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Fairfield Warde High School
Date: March 11, 2005
School: Fairfield Warde High School
Town: Fairfield
Slug: "Dogs at Lake Mohegan"
Status: Broadcast
Length: 48.46
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OVERALL: Good job re-editing with the recommended changes. Remember to always get the names of the people you interview, and in the future to introduce each interview separately. Also, when you re-record your voice over make sure you re-record the whole track. When you only change part of it, you end up with different tone and volume and that disrupts the flow of the story.
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Date: February 14, 2005
School: Fairfield Warde High School
Town: Fairfield
Slug: "Dogs at Lake Mohegan"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50.19
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OVERALL: This is a great story, but there were still not introductions to your interviews and the story still runs over :50 seconds. Please re-edit to the required length and introduce your interviews so that we can air this story.
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Date: February 9, 2005
School: Fairfield Warde High School
Town: Fairfield
Slug: "Interact Club"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 52.57
DELIVERY: Starts a bit fast, but otherwise clear and good pace.
INTERVIEWS: Good. Remember to introduce the two girls in the Interact Club. Good job introducing the teacher. Good information from both interviews.
ORIGINALITY: Good. Great job taking a school story and expanding it to how it affects the community.
WRITING: Very good. You started with the idea that there are a lot of clubs and brought your focus to this one. Creative description of the club. Well-written and good information on how the club has helped.
VIDEO: Pretty good with lots of shots. Our concern here was the few shaky shots of in the room. Always use a tripod. Even our camera operators use them. Nobody has a perfectly steady hand.
AUDIO: Good. One thing we noticed was the first interview clipped a piece of her last word. Work on making this flawless.
EDITING: Work on your cuts.
OVERALL: Nice job. Good writing, but work on writing into your interviews. Great job summarizing but don't forget to tell us who you are. These stories need exactly :50 seconds from your from the beginning to the end of your narrative. They must be :50 seconds for post production purposes, and we are not able to edit any time off of your story. If it is over :50 seconds it will not fit into our broadcast schedule.
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Date: February 1, 2005
School: Fairfield Warde High School
Town: Fairfield
Slug: "Fairfield Warde vs. Fairfield Ludlowe Sports"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50.91
DELIVERY: Good, but a bit fast. It is hard to understand. Work on the writing and it will help improve the flow.
INTERVIEWS: Good interviews, but it would have been good to use an interview from a principal or board member that gives another point of view.
ORIGINALITY: The idea is different, but how does this effect people outside those two schools?
WRITING: This story really needs more set up. As it is written it is very confusing to people who are not familiar with Fairfield High School. People outside the area don't know that it was one school and now is two schools. Tell why the decision was made to split the school into two. Are the two schools both high schools? You say one school doesn't have seniors, is that a Junior High School? Tell us more in the beginning. Did Fairfield High School have teams that were State Champs before the split? Has the town experienced rapid growth that contributed to the split? Maybe there is a more news worthy story here. You need to find the focus of the story and explain more. Remember when writing that most Connecticut residents are not familiar with the school and need more background information.
VIDEO: The wrestling shots were great. If the focus is going to be the sports programs, then you need more B-roll of sports. Remember you want the shots to match up to the voiceover.
AUDIO: Levels were inconsistent and the sound fluctuates through out the story.
EDITING: Good job. More B-roll will help.
OVERALL: We found the story very confusing. Tell us more, especially in the beginning. Remember viewers are not familiar with your school system. Whatever the reason for the split, you need to put it into your package. Give us more background on how the schools go to this point. Look at the story and see what makes it newsworthy to a large audience. Is the town is really growing? Are the Fairfield teams that were State Champs last year are now on a losing streak? Please re-write and re-submit.
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Date: February 1, 2005
School: Fairfield Warde High School
Town: Fairfield
Slug: "Library Censorship"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 49
DELIVERY: Good pace, but to many pauses. It really interrupted the flow and made it hard to understand. You could have written more to help with the pacing.
INTERVIEWS: You must introduce your interviewees. You audience does not know who they are. Otherwise good choices. Very informative teacher interview, and good to get a students perspective.
ORIGINALITY: Good. This affects all school and public libraries. It is a newsworthy topic
WRITING: Pretty good, but you didn't cover a very important question. Why? Why did schools put in the blocks in place? Although the answer may seem apparent, it will help with the flow of the story and inform people who may not understand why schools would censor the web. It would be even more interesting if you broaden the topic to talk about filters at other schools and public libraries. Be careful in the wrap up not to bring your opinion to the story. You say students are definitely at a disadvantage, but who thinks that? If it's the students that feel that way say so.
VIDEO: The shots of the library and computer screen are great, but you need more shots. It would have been great to see more of a student trying to search and get blocked, especially when you are talking about it, and the beginning shot in the library was up for too long.
AUDIO: No major problems, but the stand-up was louder than the rest of the story.
EDITING: Good job. More B-roll will add to this.
OVERALL: Good idea. You need to write more so that you can re-record the voiceover with out the pauses. It will really improve the flow if you take those pauses out and add B-roll. Also, you have to introduce your interviews.
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Date: January 26, 2005
School: Fairfield Warde High School
Town: Fairfield
Slug: "Dogs at Lake Mohegan"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50.19
DELIVERY: Excellent. Pace was good and the voice over was clear and easy to understand. Great stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Good. Great location for your second interview. Terrific job getting interviews from both sides of the story. The interviews were direct and to the point. The sound bites you selected were great. You need to introduce your interviewees. The audience needs to know who these people are. For example, "Fairfield resident Dave Smith isn't bothered by the dogs" or "But Park Director, Ann Brown, sees things differently…" It helps set up your interviews and makes the story that much stronger.
ORIGINALITY: Great story! Truly a newsworthy piece.
WRITING: Very good. Good job being objective and showing both sides of the story. You answered who, what, where, why, when, how. You kept the story interesting and got all the facts in.
VIDEO: Great shots! You really kept the story interesting by not leaving us on one shot for too long, but not jumping around too much either. Good job balancing that.
AUDIO: Good levels. Did you get any good ambient sound? It would have been great to hear the splashing of the dog in the water or the fisherman casting his pole. It would be great in the background.
EDITING: Very good. Audio and video matched wonderfully.
OVERALL: This is a great story. It kept our full attention. It is an excellent example of a newsworthy story. The writing, video, and audio are all excellent, and we would love to get this on the air. As it was submitted though, it is too long. It comes in at 50.20 seconds in length. We are unable to edit any time from your piece, so we will have to defer the story back to you. We need this to be exactly 50 seconds from beginning of the voice-over to the end of the stand-up. If we go even a few frames over :50 seconds it won't fit into our broadcasting schedule. Please re-edit to the required length and introduce your interviews so that we can air this story.
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Date: January 26, 2005
School: Fairfield Warde High School
Town: Fairfield
Slug: "The PATH Program"
Status: Broadcast
Length: 48.41
DELIVERY: Nice job. A little rushed in the beginning, but good pace overall. Very nice stand-up. Good job bringing more information to the piece in the wrap up. We especially liked how you tied this in with the whole community. Great work.
INTERVIEWS: Very good. Nice choices. Great student interview. They brought good information to the story and added to the piece.
ORIGINALITY: Excellent. Very interesting.
WRITING: Good job. You covered all the questions and got all the information in. You didn't rely on the interview to tell the story, but used them to make the piece even stronger.
VIDEO: Great shots of student editing. Would have been great to see other students editing as well. It would have helped to use a light when doing your first interview. Using a light inside helps you avoid shadows on the interviewees. Some more B-roll would have been nice because the shot of the high school sign was a bit too long.
AUDIO: Good levels.
EDITING: Well edited.
OVERALL: Great job.
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