and covering the facts.
VIDEO: Good variation on your b-roll
AUDIO: You have an overlap by a few frames of sound channels in your audio. Be careful when recording and recording.
EDITING: Good job matching images to your script.
OVERALL Well done.
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Date:7/3/03
School: So. Windsor High School
Town: So. Windsor
Slug: "Driving Distractions"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good
INTERVIEWS: Good choices and sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Good. Timely story.
WRITING: Good job covering the facts.
VIDEO: A few of your images are dark. When we dub down one more generation to air they will be even darker. Be careful with lighting. You have good establishing shots, don't forget to get plenty of medium and close-up images. Suggestions: when framing your interviews, go ahead and get in tight.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING: Good with the elements you had at hand.
OVERALL:
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Date:7/3/03
School: So. Windsor H. S.
Town:So. Windsor
Slug: "Patriotism in America"
Status:
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Your voice-over was a little fast. Please slow down.
INTERVIEWS: Good
ORIGINALITY: The story was a little unclear. What are the facts to support your premise?
WRITING: See originality. Remember to always answer the 5 W's and H (Who, What, When, Where, Why and How)
VIDEO: You have a nice variation in wide angle shots – more medium and close-ups will help move your story forward and make editing easier. Also, you speak of the ability of American's to protest and the increase of American's expressing that option, yet we don't see any images of local protests.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING: See above.
OVERALL: This is a hard subject to tackle in :50 seconds. You might want to rethink your premise and narrow your focus down to one subject: ie: more flags being bought in Connecticut, more protests being formed in Connecticut, etc. Then back-up your premise with facts and interviews.
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Date:7/3/03
School: So. Windsor High School
Town: So. Windsor
Slug: "Mentoring in Hartford"
Status:
Length: :50
DELIVERY (How is the voice used to tell the story [pitch, tone, diction]): Good
INTERVIEWS (Sound bites interesting and did they enhance the story?):Good interview choices
ORIGINALITY (Story creative, unique, statewide appeal?): Good, community story.
WRITING (Report written clearly, creatively, & grammatically correct?): Good job writing into your sound bites. Do the mentors have to go through a special training program to volunteer? Are the mentors assigned one child for the year? What is the typical length the mentors work in the program?
VIDEO (Pix illustrated the story? Tri-pod used, lighting, composition?): Good images of the kids in the classrooms. Suggestion: more images of the mentors working with their students to match up with the script.
AUDIO (Clarity, natural sound, enhance the story?): Good
EDITING(Pictures and sound used in the proper sequence to tell a story? Pictures match the script?): Okay. Try to have images to match with your script. IE: when mentioning the person who is mentoring we should see them at work with the kids before you cut away to the interview.
OVERALL(All the elements used to tell an interesting story for the viewer?): This is a wonderful start. You need more b-roll to support your story. Thanks.
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Date:7/3/03
School: So. Windsor H.S.
Town: So. Windsor
Slug: "Paint Ball Safety"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good voice-over and delivery.
INTERVIEWS: Good 1st interviews. Suggestion: currently both interviews give the same sound bite. Another point of view or someone to back-up your statement on statistics is needed. How about someone from the local hospital on the number of paint ball injuries seen this last year compared to contact sports.
ORIGINALITY: Good
WRITING: Good
VIDEO: Good b-roll for most of your script. Suggestion; when mentioning safety gear, show the gear, etc.
AUDIO: Good overall. Nice job getting nat sound from location and layering under your voice-over.
EDITING: good
OVERALL
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Date:7/3/03
School: So. Windsor H.S.
Town: So. Windsor
Slug: "Smart Chicken"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :49
DELIVERY: Good
INTERVIEWS: Good
ORIGINALITY: Interesting story
WRITING: Good job covering the facts
VIDEO: Good b-roll to support your script. In this story you would want to be careful not to represent one business over another. Big Y was prominently displayed several times in your story although the story wasn't about Big Y.
AUDIO: Your nat sound overpowers your voice-over through much of your story making it difficult to hear and understand the story.
EDITING:
OVERALL: This will need one more session in editing to fix the audio. Thanks.
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Date:7/3/03
School: So. Windsor High School
Town: South Windsor
Slug: "Read Across America Day"
Note: I've timed it at :51
seconds, can you cut :1 at the end?
Status: Broadcast
Length: :51
DELIVERY: Good voice over and stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices. Be careful that you pick the best of the sound bite from your interview to use in your story. You don't want any one sound bite to monopolize your story.
ORIGINALITY: Good community story.
WRITING: Good job writing into your sound bites and covering the facts.
VIDEO: Good b-roll used. Suggestion: image of the kids faces enjoying the story being read to them.
AUDIO: Good.
EDITING: Be careful of jump cuts. Also, this timed in at a little more then :1 second over in the length. Post production will end up cutting from your ending stand-up in-order to fit within the required time.
OVERALL: See video note.
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Date:7/3/03
School: So. Windsor H.S.
Town: So. Windsor
Slug: "No Child Left Behind"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good
INTERVIEWS: Good choices on interview subjects and sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Good, current affair story.
WRITING: Good job covering the facts and introducing your sound bites.
VIDEO: Good b-roll to support your script.
AUDIO: Good consistent levels.
EDITING: Be careful when editing. You have two places with several frames of black.
OVERALL: Well done overall.
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Date:7/3/03
School: So. Windsor High School
Town: So. Windsor
Slug: "Differences"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY (How is the voice used to tell the story [pitch, tone, diction]): Good voice over and stand-up.
INTERVIEWS (Sound bites interesting and did they enhance the story?):
ORIGINALITY (Story creative, unique, statewide appeal?): What is the news story?? Currently this is an opinion piece. Where are the facts?
WRITING (Report written clearly, creatively, & grammatically correct?): Once you have your premise remember to first answer the Who, What, When, Where, Why and How.
VIDEO (Pix illustrated the story? Tri-pod used, lighting, composition?): Good establishing shots and medium shots, don't forget to get plenty of close-ups when shooting your footage.
AUDIO (Clarity, natural sound, enhance the story?): Good
EDITING(Pictures and sound used in the proper sequence to tell a story? Pictures match the script?): Fine
OVERALL(All the elements used to tell an interesting story for the viewer?):
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Date:7/3/03
School: So. Windsor High School
Town: So. Windsor
Slug: "Service Learning at Wapping"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :49
DELIVERY: Be careful with the pacing and tone of your voice-over delivery. You want to sound like you are speaking with a friend or family member.
INTERVIEWS: Good choice on interview subjects and sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Good community story
WRITING: Well done. You covered the facts, wrote into and out of the sound bites and kept the pacing.
VIDEO: Good b-roll with nice medium and close-up images.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING: Be careful using swipes, you don't want to have any black appear. Keep the cuts clean without jump cuts.
OVERALL
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Date:7/3/03
School: South Windsor H.S.
Town: So. Windsor
Slug: "Big Business in a Small Town"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: the voice-over should flow at an even pace. Try to memorize your script before recording.
INTERVIEWS: This really needed a second interview with Stop-n-shop to keep this story impartial.
ORIGINALITY: This is a hard subject to tackle in :50 seconds. Good try.
WRITING:
VIDEO: Please use a tripod at all times! Also, more images are needed to support your premise. You speak of a new improved Stop-n-shop but the viewer is left wondering what the "new and improved is".
AUDIO: Good
EDITING: See video. Your images need to support all of your script.
OVERALL: Please don't use static images. If something happens to your stand-up you will need to go back to location and re-due. In an educational setting, always shoot several stand-ups just in-case.
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Date:7/3/03
School: So. Windsor High School
Town: So. Windsor
Slug: "Exchange Program Returns"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good voice-over. Well done on your stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices on your interviews and sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Good. Timely story.
WRITING: Good job writing into your sound bites and covering the facts. Note: How long will Alajandra be in the US. For the exchange program?
VIDEO: Good b-roll used to support your script.
AUDIO: Good consistent levels.
EDITING: Good job matching your images to your script and achieving a nice pacing to the story.
OVERALL: Well done.
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Date:7/3/03
School: So. Windsor High School
Town: So. Windsor
Slug: " Krispy Kreme in CT."
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good voice over and stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Good 1st interview. Suggestion: also get a customer at Dunkin Donutes
ORIGINALITY: Good
WRITING: A reporter needs to stay impartial at all times. Remember to stick to the facts: Who, What, When, Where, Why & How. Be careful with the words you choose in your script, "infamous" (meaning: having a bad reputation; notorious, shocking or disgraceful)
VIDEO: Good b-roll used to support your script.
AUDIO: Overall good. Suggestion: missed opportunity to get nat sound when inside Krisp Kreme's to lay under your voice-over during the images of the inside of Krispy Kremes.
EDITING: Good job matching your images to your script.
OVERALL:
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Date:7/3/03
School: So. Windsor High School
Town: So. Windsor
Slug: "Technology in Cafeterias"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good voice-over and stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices for your interviews and sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Interesting story which has been well executed in your script.
WRITING: Good
VIDEO: Please no pans, tilts or zooms. These film styles can be very disconcerting to a viewer and only used to get an emotion across ie: dramatic films and televisions, not in a news story. Also, what happen to your tri-pod that day, did you forget to check it out with the rest of the equipment?? The image of the first interview is very dark, when we dub this down one more generation to put the Fox 61 & WB 20 wrapper on it will be almost completely black.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING:
OVERALL: Overall you have a very interesting story with a well done script, voice-over and stand-up. Do you have any additional footage from the café without pans, just straight shots (establishing, medium and close-ups?) If you have the footage this just needs one more session in editing. Thanks.
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Date:7/3/03
School: So. Windsor High School
Town: So. Windsor
Slug: "Learning Center"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good voice-over and stand-up. Nice job placing your SIG-out in the midst of your story.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices and sound bites used.
ORIGINALITY: Good community story.
WRITING: Good job writing into and out of your sound bites.
VIDEO: Great job getting plenty of coverage.
AUDIO:
EDITING: Nice job laying down your images and matching to script, interviews and sound bites.
OVERALL: Well done!
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Date:7/3/03
School: South Windsor High School
Town:South Windsor
Slug: "JSF Fighter Jet"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY (How is the voice used to tell the story [pitch, tone, diction]): Good
INTERVIEWS (Sound bites interesting and did they enhance the story?): Good choices. Be careful not to cut the soundbite in midword/sentence. We were wondering what the airplane will service?
ORIGINALITY (Story creative, unique, statewide appeal?): Good, interesting story with statewide appeal.
WRITING (Report written clearly, creatively, & grammatically correct?): Good
VIDEO (Pix illustrated the story? Tri-pod used, lighting, composition?): In a Student News piece we would like the piece to incorporate mainly original footage shot by the student team. I have this story on hold until further information verifying you have obtain proper release agreements to air the borrowed footage on network television.
AUDIO (Clarity, natural sound, enhance the story?): Good consistent levels.
EDITING(Pictures and sound used in the proper sequence to tell a story? Pictures match the script?): Nice job matching the script to the images.
OVERALL(All the elements used to tell an interesting story for the viewer?): Please see video note. This was a well done story, but we will need to have a copy of your release to use the footage before we can air. Also, we are concerned with the amount of time the CPTV bug is shown on the lower third of the screen. This can be very confusing to our viewers. I guarantee CPTV will receive calls asking questions about the story because of the bug. Trust me, we receive calls and e-mails from viewers with questions concerning programming from other networks all the time!
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Date:7/2/03
School: So. Windsor High School
Town: So. Windsor
Slug: "Music Therapy"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
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OVERALL Great job tightening your story up and focusing on the music theme. Not many students would go back and re-work a story already slated for broadcast – we applaud your professionalism!
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