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Shelton High School
April 20, 2007
School: Shelton High School
Town: Shelton
Slug: "Shelton Tree's Big Day"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good.
INTERVIEWS: Good interview. First sound bite was great. Really added emotion to the story.
ORIGINALITY: Great job finding this story. Truly a newsworthy story.
WRITING: Nice job telling the story. Work on writing into the sound bites. Also, try to make the writing more conversational.
VIDEO: It would have been nice to see a picture of the tree before it was cut. If the family had a picture of it in their yard prior to being cut that would be another great visual. Also, it would have been good to have an "after" picture when the tree was up in Rockefeller Center. The couple probably attended the ceremony or at least had someone send them photos. The interview was WAY too dark!! Sky was light there was no light on their faces so the camera adjusts to focus on sky and they disappeared.
AUDIO: There was background noise in the stand up and the interviews.
EDITING: Good, but the story would have been much stronger with before and after photos.
OVERALL: The only reason this story can't be aired is because the interviews are way too dark. Ideally we would like to see the interviews re-shot. If it is possible to have them to say the same things and just record with better lighting it will be great. If you can't arrange that then using some stills of the couple next to the tree that could cover the interview it would work better than what you have now.
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Date: April 20, 2007
School: Shelton High School
Town: Shelton
Slug: "Future Fashion Designers"
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good. It seemed strange that the reporter was wearing the sweatshirt after talking about fashion. Dress as a reporter or more compatible to the story.
INTERVIEWS: Good choice to hear from a student. The second interview didn't add to the story.
ORIGINALITY: A focus would have improved the story. Students come up with some of the wackiest designs you've ever seen using recycled materials. One of the most creative classes you can take in high school. Valuable training for future careers. These all would make good topics.
WRITING: The writing needed to be more focus. There are some interesting ways to do this story but you didn't cover enough. Is this one of only a few schools that offers this program? If so are there documented results on its success. You said, "These kids are going to be working in the fashion industry". You needed a sound bite to back that up otherwise it is editorial.
VIDEO: There were a lot of medium shots. You need a better mix of tight and wide as well. There needed to be shots of the process of the designers. Show a student working on something and then a finished dress. Tight shots of someone working on it.
AUDIO: The interviews weren't on mic. Too hard to hear. The first girl was impossible to hear.
EDITING: Like to have seen the process. Shots of working on the project and then the after of the product.
OVERALL: The story really would have benefited from focus and better B-roll.
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Date: January 15, 2006
School: Shelton High School
Town: Shelton
Slug: "History Comes Alive"
Status: Broadcast
Length: 48.13
DELIVERY:
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EDITING:
OVERALL: Nice job re-editing and adding pad.
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Date: January 15, 2006
School: Shelton High School
Town: Shelton
Slug: "History Comes Alive"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 48.13
DELIVERY: Good energy. Nice job.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices, but be more selective on the sound bite from the student. If you want this to be a story about how great the teacher is, then find a sound bite reflects that.
ORIGINALITY: Good. Can be a nice submission for the Trantolo & Trantolo category.
WRITING: Try not to be repetitive in your word choices. You said classroom twice in the lead. Nice job explaining that the teacher is involved in this outside the class as well.
VIDEO: Good shots. To make it even better get some close ups. Some shots of a reenactment would have been great.
AUDIO: Nice job using natural sound. The levels were not balanced. Make sure the lift at the beginning is loud enough. Gun firing was great natural sound. The voiceover was way too low. Make sure levels are consistent. Use a mic for interviews.
EDITING: Nice job matching audio to video. Need to redo the v/o making it more powerful. Bring up the interview at the beginning, and don't edit over the interview. Started off great but by second interview it started to unravel. The second interview was talking over the voiceover.
OVERALL: Good story idea but need to re/do the voiceover make the sound levels more consistant. Also you need to add pad at the beginning and end of the story. If you got a sound bit from a student talking about the motivation or inspiration this teacher gives his students it would make this story a good contender for the Trantolo & Trantolo category.
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2005-2006 Evaluations
Date: April 4, 2006
School: Shelton High School
Town: Shelton
Slug: "Upcoming Music Scene"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Great. Good pace. Easy to understand.
INTERVIEWS: Excellent choices!
ORIGINALITY: Very original.
WRITING: Very good. Nice job covering all the questions. Great set up. Excellent question to the band.
VIDEO: Great! The video grabs the viewer's attention right from the start. Wonderful shots. It would have really added to the story if you had included shots of the audience. Nice framing of your interviews, but remember that the background matters. Don't set up an interview in front of a brick wall. Find a place to interview where the background ties in with the story.
AUDIO: Good use of natural sound. It wasn't overpowering and really added to the story.
EDITING: Good! Nice job cutting between shots. Remember you need 5 seconds of pad before the voiceover starts and 5 seconds of pad at the end after the voiceover/stand up ends. Without this pad post-production is very difficult.
OVERALL: Great job!
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Date: April 4, 2006
School: Shelton High School
Town: Shelton
Slug: "Arlington National Cemetery "
Status: Re-submit
Length: :49
DELIVERY: Practice your stand up so you are not reading it from a piece of paper in front of you. Make sure you are familiar with what you are going to say before you record it.
INTERVIEWS: Good choice. Nice job writing into the sound bite. It would have been nice to hear from a visitor as well.
ORIGINALITY: Okay.
WRITING: What is the hook? Is the focus the interviewee? Is it the seminar? Figure out what your hook is and write to it by answering who, what, where, when, why and how. Where is this seminar? Is it in Connecticut or at the Arlington National Cemetery? Also, be careful not to editorialize. You say it is hallowed ground, but it would be better to say many American's feel this hallowed ground.
VIDEO: More shots are needed. There is not enough B-roll. You need shots of the cemetery, the building, the audience, etc.
AUDIO: Good. Consistent levels.
EDITING: More shots will help the story and overall editing.
OVERALL: Nice idea for a story, but you need to focus your writing on the hook. Once you determine the hook find video to support it. Work on your writing and adding more B-roll.
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Evaluations for 2004-2005
Date: December 14, 2004
School: Shelton High School
Town: Shelton
Slug: "Shelton Flag Football League"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :49
DELIVERY: Slow down a bit with your voice over. It will help with annunciation. The VO was a little muffled.
INTERVIEWS: Who is your interviewee? We find out he's the coach after he first talks. Remember to write into the interview by introduce the interviewee and adding some information or paraphrasing their comments.
ORIGINALITY: The fact that the UCONN player was from the team helps make this story newsworthy. If you focus more on great players that have come from this league it will make the story stronger.
WRITING: Interesting facts. Try to rework the script to improve the flow of the story and focus on the hook.
VIDEO: Lots of good shots. There is a glitch at the beginning of the tape during shots of the football game.
AUDIO: Remember to use a mic when doing interviews. When you were talking to the coach we heard a lot of voices and wind that was distracting.
EDITING: If you introduce the coach before the interviews, rework your script a bit, and slow down the VO this will help with the editing and the flow of the story.
OVERALL: Nice try! Remember we need :5 seconds of video and natural sound pad at the beginning and end of the story for our production department to add the Fox 61 Student News wrapper onto the story. With out the wrapper we cannot broadcast your story. Once you rewrite this and work on the editing we would love to get this story on the air.
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Evaluations for 2002-2003
Date:7/2/03
School: Shelton High School
Town: Shelton
Slug: "Science Fair"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: A little fast – try to slow down in your voice-over.
INTERVIEWS: Good first interview. Suggestion: an interview with a student who has a project in the science fair or the winner of the science fair.
ORIGINALITY: Good
WRITING: Nice job.
VIDEO: Tri-pod at all times!!!! Also, do not use pans, tilts or pulls, news is a straight story telling technique. There should be a motivating reason to pan IE; moving from one location to another in the story. More b-roll is needed. It would be nice to see more medium and close-up shots of the actually science projects. Currently the majority of your footage is of the crowds, do you have any additional footage you could use??
AUDIO: The audio level in your voice-over is un-balanced. Try to always record your entire voice-over in one setting.
EDITING: See video. More close-ups with help your editing process run smoothly.
OVERALL: Please see notes on audio and video. If you have any additional footage of the actual science projects please re-edit and re-submit. Thank you.
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Date:7/2/03
School: Shelton High School
Town: Shelton
This is a re-submit
Slug: "Anniversary of Waffle Ball"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :48
DELIVERY:
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OVERALL: Wonderful job putting all your elements together.
Note: This is 48 seconds from voice-over to stand-up, please borrow from the beginning pad to make the required :50 second length.
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