Enfield High School

March 14, 2008

Date posted: March 14, 2008
School: Enfield High School
Town: Enfield
Slug: "Students in the Community"
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50

DELIVERY: Good. Nice tone and pace.

INTERVIEWS: Good sound bites. Added to the story. Nice job writing into them.

ORIGINALITY: Great community service story.

WRITING: Nice job telling the story.

VIDEO: Great job getting tight shots. Nice variety. Some shaky shots. Make sure you always use a tripod.

AUDIO: Good levels.

EDITING: Great job. Very nicely thought out. Script and video flowed together very well.

OVERALL: Good job!

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Date posted: April 20, 2007
School: Enfield High School
Town: Enfield
Slug: "Students on the Air"
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50

DELIVERY:

INTERVIEWS:

ORIGINALITY:

WRITING:

VIDEO:

AUDIO:

EDITING:

OVERALL: Good job re-editing to required length for broadcast.

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Date posted: April 20, 2007
School: Enfield High School
Town: Enfield
Slug: "Students on the Air"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 48

DELIVERY: Nice job. Good place for the stand up, but the shot was too dark.

INTERVIEWS: Work on writing into the interviews. Instead of "so and so says," try to add information or paraphrase. One or two sound bites would have worked better. Look for meaningful bites that add emotion to the story. Also, be sure you introduce everyone.

ORIGINALITY: Good story idea.

WRITING: Make sure that the lifts you use add to the writing. The interviews didn't add to the story. Be more selective of the lifts you use.

VIDEO: You started out with a long shot of an audio board but there was nothing happening on it. Try to get shots of the needles moving or lights flashing. The video should be stronger in the open.

AUDIO: Make sure all interviews are on mic. The audio was good except for one interview.

EDITING: Start on a stronger shot, use less interviews, more b-roll, and show people working in the radio. Tight shots of the instruments instead of empty audio board. There needs to be movement to show excitement. Good shots but not in the right places. You needed lead in footage of the people being interviewing.

OVERALL: This story was only 48 seconds. There should be B-roll pad at the beginning and end of the story in case you come in a little short. At this length it cannot be broadcast. Please resubmit at required length.

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Date posted: April 20, 2007
School: Enfield High School
Town: Enfield
Slug: "Youth Vote"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50

DELIVERY: Ok.

INTERVIEWS: You need to introduce your interviews. Without an introduction we don't know who they were or why they were being interviewed. Sound bites are a great place to answer how or why. They are a way to add emotion to a story. Having four lifts was too much in this story. Having two meaningful ones would have been more powerful.

ORIGINALITY: Good story choice.

WRITING: Sounds like Youth Vote is a very interesting program with many good things going on, but for the story to be well told it needed to be much more focused. There was too much for one story. A great focus would have been the debate. That is very newsworthy. You say the program is helping shape a bright political future. Show us that with statistics or attributions on how this makes the world a better place.

VIDEO: Nice job setting up the interview shots. Good angles.

AUDIO: It was OK, but try to get better mic placement on the interviews for less background noise.

EDITING: Some close ups would have been good to add to the story.

OVERALL: Select better lifts and focus writing. There are a few good ways to go with this, but pick one and write to it. There was no pad at beginning. Should be 5 seconds of B-roll before the story starts.