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Newtown High School
June 28, 2007
Date posted: June 28, 2007
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Pole-Vaulting Dangers"
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good, but be careful of editorial. You say pole vaulting is rewarding, but you have to attribute that. For example, "According to students athletes pole vaulting is rewarding."
INTERVIEWS: Good. Nice interviews with both the pole-vaulting athlete and the coach.
ORIGINALITY: Very interesting story idea.
WRITING: Good. Why haven't there been any injuries?
VIDEO: Very good. Nice action shots.
AUDIO: Good issues.
EDITING: Good. The story flowed nicely but the athletes in the B-roll were all female, but the athlete interviewed was male. It would have been good to have shots of both so it flowed better.
OVERALL: Nice job.
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Date posted: June 28, 2007
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Eat the Notes"
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Playing the violin was a great way to add to the stand up, but do it first and then talk. We couldn't hear what the reporter was saying over the violin.
INTERVIEWS: Good choice of people to talk to. Write to the sound bites. They weren't set up. The interview could have fit better with the story if the sound bite discussed why the professionals were spending this time with the students.
ORIGINALITY: Good story choice.
WRITING: Focus was ok, but if the voiceovers lead into the lifts the writing would work better.
VIDEO: The lighting on the professional band member was way too dark. The rest of the video was good. Nice variety.
AUDIO: Couldn't hear the voiceover above the natural sound. Great idea to use it in the story, but it was too loud.
EDITING: Good. There was a hard cut between the voiceover and the sound bite. Just a little bit of space in between would make it sound a lot better
OVERALL: Next time work on the writing into your sound bites and make sure the natural sound levels don't overpower the voiceover.
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Date posted: June 28, 2007
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Child Survivor Speaks"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 51
DELIVERY: The opening voiceover was very hard to understand. Too rushed. That is what sets up the story and then you are lost because you didn't understand the beginning. The closing stand up
his delivery was inappropriate for the story. This is a serious subject manner and the stand up needs to match that. His demeanor and appearance need to match that. The reporter had a smirk and squinty eyes.
INTERVIEWS: Good sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Great story idea.
WRITING: Set up the interviews better so we can understand who is who.
VIDEO: Good.
AUDIO: Ok but always use a microphone. We couldn't hear him over the background noise in the stand up.
EDITING: There was a jump cut when we were looking at the holocaust survivor.
OVERALL: Re-do with better open and close to understand with a clearer voiceover. Fix the jump cut.
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Date posted: June 6, 2007
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Shooting Under Par"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good.
INTERVIEWS: The sound bite really didn't add to the story. It repeated what had been said in the voiceover and there was no emotion.
ORIGINALITY: There was not a news story here. When selecting your topic be sure that it is newsworthy. Just being a good golf course is not a story.
WRITING: There was way too much editorial! The story praised the golf course and really sounded more like an ad than a news story. You need to find a newsworthy hook. You mentioned that the golf team is 11-0. Maybe there is a story there. There are probably lots of fundraisers held at the course that could have been a good topic. Maybe the course offers special programs for disabled people. Find your hook and then write to it by answering who, what, where, why, when and how.
VIDEO: Nice variety of camera shots. A wide shot would have been a good addition. There was a bad pan of golf carts. Make sure there is a reason for the camera movement. The video was too dark on the stand up. We couldn't even see the face of the reporter.
AUDIO: Good. Nice job using a microphone. Good natural sound of the swing and the club hitting the golf ball, but it was in the pad not the story. Try to get it into the story.
EDITING: No issues.
OVERALL: The major issue is the writing. Work on finding a hook and writing to it. Other than the writing the only other major issue was the lighting on the stand up.
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Date posted: May 23, 2007
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Middlebury Madness"
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Pretty good but the annunciation at the top of the story was a little difficult to understand.
INTERVIEWS: Good person to interview. It would have been nice to hear from one of the paramedics too.
ORIGINALITY: Great story topic.
WRITING: Good idea and good job covering the basics. What was the temperature that day?
VIDEO: Good shots. Nice shot of the "No Swimming Beyond This Point" sign covered in snow. Clever way to open the story.
AUDIO: No major problems.
EDITING: Nice job matching up the video to the audio.
OVERALL: Very good story idea, good footage and editing.
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Date posted: May 23, 2007
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Psyched for Snow"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good. Nice enthusiasm.
INTERVIEWS: You pick a good person to interview, but her information didn't add to the story. Work on asking questions that will add emotion to the story. Why is this a good program for the students? Why does the school support it?
ORIGINALITY: There could be a few good story ideas here, but you didn't pick a strong hook. A ski club going on trips is not a story.
WRITING: You need to work on your story telling. Find the hook and write to it. Is ski club mostly snowboarders? That shift in interest could be a good hook. Do the students have to maintain a certain average to participate or go on trips? Maybe the school supports the club because it has been successful at keeping students grades up.
VIDEO: Nice shots. The B-roll at the end of the story as pad was great. It was a great point of view shot with really good natural sound. That should have been in the story!
AUDIO: Good. Nice job having a microphone on the interview and the stand up. There were some spots that the B-roll had natural sound up but it was just music or people talking. It was distracting.
EDITING: Nice idea to use B-roll to cover the jump cut but the way it was used disrupted the interview. Have the interview audio keep going and take out the natural sound of the B-roll to make it flow better. It would have been great to seen signs of blue, green and black trails to illustrate the different levels.
OVERALL: Right now this is not a news story. You need to find a hook and write to it by answering who, what, where, when, why and how. Work on the writing and re-submit.
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Date posted: May 23, 2007
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "No Snow Days"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good delivery in the voiceover, but it was difficult to understand the stand up.
INTERVIEWS: The shot of the operator was much too dark. We couldn't see his face. Use a light or shoot the interview outside. Good information from the interview.
ORIGINALITY: Good story choice.
WRITING: Good job getting facts about the snow and the season. This was the only ski area open where? CT, New England? Be specific. Nice job showing the ski resort's sign but also mention the name of the resort at the beginning of the story.
VIDEO: Nice mix of shots. The video was too dark on the operator's interview.
AUDIO: Always use a microphone. The interviews and stand up did not sound like they were on mic.
EDITING: Ok.
OVERALL: The operator's interview needs to be re-shot. It was too dark to air. Also, the stand up should be re-written. It was a nice idea to be clever, but saying "where skiers fall and snow doesn't," painted the resort in a bad light. It made it sound like they were the only location having this issue. It would have been better say, "this season skiers have been falling and snow hasn't" or attribute it, "some skiers here have been saying they've been falling because the snow hasn't".
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2005-2006 Evaluations
Date posted: April 27, 2006
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Music of the Future "
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Stand up was muffled. Work on better diction for a clearer delivery.
INTERVIEWS: Always introduce your interviews. We did not know who the man was. The sound bite was way too long. Edit the interview down to get a shorter sound bite and use some of the information he gave you in your writing. Another interview would have added to the story.
ORIGINALITY: Good topic.
WRITING: There was not enough writing. You could use most of his interview as your voiceover. Tell the story with the information and remember to answer who, what, where, when, why, and how. What is the hook of the story? Is it the impact of this new technology on the music industry or students? Determine the hook and write to it.
VIDEO: You needed to use a light for the interview. It was very dark. More B-roll was needed.
AUDIO: Great use of natural sound.
EDITING: More b-roll will help with overall editing. Nice job rolling footage over the interview.
OVERALL: Work on the writing. Speak to the hook and add more B-roll.
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Date posted: April 27, 2006
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Checks Menu"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50 (with pad of natural sound and video at start)
DELIVERY: Good. Nice wrap up in the stand up and good location.
INTERVIEWS: Always introduce your interviews. We didn't know who the people speaking are. It would have been interesting to hear from a student taking the class. The teacher would have been a great interview. You used an establishing shot and it would have written nicely into a sound bite at the beginning after you mention him.
ORIGINALITY: Good
WRITING: Ok. Creative wrap up line in the stand up. Does money go to charity? Remember to answer "why".
VIDEO: Great shots. Nice mix of close ups and long shots. Some other great shots would have been teachers getting the food or ordering.
AUDIO: Great use of natural sound right off the top! Watch your levels on the first interview. Ambient sound was way too loud.
EDITING: There was a bad cut in the second interview. Two people talking at the same time didn't make sense. The second interview had another sound bite within it. Very confusing.
OVERALL: Fix the glitch in the second interview and introduce your interviews. Work on adding some more information to the writing to answer why students participate in this class.
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Date posted: April 27, 2006
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "As Children Play, Students Learn"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Be sure you are comfortable with the script. A bit choppy. Do not chew gum on camera.
INTERVIEWS: Introduce your interviews. Who is talking? Either paraphrase or add info to the piece when you are writing into your interview. Be selective about sound bites you pick. They should really add to the story. We would have liked to have heard from a student who is taking the class. Good idea to interview one of the children in the daycare, but it was very hard to hear him.
ORIGINALITY: This could be newsworthy, but tell us why this class is unique. If this daycare is for teenagers who have kids but are still in high school that would be unique and a good story.
WRITING: Find the hook of the story and write to it. Who is the free day care for? Teachers? Open to town residents? Teen parents? Watch editorial in your writing. The reporter should be objective and not put their opinions in the writing. "Free day care really helps" and "they learn life long lessons" would be great clips from an interview or say, "Teen parents feel the free daycare really helps" or "Students feel they are learning life long lessons." Why are the students doing this? Answer the 5 W's and H (Who, What, When, Where, Why and How) with your script and sound bites. You need more writing to tell the story.
VIDEO: Good shots. Keep the shots steady.
AUDIO: Keep the ambient sound lower on interviews. It was way too loud. Always use a microphone.
EDITING: There were long pauses between voiceover and sound bites. Tighten up the editing. You needed more B-roll. Good thought to cover part of interview with footage. Be sure to match up the audio with the video.
OVERALL: Work on the writing and then tighten up the editing to match up with the script. Remember to always introduce your interviews. Also, keep the ambient sound lower on your interviews.
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Date posted: April 27, 2006
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Graphics Has Life Lessons"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: A bit hard to understand. Practice voiceover until you are comfortable
INTERVIEWS: Work on writing into your interview. Either paraphrase or add info to the piece when you are writing into your interview. The interview was too long. Select strong, short bites to support your story.
ORIGINALITY: You need to find the hook in this story. Find what makes this newsworthy. What is unique about this class? What makes this story interesting to people outside Newtown High School?
WRITING: The story needs more writing. Find the hook and cover the 5 W's and H (Who, What, When, Where, Why and How) with your script and sound bites.
VIDEO: Watch the lighting when indoors. The interview was dark. Use more shots.
AUDIO: Good levels.
EDITING: We were looking at the shot at the sink for a long time. Tighten up the editing and be sure to match up the video to the voiceover. More footage will help with overall editing process.
OVERALL: Find the hook and write to it. Add more footage and match it up to the voiceover. Select strong, short sound bites that add to the story.
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Date posted: April 27, 2006
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Behind the Scenes of Computer Repair"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 55
DELIVERY: A little flat. Use more energy. The stand up should have some information wrapping up the story if you are ending with it. Make sure you memorize it.
INTERVIEWS: Nice idea to go from bite to bite, but take shorter clips. Introduce your interviews. Either paraphrase or add info to the piece when you are writing into your interview. For example, "Mark Smith, Computer Technology teacher, hopes the knowledge
". The second interview was too long. Edit down to quick, strong bites. Use some of the information your interviewees give you in the voiceover writing.
ORIGINALITY: Try to think about why this is important to people outside the school. This will help you find the hook of the story.
WRITING: There needs to be more writing. What is the hook? Is this a successful business that does repairs outside school? Once you find the hook, write to it by answering who, what, where, when, why, and how. Those are the key pieces to every news story.
VIDEO: You need more shots. Show us students working on computers, putting together things, close ups of the mouse, typing, etc. Don't recycle shot in a 50 second piece. It's a short story so using the same shot is very noticeable.
AUDIO: Good levels.
EDITING: Adding more shots will help with overall editing. If you have an interview that is more than 5 seconds, roll footage over part of it so we are not looking at the same shot for too long. Match up the video the writing.
OVERALL: This story is too long. It needs to be 50 seconds from the start of the voiceover to the end of the stand up or voiceover in order to fit in our broadcast schedule. Work on adding more writing to answer all the questions and editing your interviews. Also, introduce the teacher. The audience will not know who he is unless you tell them.
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2003-2004 Evaluations
Date posted: November 23, 2004
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Sportscaster Dream"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY:
INTERVIEWS:
ORIGINALITY:
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VIDEO:
AUDIO:
EDITING:
OVERALL: Good job re-editing to accommodate the :50 length requirement. Note: after you finish your ending stand-up please stay in position for a few seconds to allow time for ending pad. You moved off your focus line right after signing off which makes the ending difficult to edit a wrapper on.
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Date posted: April 26, 2004
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Dry Cleaning Business"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY (How is the voice used to tell the story [pitch, tone, diction]): Good job on the voice-over delivery and ending stand-up.
INTERVIEWS (Sound bites interesting and did they enhance the story?): Good choices for interview subjects and the sound bites used.
ORIGINALITY (Story creative, unique, statewide appeal?): Interesting story with community appeal.
WRITING (Report written clearly, creatively, & grammatically correct?): Good job covering the facts to inform the viewers about the project and writing into your sound bites.
VIDEO (Pix illustrated the story? Tri-pod used, lighting, composition?): Good b-roll to support your script.
AUDIO (Clarity, natural sound, enhance the story?): Good consistent levels.
EDITING(Pictures and sound used in the proper sequence to tell a story? Pictures match the script?): Good job putting your elements together.
OVERALL(All the elements used to tell an interesting story for the viewer?): Well done.
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Date posted: April 26, 2004
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "From Yale to Hockey"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :49
DELIVERY: Good voice-over delivery and nice job placing your stand-up on location.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices for your subject.
ORIGINALITY: see writing.
WRITING: You need a "hook" for your story. "Why" should the audience care that this hockey player went to Yale. There are many ivy league hockey teams, with each player having a chance to play in the NHL. What makes Jeff Hamilton unique?
VIDEO: More b-roll is needed to support your script. Currently, you have only wide panning shots to support your voice-over. Please keep your camera steady (no pans) and get plenty of medium and close-up images.
AUDIO: Good consistent levels.
EDITING: Please see video note. With more variation of images editing will be easier and your piece will move at a fast pace.
OVERALL: Please re-think your script and re-edit with more images. Thanks.
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Date posted: April 14, 2004
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Sportscaster Dream"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :45
DELIVERY: Good delivery and stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices for your interviews and sound bites used.
ORIGINALITY: Good
WRITING: Nice job writing into your sound bites. Be careful to cover all the important questions in your script. "How and Why" did he get his big shot? Don't assume the audience knows about the "sportcaster wannabe" promotion and that he was a winner.
VIDEO: Nice job with b-roll to support your script. Suggestion: be careful when filming interiors your stand-up is very dark.
AUDIO: Good consistent levels throughout.
EDITING: Nice job putting your elements together.
OVERALL: We time a story from the moment the voice-over begins to the end of the stand-up. Currently, your story is running at :45 seconds, we need it to be exactly :50 seconds in length. Please take a look at your script and re-edit to a :50 second story.
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Date posted: April 14, 2004
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Toy Library"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good voice-over delivery. Good job placing your stand-up on location. Remember to smile in your stand-up, this is suppose to be fun!
INTERVIEWS: Good choices for interview subjects and sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Good subject with community appeal.
WRITING: Good job getting the facts in and writing into your sound bite.
VIDEO: Good b-roll to support your script. Be careful not to stage any footage in a news story. We are a little concerned your initial library shot is staged. You only needed a shot of a library with people in it, not necessarily taking a book from a rack.
AUDIO: Good consistent levels through out.
EDITING: Good job putting all your elements together.
OVERALL: Well done package.
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Evaluations for 2002-2003
Date:7/10/03
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Hotter Than Heck"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY (How is the voice used to tell the story [pitch, tone, diction]): Good delivery, Creative stand-up.
INTERVIEWS (Sound bites interesting and did they enhance the story?): Good choices on subjects and sound bites used.
ORIGINALITY (Story creative, unique, statewide appeal?): Good.
WRITING (Report written clearly, creatively, & grammatically correct?): Good. Makes us want to go to the 3rd Festival.
VIDEO (Pix illustrated the story? Tri-pod used, lighting, composition?): Good variation on your images. Good job getting plenty of close-ups.
AUDIO (Clarity, natural sound, enhance the story?): Good consistent levels. Nice job laying down nat sound throughout.
EDITING(Pictures and sound used in the proper sequence to tell a story? Pictures match the script?): Good
OVERALL(All the elements used to tell an interesting story for the viewer?): Well done story.
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Date:7/10/03
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Monster Museum"
Status: re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good delivery and stand-up
INTERVIEWS: Good interview subject
ORIGINALITY: Interesting concept with statewide appeal.
WRITING:The script is confusing as it is currently written. You need to tie together the pieces you have. Questions to help: is the day at the movies to raise money to open the museum. Be clear about this. Is the theater donating space and a portion or all of the proceeds go the fund. Has the museum reached it's goal or are do they still have a ways to go. Has the museum already purchased the home to host the museum or it is their intention to purchase the home once the money is raised? Is there an estimated date of the opening?
VIDEO: Good
AUDIO: Good
EDITING: Good
OVERALL: See over-all. This is definitely heading in the right direction, it just needs to be tweaked.
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Date:7/10/03
School: Newtown H.S.
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Phantom Band"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: A little fast on your voice-over delivery, which made the dialog hard to understand. Remember to memorize your script, then smile while recording your voice-over. This will ad energy to your delivery without adding speed. Nice stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Good interview with the professor.
ORIGINALITY: Interesting story well done.
WRITING: Good and creative job
VIDEO: The images are too dark for us to dub down one more generation for air. Be careful when shooting images indoors. You will need a natural light source or bring in professional lighting equipment. Also, you have a nice selection of medium shots don't forget to get plenty of close-ups.
AUDIO: Good. Especially well done on the nat. sound.
EDITING: Good
OVERALL: Well done story. Unfortunately, we won't be able to air the story due to the images. Once we dub one more generation in-order to air, the images would be almost completely black.
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Date:7/3/03
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Self Defense"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good delivery on the voice-over and stand-up. Note: don't forget to smile this is suppose to be fun!
INTERVIEWS: good choices on your interviews and sound bites used.
ORIGINALITY: Interesting story with state-wide appeal.
WRITING: Nice job covering the facts and writing into and out of your sound bites. Just curious: Is this a one day session in self defense or a class which takes place over several weeks?
VIDEO: Good b-roll used to support your script. Suggestion: currently all your shots are wide and medium don't forget to get a few close-ups in the can when your on location.
AUDIO: good
EDITING: Good
OVERALL: this was a well done piece. Nice job.
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Date:7/3/03
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Sculptor"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Okay. Try to smile when recording your voice-over. This will add energy and pacing to your story without adding speed.
INTERVIEWS: Good sound bites used. Just curious Does James' work sell in local galleries? A second interview with a patron or gallery owners view of James work would have been interesting not necessary, but interesting.
ORIGINALITY: Good
WRITING: Nice job writing into the sound bites and covering the facts
VIDEO: Good variation in your images.
AUDIO: Good consistent levels.
EDITING: Overall good job matching your images to your script and achieving a nice pace to your piece.
OVERALL : Well done.
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Date:7/3/03
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Toys from Thin Air"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Well done voice-over and stand-up. It is nice to see the Newtown H.S. reporters professional appearance and effort put into your stories.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices on the interviews and sound bites used.
ORIGINALITY: Interesting story with statewide appeal.
WRITING: Oops, you forgot the "WHERE"! I believe you mention "Monroe" at the end of your stand-up but we weren't sure. This is a wonderful story highlighting Connecticut business but we have to assume it's in Connecticut??
VIDEO: Good b-roll used to support your script. Nice job framing many of the images great tight shots used.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING: Well done.
OVERALL:
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Date:7/2/03
School: Newtown High School
Town: Newtown
Slug: "Penguin Plunge"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good
INTERVIEWS: Good
ORIGINALITY: Nice story with statewide appeal.
WRITING: Great job writing into and out of your sound bites
VIDEO: Good. Don't forget the medium and close-up shots they will make editing easier.
AUDIO: Good.
EDITING: Good
OVERALL: Nice job putting all the elements together. Note: hold your stand-up at the end the penguin can still take the "plunge", but you should stay in frame. Also note: please make a clean place for us to cut the :50 seconds and place the wrapper. We are going to have to cut the penguin in mid stride.
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Date:7/2/03
School: Newtown High School
Town: Newtown
Slug: "Birds at Shepaug Dam"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: A little fast
INTERVIEWS: Good
ORIGINALITY: Good. Interesting story.
WRITING: Nice job
VIDEO: Nice job in the framing in your b-roll and interview subjects. Be careful in shooting into light sources (ie: windows)
AUDIO: Overall good. Be careful not to hold the mic too close to your mouth this distorts the sound.
EDITING: Good
OVERALL Good job putting all your elements together. It was a pleasure to view the submissions from your school.
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Date:7/2/03
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Blind Student"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good
INTERVIEWS: Good choices
ORIGINALITY: Interesting story. Note: ask yourself "what is the hook of your story?"
WRITING: Good job writing into your sound bites/interviews.
VIDEO: Remember the rule of 3rds when framing your images. Your interview shots and stand-up are shot very dark. When we dub this down one more generation in-order to put the Fox 61 and WB 20 wrappers on the images will be almost completely black.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING:
OVERALL: Unfortunately, due to the dark images we will not be able to air this story. If you have additional footage, wonderful. Thank you.
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Date:7/2/03
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Mother Puckers"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good delivery Nice job on your stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices. Note: we had a hard time understanding the child in the stands be careful with your soundbites.
ORIGINALITY: Interesting story.
WRITING: Overall good. A few questions came to mind: Who do they play against? Is there a league of women hockey players?
VIDEO: More variation in your footage would help with the pacing in the story. Currently, most of your images are wide angle. How about medium and close-ups!
AUDIO: Good job mixing the nat sound into your story.
EDITING: See video
OVERALL: Overall your team did a nice job.
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Date:7/2/03
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Cartoon Museum"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good job on your delivery. Suggestion: tighten-up the shot of your stand-up to bring the reporter more into the story.
INTERVIEWS: Good choice on your interview and sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Good Interesting story I'd like to visit!
WRITING: Nice job covering the facts and writing into your sound bite.
VIDEO: Nice job getting a variation of shots especially the close-ups. Not always easy to do.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING: Good job matching your images to the script.
OVERALL: Well done.
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Date:7/2/03
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "Paranormal Investigator"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Nice job on the pacing of your voice-over and stand-up. Be careful to pronunciate clearly throughout. We listened to the story several times but still could not be sure of John's last name.
INTERVIEWS: Good. Suggestion: anyone who has used John's services.
ORIGINALITY: Good. 1st time we've seen this one!
WRITING: We realize it is difficult to fit all the information into a :50 second story. A few questions came to mind: Did John have to go to any special training to do his job? Who was the Demon Ghost, we assume John is no longer talking about his grandfather but it isn't clear. Be careful to write into and out of each interview especially if the sound bite is significant to the story.
VIDEO: Good variation in your b-roll.
AUDIO: Good consistent levels.
EDITING: Good job matching your images to your script.
OVERALL: On a side note: be careful to hold your stand-up at the end. You move very quickly out of your poise. It will make it difficult to get a clean cut to edit the wrapper on.
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Date:7/2/03
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: Newtown Police Academy
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good
INTERVIEWS: Good choices and sound bites
ORIGINALITY: Good, interesting story.
WRITING: Good job writing into your sound bites and answering the basic Who, What, When, Where, Why and How.
VIDEO: Good variation of shots. In a perfect world: a suggestion: in some of the shots as well as the stand-up the framing could be tightened up. Also, getting images of a student riding in or getting into a patrol car.
AUDIO: good consistent levels.
EDITING: Good
OVERALL
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Date:7/2/03
School: Newtown High School
Town: Sandy Hook
Slug: "NHS Blood Drive
Status: Broadcast
Length: :48
DELIVERY: Good voice-over. Nice job doing your stand-up in the midst of your story.
INTERVIEWS: Good
ORIGINALITY: Good story with statewide appeal.
WRITING: Good job writing into your sound bites and covering the facts. Note: make sure each of your sound bites adds to the story and moves it forward.
VIDEO: Good b-roll. Suggestion: remember to get plenty of variation in your footage don't forget the close-ups. Good job in framing tight on your interviews.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING: See video.
OVERALL: Be careful with the timing on your stories. This came in at ;48 seconds from beginning of the voice-over to end of the stand-up. We will try to borrow from your opening pad but the pad did not include nat sound.
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