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Joseph Foran High School
March 18, 2008
Date Posted: March 18, 2008
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Horse Controversy
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Very good. Clear and well paced. Nice location for the stand up.
INTERVIEWS: Nice location for the interviews. Good sound bites and people to talk to.
ORIGINALITY: Interesting.
WRITING: Very good. Nice job setting up the story and supporting with good information.
VIDEO: Great footage. Nice job using a variety of angels and shots.
AUDIO: Sound on first interview was a little low.
EDITING: Good work. Story flowed very well.
OVERALL: Interesting news story. Well written and edited. Good job!
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Date Posted: March 14, 2008
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Life In Afghanistan
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Clear and well paced.
INTERVIEWS: Great sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Excellent.
WRITING: Nice job telling the story. Explained who she was, what she learned and how she is sharing that. Good job staying on topic.
VIDEO: Nice use of stills. Really helped tell the story.
AUDIO: The sound level dropped on the stand up. Otherwise good.
EDITING: Good. Story flowed nicely. Nice mix of stills and event footage.
OVERALL: Interesting story. Need 5 seconds of pad on the beginning and end of the story. Lack of pad makes it very difficult to edit in post-production.
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Date Posted: March 12, 2008
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Language Club
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49
DELIVERY: Excellent tone and delivery. Good energy.
INTERVIEWS: Good sound bites. Good choices for people to talk to.
ORIGINALITY: Great.
WRITING: Excellent. Using the languages at the start was a nice touch. Excellent writing into the sound bites.
VIDEO: Video was well composed. Nice variety of shots. Should have used a tripod for steadier b roll shots. Interview shots were well composed.
AUDIO: Consistant levels.
EDITING: Good job editing. Perhaps the exteriors of the school at the start were unneeded. There is no lead out video.
OVERALL: Overall an excellent effort, however the lack of steady shots takes away from the story.
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Date Posted: May 1, 2007
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Young Wrestlers
Status: Re-Submit
Length: N/A
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OVERALL: The DVD wouldn't play. Please resubmit a new disc.
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Date Posted: May 1, 2007
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Connecticut State Roads
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50 (with pad at end)
DELIVERY: OK
INTERVIEWS: The sound bites didn't really add to story. They stated an opinion but didn't give any reasons to back it up. They should say why they agree or disagree.
ORIGINALITY: Good story idea.
WRITING: Why is this new mixture good or bad? Is it better fore the environment or driving? Is the story about having to choose between doing something good for the environment or making the roads safer? If that were the hook then getting interviews from people with opposing viewpoints would have been great. The writing into the interview was repetitive. What problems was the old mix causing? Why is it changing?
VIDEO: We never saw the mixture for the road. Show a barrel of it. The reporter could have picked up a handful to show it in the stand up.
AUDIO: Not on mic. There was too much background noise.
EDITING: You needed to show the new mixture and the old mixture. It would have been great to see it being spread on road.
OVERALL: Think about the shots you'll need and if you'll be able to get them. There is a good story here but you didn't tell it. You need to write to the hook and answer the questions. Show both mixes.
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Date Posted: May 1, 2007
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: High Wattage
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 55
DELIVERY: Nice job. Good location for stand up.
INTERVIEWS: Good sound bite.
ORIGINALITY: It was ok, but a better story to look at would be why is this church so popular.
WRITING: Instead of saying "local church" say the name of the town so other people in CT know where it is. The story a lot of unanswered questions.
VIDEO: Nice mix of meaningful shots.
AUDIO: Good.
EDITING: Well illustrated. Great job showing what you were talking about. It would have been great to see people going into theater for church to establish the location. Nice shots of the church in service.
OVERALL: A better hook would have been why is this church so popular, but with the story you picked you did a good job covering it. You could use the same video and back up the story with information on the parking issues, but a better focus would be WHY it is so well attended. If the pastor is the reason the church is so popular we should have heard from one of the parishioners. Are there any solutions to the parking issues? The story is too long. It is 55 seconds and needs to be 50 to fit into our broadcast schedule.
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Date Posted: April 20, 2007
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Nicholas Art
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 51
DELIVERY: Ok. The stand up could have had more energy.
INTERVIEWS: Good sound bite from the child. Good idea to hear from someone who knows him.
ORIGINALITY: Interesting story idea.
WRITING: Well written. Did the child have a big part in the movie? If he had a significant role it would have been important to mention. Tell us what is next for the child? More movies or taking time to be a kid in Milford? The writing into the stand up was a bit awkward. Instead of using it as part of the voiceover it could have been in the stand up.
VIDEO: It was a tough story to show video for and you did a good job.
AUDIO: There was a lot of background noise in the story. The mic placement needed to be closer to the subject.
EDITING: Good. What building was shown? That shot didn't seem to fit with the story.
OVERALL: It was an interesting story but has to be 50 seconds to fit in our broadcast schedule.
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Date Posted: April 20, 2007
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: John Down's House Restoration
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Ok.
INTERVIEWS: Good people to talk to, but the sound bites would have been better if they were answering why and not what. Tell us why it is interesting? Why do you want to live in historic houses? Who is the first person being interviewed? Why not talk to the buyer? It is not necessary to list other historic houses in town unless you have facts (ex. age of house, who lived there, something happened). The first sound bite didn't add to the story. It's obvious that someone wants to live there or is interested. Tell us why they want to live there or why they are so interested.
ORIGINALITY: Good story idea.
WRITING: The why was missing. Tell us why it is important.
VIDEO: Nice tight shot of the plaque. There were only wide shots of the houses. There should be close ups of the detail of what makes these houses worth preserving. Show the great craftsmanship. If they are important because of who lived there, then talk about them and show photos. There were a few meaningless pans.
AUDIO: There was a lot of background noise in the interviews. It was very distracting. The voiceover, stand up and interviews were all off microphone. The camera mic picks up too much background noise. The mic needs to be within a foot of person talking. If it is noisy then even closer is better. The audio was understandable but distracting.
EDITING: You used cutaways between lifts instead of over them. Made it look very jumpy.
OVERALL: Good story idea, but work on making the story crisper.
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2005-2006 Evaluations
Date Posted: June 27, 2006
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Organic Garden
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50 (use pad at the beginning)
DELIVERY: A bit soft. No energy. Don't pop you P's. Be careful not to get to close to the microphone when recording the voiceover to avoid popping your P's.
INTERVIEWS: Good interviews, but you need to get the other side as well. The story was unbalanced with out an interview from the other side.
ORIGINALITY: Very good local story.
WRITING: Nice job writing into the interviews. You never covered why this is happening. Use more facts in the story. When was this proposed? When is the move to take place? How long has this been an issue? A lot of unanswered questions.
VIDEO: Good shots of the garden, but would we would have liked to see people gardening. Also, some shots of food that is being grown. There was not enough B-roll. Watch the lighting. Too many shadows on the interviewees.
AUDIO: Ok.
EDITING: More b-roll will help with overall editing.
OVERALL: Work on delivery, add more b-roll and add another interview.
Evaluations: 2005/2006
Date Posted: April 12, 2006
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Fire Tower
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: A bit rushed. Relax a bit and it will help with the flow of the delivery. The stand up should summarize the story in some way and not just tag out with the location and reporter's name. Creative stand up location, but it was very hard to see the reporter. If you started with a tighter shot and zoomed out or started wide and zoom in, we would see the location and still see the reporter.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices and sound bites. Good location for interviews. Nice job writing into the interviews. Very thought out.
ORIGINALITY: Ok.
WRITING: Make sure you cover all questions. What is a fire tower? We were not aware that a tower is a fire truck. It took us a couple times of viewing this to catch that. The viewer only sees this once so you need to be sure to define this to the audience. Why did they get it? Are they covering a larger area or were the old trucks greatly out dated? How did they manage to purchase a new one?
VIDEO: Good shots. Nice variety.
AUDIO: Use a microphone at all times. Your stand up was very low. Natural sound from the fire engine would have really added.
EDITING: A lot of editing glitches. Be careful of your edits. They should be much tighter. Work on sharp cuts.
OVERALL: Work on sharper cuts. Editing glitches are very distracting to a viewer. Also, work on covering all important questions in your writing. Tighten up the story and re-submit.
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Date Posted: April 12, 2006
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Lead in the Art Room
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: A bit fast in the beginning. Slow down for better clarity.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices. Great interview with the student. The sound bite really captured her frustration with the issue. You didn't need both sound bites from the teacher. The second bite from the teacher was probably enough and then you could use that extra time to add to information to your voiceover.
ORIGINALITY: Lead toxins being found in a school is a newsworthy topic.
WRITING: Needs some work. What was the cause of the lead? What is being done to make sure it doesn't happen again? Be sure you answer all the important questions. The most important question left unanswered was the cause of the toxins? Was it in the paint on the walls of the classroom or in materials being used for the class?
VIDEO: Think about the location of your interview. The second interview was in front of a bare wall. It would be much more interesting with a background that tied into the story. Need much more B-roll. Footage of clean up would really add to the story. The interviews should have had some B-roll over them.
AUDIO: Use a microphone! Too much ambient sound. The camera mic picks up too much background noise.
EDITING: Huge glitch in the middle. Editing needs to be tighter. There was not enough footage for smooth editing.
OVERALL: Add more B-roll to the story. This will help with overall editing problems. Tie up the lose ends in the writing. Make sure we know the key information to the story.
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Date Posted: April 12, 2006
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: World Language Week
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good job. Easy to follow. Could have used ending v/o sentence as part of your stand up. The stand up should summarize the story in some way and not just tag out with the location and reporter's name.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices.
ORIGINALITY: Unique story.
WRITING: Good job. Cover all the questions. Creative.
VIDEO: Good job on the action video. Reaction shots from the crowd would have really added! Clean your camera lens before shooting. There was a smudge on a lot of the footage. Watch lighting on the stand up. Always use a tripod. There were some very shaky shots.
AUDIO: Natural sound of the fighting would have added to piece.
EDITING: Nice job.
OVERALL: Good work.
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Date Posted: April 12, 2006
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Milford's Triathlon
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good. Easy to follow.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices. An interview with a committee member that is working on bringing in the triathlon would have really added to the piece. That interview could have replaced the mayor's sound bite since it would have fit better with the story.
ORIGINALITY: Ok.
WRITING: Be sure to cover all the questions. When is it expected to take place? This year? How is the triathlon being brought to Milford? That question wasn't answered. An interview with a committee member would have helped answer that. The writing into the interview could use some work. The voice over says that she thinks Milford is a good place for a triathlon and then her interview says it the same way. Some rewording would make it sound less redundant.
VIDEO: Need more B-roll. It is a bit hard to get footage because the event has not yet occurred but some shots of people training would have worked. An establishing shot of the athlete putting on her sneakers or working out on a weight machine. Shots of biking, swimming, weight rooms, etc. would have really helped the story.
AUDIO: Use a mic on interviews. The first interview was hard to understand. The camera mic picks up way too much background noise.
EDITING: Ok. More footage will help with editing and the overall flow of the story.
OVERALL: Good story but a bit more footage and tightening up the writing would greatly improve the story overall.
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Date Posted: April 12, 2006
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Art Room Safety
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good pace and clarity.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices and bites. Principal's sound bite was way too long. Cut down on sound bite and use the time to add to your writing. Use b-roll to cover some of interviews.
ORIGINALITY: Newsworthy story.
WRITING: How and when was this discovered? When will the issue be resolved? What is being done to ensure it doesn't happen again? How did the mistake occur? Did people get sick? Be sure to cover basic questions.
VIDEO: Very good shots. You just need more. Great shot of the yellow tape, sign of room closed. More b-roll would help. Show the roll cart that art teacher discussed.
AUDIO: Good levels.
EDITING: Nice job. Good job cutting between shots. To make it even better add b-roll over interviews.
OVERALL: Great start for a story. Work on the writing and resubmit.
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2004-2005 Evaluations
Date Posted: May 16, 2005
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Tsunami Relief
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 49.75
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OVERALL: Nice try. Better cuts from interview to stand up. It is still choppy at the end though. There are a lot of minor problems that disrupt the flow of the story. Please work on smoother editing at the end of the story.
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Date Posted: April 25, 2005
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Walking Again
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49
DELIVERY: Good.
INTERVIEWS: Great job getting three interviews in. Good interview choices. They really added to the story. It would have been better to have the father's interview toward the end. He talks about being excited, but we don't hear until later in the story of John's progress.
ORIGINALITY: Good idea.
WRITING: Good hook to the story. Nice job specified his goal and how he is working to get there. What life-threatening event caused him to lose his legs? Briefly mention this so that the viewer has some background. It will set up the story.
VIDEO: Great shots. Good footage of John walking and working on his rehab. Work on framing your interviews. John's head was cut off. Also, your stand-up, you were real small in the corner. Try tightening up your shot.
AUDIO: Use a microphone not a camera mic for your interviews and stand-up. Interviews were louder than the voiceover.
EDITING: Good, however the interview with the father was cut off a bit too soon. There was a long pause before your stand-up that disrupted the flow. Try to keep a nice pace throughout the story.
OVERALL: Nice job telling the story. Next time be more careful with your audio and editing.
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Date Posted: April 25, 2005
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: The New Milford
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 49.53
DELIVERY: Pretty good, but a bit too fast at points.
INTERVIEWS: Good interviews. It would have been good to hear from someone who is important in town the mayor or someone in city council.
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WRITING: What is the hook? What makes it newsworthy? Is the restaurant complex a new construction? If so has it brought more jobs to town? It's a great town, but you need to find your focus so that you can really grab the viewer's attention.
VIDEO: More footage would really add to your story. Any footage of people eating at the restaurants, live music, or people shopping? Remember to always use a tripod.
AUDIO: Muffled at times. Make sure you always use a microphone.
EDITING: Work on smooth sharp cuts from shot to shot. There were some glitches. The video did not match up with the script. Make sure when you are referring to a specific restaurant that it is the one being shown.
OVERALL: Find your hook and write to it. Determine what is newsworthy about this place then answer who, what, where, when, why and how. Get some more footage of the place that shows the liveliness of the area. Then focus on smooth editing.
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Date Posted: April 25, 2005
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: World Language Week
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.20
DELIVERY: Good pace and clarity. Creative stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Great choices and introductions. Good information from the teacher. She really addressed why and how World Language Week came to be.
ORIGINALITY: Unique idea.
WRITING: Well written. Good job covering who, what, where, why, when and how.
VIDEO: Lots of great shots. Nice job.
AUDIO: Good.
EDITING: Good, but there were some minor problems. The last part of your voiceover was cut off when you went into your stand-up. Also, the sequence may have worked better if you put the second interview after you mention the activities offered during the week. She mentioned that she like Salsa dancing but we didn't really know what she was talking about until the next segment.
OVERALL: Good job.
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Date Posted: April 25, 2005
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Tsunami Relief
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Length: 49.75
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Date Posted: April 25, 2005
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Slug: John Tartaglio's Rehabilation
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.35
DELIVERY: Delivery was pretty good, but the choppiness of the editing made it very jumpy though. The inconsistent audio levels also slowed down the pace.
INTERVIEWS: Great choices. Good information and nice introductions.
ORIGINALITY: Good.
WRITING: Good job telling us who John is and how he lost his legs, and then told us about rehab and what he wants to do in the future. Nice sequence. What race is John referring to? Is he training for a specific event? That could be the hook! How did John get the disease that made him lose his legs? Good story idea, but if you included more information it would really help the story.
VIDEO: Lots of great shots of John working on his rehab. Nice job getting plenty of footage. Nice variety.
AUDIO: Levels were not consistent. Make sure the voiceover and interviews are the same volume. Use a microphone for your stand-up. It was windy and the sound was very muffled.
EDITING: There were some glitches going into your interviews and going out of your second interview. Try to work on crisp cuts.
OVERALL: Good concept. Lots of footage. Next time spend more time on post-production. Work on consistent audio levels and sharper cuts. Those problems can be very distracting.
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Date Posted: April 13, 2005
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Slug: Shop Rite for Education Program
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.96
DELIVERY: Well done. Clear delivery and even pace.
INTERVIEWS: Great choices. Nice explanation of program. Good idea to get the principle interview. Good introductions and good quick bites that added to the story. It would have been great if the principle could have mentioned something specific that the school was able to purchase because of the program.
ORIGINALITY: Good. Interesting story idea.
WRITING: Great writing. Good job covering all the questions. Nice opening to the story. Right from the start you established what the program is and then went on to tell who benefits and why. Great information. Good job including how much they have raised so far. Is this a new program? Is it on going?
VIDEO: Good shots of shoppers and students. Remember to always use a tripod. Some shots were shaky. Nice job using B-roll over your interviews.
AUDIO: Very consistent throughout, except that the stand up was drowned out a bit by background noise.
EDITING: Very well done. The video and audio matched up nicely. Good flow. Noticed one glitch into your stand-up.
OVERALL: Great job! Good story. Nice job putting it all together.
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Date Posted: April 13, 2005
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Slug: All State: Jared Czarneski
Status: Re-submit
Length: 48.10
DELIVERY: Well paced, but the very beginning was very hard to understand. Practice annunciating a little better especially at the beginning.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices for interviewees. The coach interview was a bit long. If you take some of the information he gave you and add it to your voice over. That will help shorten the sound bite. The interview with Jared was way too low and couldn't be understood.
ORIGINALITY: Good story idea.
WRITING: Pretty good. How long has he been wrestling for? Was this his first year at States or has he competed in the past? Who did he beat to win?
VIDEO: Lots of good shots. We would have liked to see more. Especially with your interview with the coach. Once you have established what he looks like, you can add B-roll over what he is saying.
AUDIO: Remember a microphone for interviews and stand-up at all times. Your stand-up was low and used the camera mic. It picks up all the background noise. Interview with Jared was way too low and cut off. Redo both with a microphone.
EDITING: Good. It would have been good to show who Jared is sooner to establish the story. There was either a strange transition or a glitch right before Jared's interview.
OVERALL: Good story idea. Redo your interview and stand-up with a microphone to fix your audio problems. Re-record your voiceover and make sure the first few words are clear. You need to grab viewers' attention in the first few seconds so they need to be able to understand the opening.
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Date Posted: April 13, 2005
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Slug: Jeffery's Restaurant Becomes a Bistro
Status: Re-submit
Length: 49.78
DELIVERY: Good pace and clearly spoken.
INTERVIEWS: Good interviews, but it would have been good to get an interview from a patron and hear how they feel. Are some people disappointed in the change?
ORIGINALITY: When considering a story idea, ask yourself why should someone who is not in your town care about the story. It's a question the newsroom ask themselves everyday when considering which stories to cover; "why should I care?" Harsh, but true. Make sure it is a newsworthy topic.
WRITING: Why are they switching format? Right now the story is too commercial. You must be very careful when covering a place of business. It seems like an announcement for the restaurant and not a news piece. It looks like the restaurant has won CT Best of awards, will the restaurant be able to stay award winning with this change? Do locals have any issues with the change? What is special about this restaurant and the change? You'll have to dig deeper to find a story. Find the hook and write your story around it.
VIDEO: Good footage in the kitchen. It would have added to the story to get footage of the restaurant when people were dining. Remember to use a light inside. Some shots and interview were very dark. Always use a tripod. Your stand-up was shaky.
AUDIO: There was too much background noise throughout the story. Keep the level down so that the voiceover can be easily heard.
EDITING: Pretty good, but stand-up was cut off early and there was one minor glitch before your interview with the owner.
OVERALL: Find the hook and write to it. Once you do that everything else will come together. Remember to always answer who, what, where, when, why, and how. Rewrite and bring down background noise.
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Date Posted: April 13, 2005
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Slug: First Hockey Girl on Milford Indians
Status: Re-submit
Length: 48.60
DELIVERY: Good.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices for interviewees. Good information from coach. It would have been great to see the male hockey player's interview in the locker room since that was what he was talking about. The female hockey player's interview was too short. It was so quick we really didn't understand what she said. A better sound bite from her would really improve the story.
ORIGINALITY: Good. Newsworthy topic.
WRITING: Remember you need to answer who, what, where, when, why, and how. Why is she on the team? Does this school not have a girl's team? Is the competition harder on the boy's team? That is an important part of the story that needs to be answered. Good job talking about the fact that there has never been a female hockey player on the team before and how she was doing on the team.
VIDEO: Always use a light for inside shots. Your 3rd interview and your stand-up were very dark.
AUDIO: Always use a microphone. It sounded like your 1st interview used the camera mic and picked up a lot of background noise. This is very distracting. Also, it sounded like your 1st interview was cut off before she was finished. Make sure you use a mic for your stand up.
EDITING: Good job, but the stand up was cut off too quickly.
OVERALL: Good story idea, but the video and sound problems made the story hard to view. You can re-shoot the stand up with better lighting and sound at the rink. Although hockey season is over, the rink will still make a good background. Check your footage and see if you have a better sound bite from the female player's interview. A strong clip from her will really add to the story. Re-write the voiceover to answer why she is playing on the boy's team.
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Date Posted: April 13, 2005
School: Joseph A. Foran High School
Slug: Tsunami Relief
Status: Re-submit
Length: 47.58
DELIVERY: Pretty good, but a bit too fast. We could not understand the stand-up. Slow down a bit and enunciate your words.
INTERVIEWS: Good interviews. Nice sound bites, and good job writing into your interviews. Good choices for interviewee subjects. There was a lot of background noise during the interviews. It would have been better if the interviews were done in a quieter place. Suggestion: You introduce the student interview by saying she shows how comfortable we are, and then the student says the same exact thing. Consider using a different word in her introduction, or selecting a different sound bite.
ORIGINALITY: Very interesting and timely story.
WRITING: Good job telling us who, what, where, why, when, and how. It was well written and gave good information. Nice work.
VIDEO: Great shots. A good variety. Suggestion: Did any of the teachers dress in pajamas, or did you get any shots of the students in class in their pajamas? That would have made great B-roll.
AUDIO: Use a microphone at all times. The background noise was very loud and distracting during all of your interviews.
EDITING: Editing could be much more smooth. The story started off great. Lots of shots and a good mix of long shots and close ups. It got choppy at the end. It was choppy when you showed an interviewee, cut to the Tsunami bulletin board, and then cut back to the interviewee. Need to work into your stand-up better. Don't cut from an interview into your stand up. Looks very unprofessional. Also, use a microphone at all times.
OVERALL: Good try, but we really need you to re-record your stand-up, as it was too hard to understand. Don't do your stand up in front of a brick wall. It would be hard to redo your interviews without background noise at this point because the event is over, so our suggestion is to focus on re-reading your voice over and re-editing to re-submit.
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Date posted: March 8, 2005
School: Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Tsunami Relief"
Status: Re-submit
Length: 47.58
DELIVERY: Pretty good, but a bit too fast. We could not understand the stand-up. Slow down a bit and enunciate your words.
INTERVIEWS: Good interviews. Nice sound bites, and good job writing into your interviews. Good choices for interviewee subjects. There was a lot of background noise during the interviews. It would have been better if the interviews were done in a quieter place. Suggestion: You introduce the student interview by saying she shows how comfortable we are, and then the student says the same exact thing. Consider using a different word in her introduction, or selecting a different sound bite.
ORIGINALITY: Very interesting and timely story.
WRITING: Good job telling us who, what, where, why, when, and how. It was well written and gave good information. Nice work.
VIDEO: Great shots. A good variety. Suggestion: Did any of the teachers dress in pajamas, or did you get any shots of the students in class in their pajamas? That would have made great B-roll.
AUDIO: Use a microphone at all times. The background noise was very loud and distracting during all of your interviews.
EDITING: Editing could be much more smooth. The story started off great. Lots of shots and a good mix of long shots and close ups. It got choppy at the end. It was choppy when you showed an interviewee, cut to the Tsunami bulletin board, and then cut back to the interviewee. Need to work into your stand-up better. Don't cut from an interview into your stand up. Looks very unprofessional. Also, use a microphone at all times.
OVERALL: Good try, but we really need you to re-record your stand-up, as it was too hard to understand. Don't do your stand up in front of a brick wall. It would be hard to redo your interviews without background noise at this point because the event is over, so our suggestion is to focus on re-reading your voice over and re-editing to re-submit.
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Date posted: December 29, 2003
School: Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "FMRI Study"
Status: Resubmit
Length: :50
DELIVERY (How is the voice used to tell the story [pitch, tone, diction]): Good
INTERVIEWS (Sound bites interesting and did they enhance the story?): Good. Please remember to fully introduce your interview subjects. Your first sound bite is from Michele. What is Michele's role in the study.
ORIGINALITY (Story creative, unique, statewide appeal?): Good
WRITING (Report written clearly, creatively, & grammatically correct?): Remember to fully answer all the 5W's & H. You mention this is a FMRI Study. What is FMRI?
VIDEO (Pix illustrated the story? Tri-pod used, lighting, composition?): TRI-POD at all times!!!!!! No exceptions!
AUDIO (Clarity, natural sound, enhance the story?): Good
EDITING(Pictures and sound used in the proper sequence to tell a story? Pictures match the script?):
OVERALL(All the elements used to tell an interesting story for the viewer?): It is a pity you didn't bring the tri-pod with you to shot your footage. This is a nice story and would have aired if you had steady images.
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Date Posted: December 23, 2003
School: Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Pauls"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY (How is the voice used to tell the story [pitch, tone, diction]): Good
INTERVIEWS (Sound bites interesting and did they enhance the story?): Please introduce each interviewee by name. Also, please use the rule of thirds when framing your interviews and don't place them in front of a plain wall.
ORIGINALITY (Story creative, unique, statewide appeal?):
WRITING (Report written clearly, creatively, & grammatically correct?): You will need to answer the 5 W's & H in your writing. WHO,WHAT, WHEN,WHERE,WHY and HOW. What and How makes Pauls' "Famous Hamburgers" special. Without the basic journalistic coverage this sounds more like an infomercial then a news story. You must be very careful when covering a place of business.
VIDEO (Pix illustrated the story? Tri-pod used, lighting, composition?): TRI-POD AT ALL TIMES!! Our videographers have to use a tri-pod for all their shots – so we ask at least that from the student news group. Please don't leave the school without the tripod. Also, please don't use zooms, pans, etc. News is a straight form of story telling and the images should reflect this.
AUDIO (Clarity, natural sound, enhance the story?): Okay
EDITING(Pictures and sound used in the proper sequence to tell a story? Pictures match the script?):
OVERALL(All the elements used to tell an interesting story for the viewer?): Please see notes above.
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Date Posted: December 23, 2003
School: Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Baseball Field"
Status: Re-submit
Length:
DELIVERY: Your stand-up was well done.
INTERVIEWS:
ORIGINALITY:
WRITING: We could not hear the entire script so I'm unable to access this properly.
VIDEO: Tri-pod at all times. Please no pans, zooms, etc. You will need more variations in your images. Currently, we have one pan shot of the baseball field cut into your interviews. Where are your close-ups and medium shots?
AUDIO: We had a difficult time hearing the audio in the interviews. Please keep your audio levels consistent through out. You will need to have the hand-held mic as close to your interview as possible, without letting them actual hold the mic.
EDITING: Please see video.
OVERALL Remember to place a :5 pad with nat sound and images at the beginning and end of your story.
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Date Posted: December 23, 2003
School: Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Homeroom"
Status: Resubmit
Length: :49
DELIVERY: Please memorize your script before recording your voice-over, this will help with the flow of your VO.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices. Nice job on the framing of your interview subjects. Please don't place the interview person in front of a wall.
ORIGINALITY: When considering a story idea, ask yourself why should someone who is not in High School care about your story. It's a question the newsroom ask themselves everyday when considering which stories to cover; "why should I care?" Harsh, but true.
WRITING: Remember to cover the all important 5W's & H.
VIDEO: Tri-pod at all times!!! Remember to get a variation of shots; close-ups, medium, wide.
AUDIO: very low on your interviews, where was the hand-held mic?
EDITING:
OVERALL: see above notes.
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Date Posted: December 23, 2003
School: Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Rolling Bike Pegs"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good
INTERVIEWS: Please introduce each interview within your script – we have to assume your first interview is with the inventor, Patrick Blake?
ORIGINALITY: Very interesting story.
WRITING: Please write into and out of your sound bites – your interviews (sound bites) need to be introduced.
VIDEO: TRI-POD! You need a variation of images. How about a close-up of a bike peg so all us non-bikers know what you are talking about.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING: You need many more images: close-ups, medium shots in-order to match your script to your images. Currently, you only had one wide shot to work with!
OVERALL: This was a good story concept and worth more then the apparent time you put into it. The inventor who let you tell his story deserved more time and effort to have his story told correctly and professionally.
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Date Posted: December 23, 2003
School: Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Student Involvement"
Status: Not for Broadcast
Length: :39
DELIVERY:
INTERVIEWS:
ORIGINALITY:
WRITING: Pick a clear topic then answer the 5 W's & H. What exactly is the focus of your story? What changes is the school considering that the students should be involved in?
VIDEO: Good framing on your first interview. For the other two, please remember the rule of thirds when framing the shot of your interviews. Also, a variation in your images is needed.
AUDIO:
EDITING:
OVERALL: Typically, a Student News story can NOT be shot in a single afternoon and more time and effort needs to be applied to tell a news story in a clear and cohesive manner.
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Date posted: Dec. 19, 2003
School: Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Robotics Club"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good
INTERVIEWS: Good choices
ORIGINALITY: Good
WRITING: Good job writing into your sound bites.
VIDEO: TRI-POD AT ALL TIMES!!! News is a straight story telling technigue, please don't use zooms, pulls or pans. Also, you must use the tri-pod to steady the camera for every shot. No exceptions! You will need approximately 30 minutes of film for a 1 minute piece. That 30 minutes should be made up many full shots, medium and close-ups.
AUDIO: Please use a hand-held mic and get as close to the interview subject as possible. This will help get a clear sound bite without the nat sound overpowering.
EDITING: Good job matching images with the script.
OVERALL: The main problem is the images and the lack of a tri-pod used to keep the images steady. If it had been just one or two images we would have made an exception and gone to air, but not with every shot.
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Date posted: Dec. 19, 2003
School: Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Milford Diner"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :41
DELIVERY: Good job on your voice-over delivery.
INTERVIEWS: Good 1st interview. A second interview with John Lombard the new owner would be great. Also, any old customers who can talk about the diner changing hands and moving.
ORIGINALITY: Interesting story.
WRITING: Good job covering the facts and writing into your soundbite
VIDEO: You will need more images to tell your story. The story is timed from the moment the voice-over begins to the end of the stand-up. With this in mind, your story only shows 1 image of the strip mall and the interview subject. You will need a variation of images of the diner and new location cut to match your script.
AUDIO: This is uneven during your sound bite and ending stand-up. Please use a separate mic in-order to record clear sound without nat sound overpowering.
EDITING: See video note.
OVERALL You will need to be :50 seconds from the moment the voice-over begins to the end of the stand-up. Please re-edit to the correct time. Thanks.
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Date posted: Dec. 19, 2003
School: Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Hockey Grant"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY:
INTERVIEWS: Good choices. Please don't cut your sound bites in mid sentence.
ORIGINALITY: Good
WRITING: Good job covering most of the facts. The effect of the grant on the players is a little vague. We think you answered this in the "parent" interview, but we had a hard time understanding the sound bite: will the grant mean that each player will have a significant decrease in the cost they will have to pay in-order to play on the hockey team? If so, by how much?
VIDEO: Tri-pod at all times!!!! Currently, all but one shot is too shaky to broadcast. Having the images shake is very disconcerting to the viewer. Do you have any images which were shot with your tri-pod? Also, please don't use your zoom. The human eye can not zoom and therefore is not a good technique to use in a news story.
AUDIO: Your voice-over is low and
EDITING:
OVERALL: The main problem is the images and the lack of a tri-pod used to keep the images steady. If it had been just one or two images we would have made an exception and gone to air, but not with every shot.
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Date posted: Dec. 19, 2003
School: Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Electronics Class"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :51
DELIVERY (How is the voice used to tell the story [pitch, tone, diction]):
INTERVIEWS (Sound bites interesting and did they enhance the story?): Good choices for interview subjects.
ORIGINALITY (Story creative, unique, statewide appeal?): Interesting concept.
WRITING (Report written clearly, creatively, & grammatically correct?): Please don't let your interviews tell the entire story. Also, introduce each of your interview sound bites in your script. We're not sure who the first interview was, but much of his sound bite should have been written into your script and used in the voice-over.
VIDEO (Pix illustrated the story? Tri-pod used, lighting, composition?): Use your tri-pod at all times! You have a few out of focus shots as well as unsteady images. Do you have any other images of the class at work on their projects?
AUDIO (Clarity, natural sound, enhance the story?): Uneven. The voice-over, sound bites and ending stand-up should all be at the same level.
EDITING(Pictures and sound used in the proper sequence to tell a story? Pictures match the script?): Good job piecing the elements your had together.
OVERALL(All the elements used to tell an interesting story for the viewer?): Please re-write your script to include more of the information in your voice-over. Thank you.
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Date Posted: 12/11/03
School: Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Best Buddies"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good voice-over delivery. Suggestion: include a wrap-up sentence in your ending stand-up. The last line in your script would work "…all those involved in the program hope Best Buddies will continue to grow next year…from Foran H.S…."
INTERVIEWS: Good selection. Please don't shot your interviews in front of a wall! They should be placed within the context of the story, ie.: the program location with action going on behind them.
ORIGINALITY: Good
WRITING: Good
VIDEO: TRIPOD at all times! No exception. Our camera people never leave the truck without their tri-pods. The only news people who shot without a tripod are actors filming a movie with a "news" scene. Or on that rare occasion, a cameraperson in the middle of combat who has to keep a low profile so they don't set up the tripod. As Foran H.S. is not in the middle of a war zone you will need to use your tri-pod.
On a side note: nice framing on your interview subjects. You could get even closer when framing. This will bring the interviewee into your story.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING: There is an empty audio space between your voice-over and your stand-up, this could be tightened up.
OVERALL Well done
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Date Posted: 12/11/03
School: Foran High School
Town: Milford
Slug: CT Teens
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Be natural in your delivery and please be careful to clearly pronunciate each word. Your voice-over was a little rushed and difficult to understand in places.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices on your interview subjects.
ORIGINALITY: Good – interesting story.
WRITING: Good job writing into and out of your sound bites and covering the info on the story.
VIDEO: Many of your images were very dark. When we dub to beta to air these images will be extremely dark. Be careful when filming indoors that you have adequate lighting. The framing on your interview subject could be closer, currently you have a lot of dead space around your interview subjects.
AUDIO: uneven audio levels throughout the piece.
EDITING: be careful to keep your edits tight. IE: the ending edits before the stand-up, there is a pause where you have the graph.
OVERALL: The story subject was very interesting, we need the audio to be re-tracked and give the editing one more run through. Thank you.
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