Nonnewaug High School
March 14, 2008
Date Posted: March 14, 20008
School: Nonnewaug High School
Town: Woodbury
Slug: Karate
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good.
INTERVIEWS: Good sound bites. Nice job getting emotion. Good people to interview.
ORIGINALITY: Ok.
WRITING: Well written, but be careful not to make the story too commercial. The studio was mentioned quite a bit although the story seemed to be on karate in general.
VIDEO: Good. Nice action shots. Needed a few tight shots.
AUDIO: Nice use of natural sound. Good levels.
EDITING: Good. Flowed nicely.
OVERALL: Needs 5 second of b roll pad at the beginning and end of the story.
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Date Posted: April 13, 2005
School: Nonnewaug High School
Town: Woodbury
Slug: Ride for Rick
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 51.12
DELIVERY: Slow down a bit. It was hard to understand the voiceover when you were rushing through it. Nice stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Wow, a star. Nice job getting an interview from Conan. Excellent initiative. Great interviews. Good introductions and good sources. It would have really added to the story to have a quick sound bite from Rick himself.
ORIGINALITY: Very good. Definitely newsworthy.
WRITING: Very good writing. You have too much information to fit into 50 seconds. If you start out the story just saying "October 2004", instead of the full date and time, you will save a little time and not lose any important information.
VIDEO: Great footage. Lots of great shots. Plenty of material to work with. Nice job.
AUDIO: Good, but some of the ambient sound at the beginning could be brought down. With loud music and the fast delivery it made the voiceover hard to hear.
EDITING: Nice job. Flowed very well. Nice job showing Rick as you were talking about him.
OVERALL: Good story idea and great information. We really liked this story, but it has to be 50 seconds in length. We need this to be exactly 50 seconds from beginning of the voice-over to the end of the stand-up. Rewrite the script to get down to 50 seconds, bring down the ambient sound, and re-submit so that it can be broadcast and possibly considered for s nomination.
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Date posted: April 14, 2004
School: Nonnewaug High School
Town:Woodbury
Slug: "The Curtis House"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :48
DELIVERY (How is the voice used to tell the story [pitch, tone, diction]): Good voice-over and stand-up on location
INTERVIEWS (Sound bites interesting and did they enhance the story?): Good 1st interview. See Audio and Writing note.
ORIGINALITY (Story creative, unique, statewide appeal?): Good, interesting premise.
WRITING (Report written clearly, creatively, & grammatically correct?): The main focus of the story is the history behind the inn. Is it the oldest continuous operating Inn in Connecticut? Has any famous historical figures stopped off at the Inn? Any unusual historical facts would be wonderful to give the viewer a feeling for the uniqueness of the Inn.
VIDEO (Pix illustrated the story? Tri-pod used, lighting, composition?): More b-roll to show the exterior and interior of the Inn is needed to support your script.
AUDIO (Clarity, natural sound, enhance the story?): The nat sound overpowers your sound bites, especially during the second interview. We can not understand the chefs sound bite due to the level of background noise. As the story is really about the history of the Inn, you could cut the chefs sound bite and insert one from someone who knows the history of the place. IE: a local historian?
EDITING(Pictures and sound used in the proper sequence to tell a story? Pictures match the script?): Overall this is okay. We would have liked to see more images of the inn this would help match up the script to the images.
OVERALL(All the elements used to tell an interesting story for the viewer?): Please fix the sound levels and re-submit. Thanks.
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Date posted: April 14, 2004
School: Nonnewaug High School
Town: Woodbury
Slug: "Karate Kids"
Status: Broadcast (L)
Length: :49
DELIVERY: Good voice-over. Nice job doing your stand-up on location.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices for interview subjects and sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Good
WRITING: The main focus of your story is younger children are getting involved in this sport and the benefits to their development. Because this is your main story line, you should only mention the name of the Karate Academy when introducing the Karate teacher. We hear the academy's name three times as well as seeing their outside sign and their interior banner. By visually and verbally referencing the academy numerous times you are crossing the journalistic line into commercialism. Be careful when shooting images and writing your script.
VIDEO: Overall your images where well done. You had a nice variety of images to support your script. Be careful with the framing of your images and interview subjects, you don't want to leave empty space above their heads. Remember the rule of thirds when framing a shot. Also, more close-ups of the karate moves would help with the pacing of your editing.
AUDIO: Overall good. The audio on the Teachers sound bite is low, with the nat sound overpowering. Be careful when laying down the audio track.
EDITING: Good job matching images to the script as well as the sound bites.
OVERALL Interesting story with a lot of good elements put together.
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Date posted: April 14, 2004
School: Nonnewaug High School
Town: Woodbury
Slug: "The SMART Board"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :51
DELIVERY (How is the voice used to tell the story [pitch, tone, diction]): Good voice-over. Nice job on your ending stand-up – showing the technology being used helps the viewer have a better understanding of the new technology.
INTERVIEWS (Sound bites interesting and did they enhance the story?): Good 1st interview. The sound bites should enhance the story by adding information. We need to understand what the technology is before it can be determined that "every classroom should have one."
ORIGINALITY (Story creative, unique, statewide appeal?): Good, interesting topic. We would love to hear more about it.
WRITING (Report written clearly, creatively, & grammatically correct?):Please remember to answer the 5 W's and H. WHO, WHAT, WHEN, WHERE, WHY and HOW. We aren't sure What a "Smart Board" is and What it does and How it does it.
VIDEO (Pix illustrated the story? Tri-pod used, lighting, composition?): Overall your images are good. We are a little concerned that the image of the student yawning is staged. In a news story we can't have a staged image.
AUDIO (Clarity, natural sound, enhance the story?): Good
EDITING(Pictures and sound used in the proper sequence to tell a story? Pictures match the script?): Good
OVERALL(All the elements used to tell an interesting story for the viewer?): You are a little over the required :50 seconds in length. We really need the stories to be exactly :50 seconds in-order to fit the story within a 1 minute segment of air time. You will need to cut this down by 1 second and rethink the voice-over script to help explain the new technology. Thank you.
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Date posted: April 14, 2004
School: Nonnewaug High School
Town: Woodbury
Slug: "Hardings Trout Farm"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good voice over. Be careful when recording your voice-over that the mic is at chest level. If it's too close it will add static to your voice-over recording. We got a kick out of your ending stand-up. As a Student News project it's okay to improvise with the hand-held mic, but in a professional setting, probably not a wise choice. Also, there is no need to mention your cameraman in your stand-up. Although they are an integral part of your production, it is usually not done in a news story.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices for interview subjects and sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Interesting story with statewide appeal.
WRITING: Good job covering the facts. Question: when is the opening of fishing season?
VIDEO: Good supporting images for your script.
AUDIO: Your voice-over is a little difficult to understand. Good levels on the sound bites.
EDITING: Good job matching images to your script.
OVERALL Good job putting all your elements together.
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Date posted: April 14, 2004
School: Nonnewaug High School
Town: Woodbury
Slug: "Penguin Plunge"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good voice-over and stand-up delivery.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices for interview subjects and sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Good community story.
WRITING: Nice job getting the facts in of the event and writing into your sound bites.
VIDEO:Good variation in your b-roll to support your script. Suggestion: more medium and close-up images of the plungers.
AUDIO: Be careful your nat sound doesn't over power your voice-over. It is difficult to hear the intro for your second interview and the total amount raised at the event due to the nat sound from the crowd.
EDITING: Good job matching images to your script.
OVERALL: Well done putting all your images together.
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Date posted: April 14, 2004
School: Nonnewaug High School
Town: Woodbury
Slug: "Nutrition in School"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good ending stand-up. Please memorize your script before recording your voice-over, this will help with the flow of the voice-over.
INTERVIEWS: Good job getting an interview with the cafeteria director on the nutritional requirements.
ORIGINALITY: Good
WRITING: Journalist must stay impartial to their story subject and stick to the facts of the story. You will need proof that some schools don't meet the nutritional requirements set in place by law in-order to imply there are some schools in Connecticut that don't meet these regulations. If you have proof, we would love to hear about it and which schools aren't up to requirements. Is the premise of the story that schools are offering the variety to meet requirements, but students are choosing the snack foods over the nutritional alternatives? Once you have decided on a premise for your story, you then answer the 5 W's and H. Sometimes, your story's premise will change when you are researching your script.
VIDEO: Overall this is good. Be careful not to stage any shots. There is one image where chips are being pushed across a table to another student. This looks a little staged.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING: Good
OVERALL: Please give your script one more revision to answer the 5 W's & H: Who, What, When, Where, Why and How.
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Date posted: April 14, 2004
School: Nonnewaug High School
Town: Woodbury
Slug: "Women in the Fire Department"
Status: Re-submit due to length
Length: :50.31
DELIVERY: Good voice-over and on-location ending stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices on your interview subjects and sound bites used.
ORIGINALITY: Good, interesting story.
WRITING: Overall good. How many of the total # of firemen are women? How long have women been a part of the Woodbury station?
VIDEO: Good variation of images.
AUDIO: Be careful your nat sound doesn't overpower your voice-over. The nat sound needs to be lowered in places.
EDITING: The voice-over for the intro to the second interview sound bite is cut in mid word/sentence.
OVERALL: You are a little over in the :50 second requirement. I know half a second doesn't seem like a lot, but we need to put a pre-produced :10 second wrapper on the spot and it then runs in a 1-minute time spot. We need this to be exactly :50 seconds from the moment the voice-over begins to the end of your stand-up. Please give this one more edit to fix the intro to the second interview and the required time of :50 seconds. Thanks.
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Date posted: April 12, 2004
School: Nonnewaug High School
Town: Woodbury
Slug: "Eating Healthy"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good voice-over. Well done stand-up on location.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices for your sound bites. Suggestion: an interview with the school nutritionist to get their side of the story. What could they be doing to better plan their menu's and offer low cost alternatives.
ORIGINALITY: Nutrition offered in CT.schools is a timely story – good job.
WRITING: Good job covering the facts and introducing your sound bites within your script.
VIDEO: Nice job getting plenty of close-up images to support your script.
AUDIO: Good consistent sound levels.
EDITING: Good job matching your images with the script at a steady pace.
OVERALL: Well done putting all your elements together for a cohesive story.
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Date posted: April 12, 2004
School: Nonnewaug High School
Town: Woodbury
Slug: "Cheerleading Coach"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good job on the voice-over. Suggestion for your stand-up: place yourself on location at the practice of the cheerleading squad.
INTERVIEWS: Good interview choices. Good sound bite from the coach and student. Suggestion: a sound bite on how the coaches personal struggles has influenced the cheerleaders.
ORIGINALITY: Good premise.
WRITING: With only :50 seconds to tell a story you must remain focused on your story. This is a wonderful human interest story of a women who has gone through breast cancer and her influence on a group of young women. You mention that she was a representative from CT., but we are unsure if she won the coaching award. This is just a side note – the main point of the story is her courage to face breast cancer and still find the strength to make a difference and give of herself for your cheerleading squad. There is not enough time in :50 seconds to list the stats of the cheerleading squad.
VIDEO: Do you have any footage of the cheerleading squad without a lower third super. When we go to air, part of that super will be covered with the Fox 61 and WB 20 wrapper. Therefore we ask that no supers be on your footage.
AUDIO: Good use of nat sound in the beginning. Good consistent levels for voice-over and stand-up.
EDITING:
OVERALL: Please see video and writing.
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Evaluations for 2002-2003
Date:7/2/03
School: Nonnewaug High School
Town: Canton
Slug: "Blood Drive"
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49
DELIVERY: Good pacing. You take putting your self in the midst of your story for your stand-up to new levels! Go girl!
INTERVIEWS: Good choices
ORIGINALITY: Good
WRITING:Nice job covering the basic information and writing into your second sound bite.
VIDEO: Good b-roll. Good job starting wide and moving into your story with your images -- You had plenty of wide angle, medium and a few close-ups.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING: Good job putting your elements together and matching your script.
OVERALL:
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