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Daniel Hand High School
March 14, 2008
Date Posted: March 14, 2008
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: Safe Rides
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good tone and pace. Creative wording on the stand up.
INTERVIEWS: Good people to interview and good information.
ORIGINALITY: Excellent.
WRITING: Very good. Nice job staying focused.
VIDEO: Nice tight shot in the car. Video of students being picked up through the program would have benefited the story.
AUDIO: Consistant levels.
EDITING: Good.
OVERALL: Good job.
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Date Posted: March 14, 2008
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: ABC House
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
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OVERALL: Nice job re-editing.
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Date Posted: January 14, 2008
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: Touchdown for Character
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Very good. Creative stand up.
INTERVIEWS: Good choice of people to interview. Nice job getting emotional bites.
ORIGINALITY: Great choice of story.
WRITING: Nice job staying on topic. Good job telling us how the program works and why it is a good thing.
VIDEO: Good shots and angles. Some close ups would have added to the story.
AUDIO: Good.
EDITING: Nice job matching video with audio.
OVERALL: Good job.
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Date Posted: January 14, 2008
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: S.A.R.A.H.
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 51
DELIVERY: Good.
INTERVIEWS: The first bite didn't advance the story. Good idea to interview a client but if there isn't a sound bite that advances the story look for something. You are over on time so you could take that bite out. The second interview was emotional but needed to be written into better so we know how it relates to the story.
ORIGINALITY: Good.
WRITING: There seemed to be a few good stories here, but there needed to be more of a focus. Seems like a case where people writing story know all about the agency and their services but for those of us who do not have the background it is tough to follow.
VIDEO: Lighting was good. Shots were composed well. Needed more footage.
AUDIO: Good.
EDITING: More B-roll would add to story. If the story is about people working in the community show it. The shot of the porch was too long.
OVERALL: Good story but needs to be more focused. Could be a great community service story with a little work. Right now the story is a bit too long. Needs to be 50 seconds in order to fit into our broadcast schedule.
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Date Posted: January 14, 2008
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: ABC House
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 51
DELIVERY: Good.
INTERVIEWS: Good interviews. The sound bites helped advance the story.
ORIGINALITY: Great choice of story.
WRITING: Focus could have been sharper but not bad.
VIDEO: Good job getting the graduation shots. Interviews were too dark. It was too hard too see the people being interviewed. Light the shot instead of using available light. Good composition.
AUDIO: Good.
EDITING: Nice job matching the video to audio.
OVERALL: Good story. Work on focusing the story. Need to shorten to 50 seconds and reshoot interviews so they are not so dark.
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Date Posted: January 14, 2008
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: Woodsy Club
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good job. Nice enthusiasm
INTERVIEWS: Nice choice of people to talk to. Good job getting emotional bites that answered "why" questions.
ORIGINALITY: Nice selection.
WRITING: Good job telling the story and staying on topic.
VIDEO: Nice shots. Be sure to always white balance. At the top of the story there was a close up that was very red. That shot was a good close up but it was hard to tell who was on camera or what they were doing.
AUDIO: Consistant levels.
EDITING: Nice variety of shots. A few different shots of each activity would add to the story. Work on putting them together so that they illustrate the story as best as possible.
OVERALL: Good.
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Date Posted: May 1, 2007
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: Madison ABC Home
Status: Re-Submit
Length: N/A
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OVERALL: The disc was cracked and would not play. Please re-submit a new DVD.
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Date Posted: June 28, 2006
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: Scranton Library
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50 (use 5 seconds of pad at the beginning)
DELIVERY: Good job. Enthusiastic. Creative stand up.
INTERVIEWS: Nice choices of people to interview. The second interview was very good, but the first seemed almost staged. Be careful with your selection of sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Good local story.
WRITING: Good. Work on writing into your interviews. Instead of saying, so and so explains, and some information to the story while introducing.
VIDEO: Nice job. More close ups would add to the story. Be aware of the sun's location when shooting outside.
AUDIO: Always use a microphone for interviews not just the camera mic. The interviews were a lot lower than the voiceover.
EDITING: Good. Roll b-roll over some of the interview instead of having the person on screen the whole time.
OVERALL: Good work. Make sure audio levels are consistant next time.
Evaluations: 2005/2006
Date posted: October 18, 2005
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "Madison Little League"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :45 (Use :5 seconds of natural pad at beginning)
DELIVERY: Good tone. Work on better diction. Try to emphasize a word or two in each sentence. Good job adding information to the story with your stand up, although the background would have been more fitting if you had done it at the Little League field. The High School in the background didn't tie in with the story.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices for interview subjects. The child and the creator of the patch really tied in. A better choice for a third interview would have been a medical professional explaining why steroid use is harmful or informing kids at that age is important. Was the creator of the patch a Little League coach, a teacher, principal, parent? That is important information that could have been added to his introduction.
ORIGINALITY: Timely and very interesting. Good job taking a national issue and localizing it.
WRITING: Good job telling us about the patch and editing in the interviews. You covered all who, what, where, when, why and how questions but you didn't tell us why until the end of the story. It would have helped the flow of the story if you had touched on why in the beginning of the story. At the top of the story it would have been good to know what specifically lead to this patch. Was there a local issue with steroid use in schools? Was it in reaction the Major League Baseball steroid scandal?
VIDEO: Great shots of the game and nice close ups of the anti-steroid patch. Nice variety of shots to keep it interesting.
AUDIO: Very good. Our only concern was there didn't seem to be a mic used for the interviews. Camera mics pick up too much background noise. Always use a mic for interviews.
EDITING: Nice job.
OVERALL: Good work. Nice job overall with the story. From the start of the voice over to the end of the stand up your story only was :45 seconds, because you included the 5 seconds of natural sound at the beginning we will be able to air this but if you plan to use part of the natural sound pad to start or end your story please make a note. You only are given :50 seconds to tell your story so :5 seconds of natural sound is a lot at the beginning. To make the story even better, work on the writing to give a better introduction to the patch creator and tell us who he is. Also, touch upon why at the beginning of the story.
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Date posted: November 23, 2004
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "Charity Carousel"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good pace and flow, until the end where there is a gap with no audio. Creative stand-up on the carousel. Remember, there should only be one stand up per story, right now you have two. Take one of them out.
INTERVIEWS: Nice choices.
ORIGINALITY: Great. Nice community piece.
WRITING: Well written. Nice job telling the story. Excellent job getting your facts in.
VIDEO: Excellent shots. Kept piece interesting and showed what viewer wanted to see.
AUDIO: Levels were consistent for most of the story, but be careful with your natural sound. It is very loud at the beginning and we miss the first two or three sentences of the piece. The beginning is really where you need to grab the audience so it needs to be clear.
EDITING: Good job. Flowed nicely up to the interview with the little boy. Then there is too much footage with no audio. You only have :50 seconds to tell your story so you don't want that gap with no voice over. It looks like the story is over but then you come back in with the stand-up.
OVERALL: Good job with getting lots of footage and a variety of shots. This is a great, newsworthy story! Rewrite the story to fill the space with no voice over. With no audio the piece seems empty. Remember you need :5 seconds of pad at the end of the story. Please re-edit and re-submit. We would love to get this on the air.
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Date posted: November 23, 2004
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "Giant Steps"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50.32
DELIVERY: Excellent. Great pace and stead flow. Voice over and stand up sounded great. Very easy to comprehend everything spoken. Nice stand-up
INTERVIEWS: Great choices for interviews. They would sound really good if you work on writing into the interview. Instead of saying "He agrees that…" , try adding information or paraphrasing the interview. For example, "Dan, a student at Giant Steps, really enjoys his time there…"It's fun" , or "Tara O'Connor, an teacher at Giant Steps, feels students are more comfortable in this learning environment…"It's just fun for the kids and they have a good time".
ORIGINALITY: Very interesting.
WRITING: Well written. You had great facts and information. The story was written in a way that was easy for the viewer to understand.
VIDEO: Lots of good shots. Good color. Really showed the story.
AUDIO: Good levels throughout.
EDITING: Excellent. Good job matching the script to the footage.
OVERALL: We really liked this story, but it has to be :50 seconds in length. We don't have the capabilities of editing a second off your piece so we will have to defer the story back to you. We need this to be exactly :50 seconds from beginning of the voice-over to the end of the stand-up. If we go a second over schedule the advertisers don't like it! Great job with the writing and delivery. Please re-edit for the required time, work on the introductions to the interviews, and resubmit. We would love to get this on the air!
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Date posted: November 23, 2004
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "Jack Caldwell"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :48
DELIVERY: Slow it down. The voice over was too rushed to understand the story. Also, the stand-up should be done in a place that is relevant to the story, like the shop or the show set, not at school.
INTERVIEWS: The interview you had was good, but the story would have been improved with another interview. One from some one in the community, a person on his show, or a viewer of the show.
ORIGINALITY:
WRITING: The story is too general. You need to find what really makes this person or his show or shop unique.
VIDEO: Videography was good. Nice appropriate shots.
AUDIO: Good, but a bit inconsistent in spots.
EDITING: Good.
OVERALL: You need more of a focus. Try focusing on what makes Jack really stand out. What is it about him that makes this him or his show or shop newsworthy. There are a lot of people with public access shows, what makes Jack's story interesting? Has Jack sold some of his frames to celebrities? Find the hook and then focus the story on that by covering the 5 W's and H (Who, What, When, Where, Why and How) with your script and sound bites. You have nice video and have done a good job editing, but you need to re-write the piece to bring out a story. The story is only 48 seconds including :2 seconds of pad before the voice over begins. Remember that the story needs to be :50 seconds in length and you need :5 seconds pad at the end of the story.
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Date posted: November 23, 2004
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "Atkins Diet"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :48
DELIVERY: Great. Flowed nicely and at a good pace. Clever stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Good choice for interview, but the story would have been stronger with another interview. Maybe a doctor or a person that did the diet and it didn't work. Someone that could help balance the story.
ORIGINALITY: There are a lot of diet program stories, but the story on Adkins is timely with the rising popularity of the diet.
WRITING: Well written, but the story was too one sided. The story only shows the Adkins diet in a positive light. A news story needs to be unbiased and present both sides of a story.
VIDEO: Good shots. Well composed.
AUDIO: Good throughout, but the stand-up had too much background noise.
EDITING: Nice job.
OVERALL: Good piece, but to subjective. Lots of good shots and creative stand-up. Remember that good journalism shows both sides of a story. The story would be a better piece with another interview and some mention of the negatives of the diet or possible consequences. Please rewrite and we would love to get this on the air.
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Date posted: November 23, 2004
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "April Rose"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :43
DELIVERY: Good. Nice pace and clear stand-up.
INTERVIEWS:
ORIGINALITY: There may be an original story there, but you need to first find the hook. Maybe it is the owner, maybe they donate a portion of their proceeds to charity, maybe April Rose offers
WRITING: This story is too general. You need to find what makes this place or the people unique and interesting to write about.
VIDEO: Good shots.
AUDIO: Ambient sound is very loud in the beginning. Background music during the interview is very loud and drowns out the speaker.
EDITING: See audio.
OVERALL: You really need to dig and get the story. Find the hook. Find what makes this news worthy. Pick one story idea and cover the 5 W's and H (Who, What, When, Where, Why and How) with your script and sound bites. For example, if a large portion of the proceeds are donated to charity. Remember a news story must be thoroughly researched so it will be newsworthy. This story was a bit too general and too commercial. Also, the story is only 43 seconds in length. This needs to be :50 seconds in length from the beginning of the voice-over to the end of the stand-up with an additional :5 seconds pad at both end of the story. Please re-edit for the required length.
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Date posted: November 23, 2004
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "Stew Leonard's"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good pace and nice flow.
INTERVIEWS: A better choice for an interview might have been a customer that goes there regularly, for example a mother who brings her child to Stew Leonard's every week to see the chicken.
ORIGINALITY: Good.
WRITING: Well written, but you need to be more focused. The topic is too general, and therefore views like a commercial for the store. You need to find the hook in this story. Find what makes this news worthy. Pick one story idea and cover the 5 W's and H (Who, What, When, Where, Why and How) with your script and sound bites
VIDEO: Great footage! The shots of the chicken and the children were very good.
AUDIO: Please bring down the natural sounds in the beginning. It is too hard to hear the voice over and the beginning of the story is where you really need to grab the audience attention. Otherwise audio is good and levels are consistent.
EDITING: Good.
OVERALL: This piece has a lot of potential. Please find the hook and re-write and edit accordingly. Remember you need :05 pad of natural sounds and video at the end of the story. Great audio, video, and editing.
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Date posted: November 23, 2004
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "Geocaching"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Great location for the stand-up The pace of the story was good, but it would have flowed better if you tell us what geocaching is first and then explain GPS.
INTERVIEWS: The interview with student that participates is good, but the interview with the Radio Shack employee is really irrelevant to the story. Him telling us that GPS systems can go in cars does not make the story stronger. It would be better to get more information from people who participate in geocaching.
ORIGINALITY: We really liked this idea. This is a new sport we would like to hear more about.
WRITING: You still have two story ideas going on; 1) the new sport of geocaching and 2) the new technology of global positioning systems available for your car. Pick one story idea and cover the 5 W's and H (Who, What, When, Where, Why and How) with your script and sound bites. The order of information needs to be worked on. You start out the story talking about GPS but your first interview is about geocaching. It makes the story confusing to bounce between two topics. Tell us what geocaching is and what it involves and then you could go into what GPS is and how it is used in the sport of geocaching.
VIDEO: Nice footage and great color.
AUDIO: Great natural sound.
EDITING: The story needs to be re-edited to improve the flow or the story. When you talk about Danny, before the cut to the interview, make sure the footage is of him, and not someone else.
OVERALL: Audio and video are very good. Just re-write and re-edit and we would love to get this on the air.
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Date posted: November 23, 2004
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "Jacques Pepin"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :48
DELIVERY: Good flow through out piece, but the stand-up would be better if it was in Jacques kitchen. The location should be relevant to the story.
INTERVIEWS: Good interview with Jacques. His love for cooking came across. It would have been nice to hear from a fan of Jacques and his cooking.
ORIGINALITY: Nice piece an outstanding Connecticut resident.
WRITING: Good informational writing. It would have been good to reference your source for calling him world renowned by backing it up with the source (a magazine or newspaper?) or some facts. To improve the writing work on writing into the interview by either adding information or paraphrasing the sentence before the sound bite.
VIDEO: Great shots in his kitchen. Nice visuals of Jacque chopping onions and sharpening his knives. Footage of him cooking something and a completed meal would have made piece a bit stronger. The footage inside was a little dark. Think about using lights indoors.
AUDIO: Good.
EDITING: Nice job editing. Story had a good flow. The one shot of Jacques talking to people seemed out of place. If we knew who he was talking to or what he was talking about it may have been relevant, for example if he was speaking to students at a culinary school or if he wrote a book about his cooking.
OVERALL: Good job. The story was informative, but would have been nice to know more about how Jacque is renowned, what awards has he won, where does he cook, is there a certain food that is his specialty.
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Date posted: November 23, 2004
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "Blackies Hot Dogs"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Well done! Great place for the stand-up. Good pace. Easy to understand. Although the stand-up looks good and the writing is clever, it needs to be re-worked so it doesn't sell Blackies so much.
INTERVIEWS: Good interview, but would like to have heard from a customer.
ORIGINALITY: Good. Nice piece of Connecticut story.
WRITING: Very good writing. Clever lines, but be careful not to cross the line into a commercial. Your wrap-up line and stand-up sound like a recommendation for Blackies and therefore is not impartial journalism. Also, try to work on the writing into the interview. Transition would have been smoother if you work on writing into the introduction of the interviewee. Try to add information or paraphrase the sentence before the sound bit.
VIDEO: Lots of good shots. Footage was relevant and added to the interest of the story.
AUDIO: Great sound, except for the interview. Be sure to use microphone.
EDITING: Very good job. Nice work matching footage to writing.
OVERALL: Great job. The story was interesting and entertaining. Try to re-write the stand-up and wrap-up so that it doesn't sound so much like a pitch for the restaurant. Good writing, but try to work on writing into the interviews. There is no pad at the beginning or end of this story. Please be sure to include a :5 pad with natural sound and video at both ends of the story.
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Date posted: November 23, 2004
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "Lauren Roseman"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Flowed nicely. Good pace through out story. Suggestion: you only need to walk during your stand-up if there is an express purpose, IE: to show the relationship between one element in the story to another.
INTERVIEWS: Good interviews, but we would have loved to hear from Lauren!
ORIGINALITY: Very interesting. Nice "feel good" story.
WRITING: Great writing. Good continuity and very strong closing. The writing would be excellent if you improved your writing into your interviews. Instead of saying "she says" or "she replies" , try to add information or paraphrase the sentence before the sound bite
VIDEO: Great videography. Lots of great shots. Right in the action.
AUDIO: Good except in the first interview it was hard to hear the subject.
EDITING: Great! You matched the video and audio and the flow was excellent.
OVERALL: Great job overall. Very informative and well written. Lots of good facts and great footage. The one thing that could be improved was the writing into the interviews.
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Date posted: November 23, 2004
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "Scoliosis"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :46.38
DELIVERY: Good pace through story. Stand up was a bit low and rushed.
INTERVIEWS: Your interview subject was a good choice but the story would have benefited from a second interview, we would have loved to hear from someone who has scoliosis and uses a brace.
ORIGINALITY:
WRITING: Your topic "Scoliosis" is too broad for a :50 second piece. Try to focus the story more, you have good shots and information on braces. Try that as the focus of the story. You need to give an explanation of what Scoliosis is, not everyone knows what the condition is or how a person gets it. Please work on writing into your interviews. Instead of just saying, "We spoke to John…" or "Jane explained…", try to add information or paraphrase the sentence before the sound bite.
VIDEO: Nice variety of shots, but might want to show some people who have scoliosis. Great video of brace being created.
AUDIO: A bit of fluctuation in levels when stand-up is presented, otherwise is good.
EDITING: Good job, but remember to match your video and audio. You talk about affecting teens and show a shot of kids about 6 or 7 years old.
OVERALL: This story has potential. It seems like this is a story about braces for Scoliosis. Title should be changed and the story should be re-written to reflect the focus. Tell us what Scoliosis is. An interview and footage of a person with Scoliosis would really benefit your story. This needs to be :50 seconds in length from the beginning of the voice-over to the end of the stand-up with an additional :5 seconds pad at both end of the story. Please re-edit for the required length.
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Date posted: November 23, 2004
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "Moonlight Run"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :48
DELIVERY: Slow down. It will help the story flow better. Where is your stand-up? Stand-up could have been more effective if the location was more relevant, like outside of the Art Barn.
INTERVIEWS: Good second interview. She gave good facts about the event and it's future. The first interview was hard to hear and there was no introduction of the interviewee.
ORIGINALITY:
WRITING: Remember to write to your footage. You start off with "As the runners line up" and the runners are already running. Good job telling us what the money was being raised for. A lot of information, maybe too much for :50 seconds because it is rushed.
VIDEO: Remember to white balance your camera. Some footage appears blue. A white balance should correct that problem in the future.
AUDIO: Try to keep your ambient sound down. It drowns out interviews.
EDITING: Editing was pretty good, but there were some jump cuts and it audio didn't always match the footage.
OVERALL: Good concept. You need to re-write your story and re-edit it and it will become a great piece. Remember to introduce your interviewees. Keep in mind matching your audio and video. Look at the audio levels and try to get ambient sound down. The story moved too fast to comprehend everything. Try slowing down the delivery.
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Date posted: November 23, 2004
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "Hybrid Cars"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :51
DELIVERY: Good, but slow down a bit in the delivery and it will help it flow better. Suggestion: you only need to walk during your stand-up if there is an express purpose, IE: to show the relationship between one element in the story to another.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices on interview subjects. Could have heard a bit more from 2nd interview.
ORIGINALITY: Very interesting. Subject is timely and has statewide relevance.
WRITING: Well written, and supplied good facts. To improve the writing work on writing into the interview by either adding information or paraphrasing the sentence before the sound bite.
VIDEO: Good shots. Nice job showing the hybrid and a vehicle that uses a lot of gas. It would have been great to see some other hybrid cars besides the one red one.
AUDIO: Make sure to always use a microphone when doing your interviews. If you did use a microphone try to get it closer to the interview subject. Levels fluctuated between interviews. Try for more consistency.
EDITING: Great editing. Seamless in transition. Good B-roll.
OVERALL: We really liked this story, but it has to be :50 seconds in length. We don't have the capabilities of editing a second off your piece so we will have to defer the story back to you. We need this to be exactly :50 seconds from beginning of the voice-over to the end of the stand-up. If we go a second over schedule the advertisers don't like it! Good news story, concept was fresh and original. The story could be improved by having more consistent audio, but otherwise very well produced. Good editing and use of footage that matched the script.
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Evaluations for 2003-2004
Date posted: January 15, 2004
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "Ivoryton Playhouse"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :49
DELIVERY (How is the voice used to tell the story [pitch, tone, diction]): Good job on the voice-over and stand-up. Suggestion: you only need to walk during your stand-up if there is an express purpose, IE: to show the relationship between one element in the story to another.
INTERVIEWS (Sound bites interesting and did they enhance the story?): Good choices and sound bites used.
ORIGINALITY (Story creative, unique, statewide appeal?): Good. Nice community feel.
WRITING (Report written clearly, creatively, & grammatically correct?):Over all good job getting the facts in and writing into your sound bites. Be careful not to cross the line into an informercial. Your wrap-up line almost sounded like a recommendation for the playhouse and therefore not impartial journalism.
VIDEO (Pix illustrated the story? Tri-pod used, lighting, composition?): Good selection of images. Nice job framing the interview subjects.
AUDIO (Clarity, natural sound, enhance the story?): Good.
EDITING(Pictures and sound used in the proper sequence to tell a story? Pictures match the script?): Good job matching images to your script.
OVERALL(All the elements used to tell an interesting story for the viewer?): Well done.
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Date posted: January 15, 2004
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "Geocaching"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :49
DELIVERY: Good voice-over delivery and stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: The 1st interview doesn't add information to the subject of geocaching. Good second interview with the student who plays the game. Can you get an interview with someone who has hidden one of the cache's and started one of the treasure hunts?
ORIGINALITY: We really liked this idea. This is a new sport we would like to hear more about.
WRITING: You have two story ideas going on; 1) the new sport of geocaching and 2) the new technology of global positioning systems available for your car. Pick one story idea and cover the 5 W's and H (Who, What, When, Where, Why and How) with your script and soundbites.
VIDEO: You will need to take out the logo's for Radio Shack. Also, the basketball footage doesn't match the script of a new sport of geocaching. Do you have more images of individuals actually using their GPS's while hiking? How about some finding the treasure?
AUDIO: Nice job with the nat sound.
EDITING:
OVERALL Please see notes above. The main concern for resubmitting is the Radio Shack's logo prominently displayed.
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Date posted: January 15 , 2004
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "Laser Eye Surgery"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good voice-over delivery and stand-up. Suggestion: a stand-up placed in the middle of a story should show a relationship between two locations, as you are placed in a doctors office an ending stand-up wrapping up your story would be preferred. Also, there is no need to walk during your stand-up unless you are showing the relationship from one space to another IE: "during the morning commute this car fell into this 6 foot deep pothole" and the car and pothole are placed twenty feet apart. Don't walk just for the sake of having action in your shot. This just causes focus problems for your photographer.
INTERVIEWS: Good interview with the Doctor. Please introduce the interviewee when we first see him, not during the second sound bite. Suggestion: an interview with someone who has just gone through the surgery.
ORIGINALITY: Good, interesting and informative story.
WRITING: Good job covering the facts and writing into your second sound bite.
VIDEO: Please don't use pans, keep your camera steady and take plenty of different shots: ie: Close-ups, medium and wide.
AUDIO: There is low audio on your sound bites. Try to keep the mic close to your interviewee without actually letting them hold the mic. Don't rely on your camera mic for sound bites. The camera mic is for nat sound only.
EDITING: Overall well done. Be careful your image match your script. You show a graphic of a cornea but are talking about the process of the procedure.
OVERALL: Well done.
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Date posted: January 15, 2004
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "Coffee House"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :47
DELIVERY: Good voice over. Nice job doing your stand-up at the location of the story and dressing for the job!
INTERVIEWS: Please introduce your interviewee's (sound bites) if the sound bite is going to be more then a word or two.
ORIGINALITY: Good
WRITING: Although you used descriptive sentences the thoughts and answers to the basic 5W&H where left incomplete. See overall notes.
VIDEO: Be careful with dead space when framing your interviews.
AUDIO: Very low on your interviews
EDITING: Good
OVERALL: What makes this coffee house so unique? All coffee houses want to be the town meeting place, the fact that this wanted to fill a community need and help recovering addicts made this coffee house unique and therefore worthy of a story. How long was it in operation and why should we be concerned with it now closing? The story needs to be expanded to fill the required :50 seconds in length. We time from the moment the voice-over begins to the end of the VO/stand-up. Thanks.
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Date posted: January 18, 2004
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "Carol Romano"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Try to slow down in your voice-over and stand-up. To add energy but not speed try smiling whiling recording your voice-over. This is an old radio trick. Also, nice job placing your stand-up on location. Suggestion: a transitional stand-up (ie. Placed in the middle of your story) is usually only used if you need to move from one location to another. As your story takes place at the Agency, an ending stand-up would have been more appropriate.
INTERVIEWS: Good choice for your sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Nice job choosing a story with statewide appeal.
WRITING: Good job getting the facts in and writing in and out of your sound bites. Because this is a human interest story the sound bites where very important in allowing tion]): Good job on the voice-over and stand-up. Suggestion: you only need to walk during your stand-up if there is an express purpose, IE: to show the relationship between one element in the story to another.
INTERVIEWS: Sound bites interesting and do get in close, it allows the viewer to feel like a part of your story.
AUDIO: The voice-over is very difficult to understand on our copy. The nat sound overpowers the voice-over, especially at the very beginning.
EDITING: Good job matching images tacts in and writing into your sound bites. Be careful not to cross the line into an informercial. Your wrap-up line almost sounded like a recommendation for the playhouse and therefore not impartial journalism.
VIDEO: Pix illustrated the story? Tri-pod.
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Date posted: January 14, 2004
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "On Star"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :49
DELIVERY: Good delivery and nice job on your stand-up.
INTERVIEWS:
ORIGINALITY:
WRITING:
VIDEO: Good job getting close-ups and varying your shots.
AUDIO:
EDITING: Good job matching images to your script.
OVERALL: Currently On-Star is only available on GM products, by focusing your story on one product, IE: On-Star and having your interviews from a GM dealer the story crosses the line into an infomercial for On-Star. Please focus the story on the GPS systems and the new technology out there today and less on one product. Be careful not to show logo's and trade signs in your story. A journalist should be impartial and not show a preference to one side of an issue or product.
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Date posted: January 14, 2004
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "Papa Joe"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50 (NO PAD – please use opening shot in timing)
DELIVERY: Good voice-over delivery and nice job placing your stand-up on location.
INTERVIEWS: Good sound bite from Papa Joe. Suggestion: for your second sound bite, a clip from one of the children would have been nice since Papa Joe talks about making the kids happy with his job.
ORIGINALITY: Well done story with a community feel. Who doesn't love the Good Humor trucks in summertime! And a dog too!
WRITING: Good
VIDEO: Good. Nice job filling in with photo for shots with Joe and the young clients.
AUDIO: Good job incorporating nat sound into your story.
EDITING: Good job matching images to the script.
OVERALL: We almost missed airing this because there is no pad at the beginning and end. We started timing this when the voice-over technically making this story :45 seconds in length. Please be careful to include a :5 pad at both ends of the story.
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Evaluations for 2002-2003
DATE: 12/6/02
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "Performance Cars"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good delivery. Nice speed and vocalization.
INTERVIEWS: Use only the sound bites which will move the story forward. Eric's interview would be a good place to get the "why" answered in your story. For all those who are not car aficionado's why do people want to do this to their cars?
ORIGINALITY: Good interesting story.
WRITING: Re-think how you would like to write into your sound bite. A few suggestions are listed on page 12 of the "How To" manual. The "Eric elaborates on the subject…" is not needed.
VIDEO: Good b-roll images
AUDIO: good nat sound in the beginning of your piece. See note below.
EDITING: see overall note below.
OVERALL There is a sound glitch in your piece right after the voice over "Eric elaborates on the subject.." dead sound space, then Eric begins speaking. This dead space is for a couple of seconds and therefore is very noticeable. Please fix and re-submit. Thanks.
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DATE: 12/6/02
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "Bedazzled"
Status: Re-submit
Length: 1:00
DELIVERY: The sig-out should only be placed in the middle of the story if it's moving the story from one location to another. Currently, you story focus' on one artist and is shoot entirely at her store. Your sig-out would be better placed at the end of the story as a wrap-up of the story.
INTERVIEWS: Good.
ORIGINALITY: Good
WRITING: See audio. Because of the sound glitches it was hard to follow the writing in it's entirety.
VIDEO: Good
AUDIO: There are a few sound glitches in your tape. Be careful when laying down your audio track that is flows and you are not cutting into words and mid-sentence.
EDITING:
OVERALL: the timing needs to be :50 seconds from the beginning of the voice-over to the end of the voice-over. The SIG-out has also been standardized. Please see page 19 in the "How to Manual". Please re-edit and resubmit. Thanks.
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DATE: 12/6/02
SCHOOL EVALUATION TAPE #: 044
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: "Soap Lady"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: :55
DELIVERY: A little fast. Try to slow down in your delivery. If it sounds too slow to yourself – it's probably the right speed for the listening audience. Try smiling while your recording, this will add energy without speed.
INTERVIEWS: Good interview subject.
ORIGINALITY: Good interesting story
WRITING: Nice job getting your facts in. Be careful in writing into your sound bites. "…in that" can be eliminated – it's not necessary in the introduction of the sound bite.
VIDEO: good b-roll
AUDIO: nice nat sound at the beginning of your piece
EDITING: On a whole this was well done. Be careful with jump cuts
OVERALL: This is a nice town news piece, unfortunately the timing needs to be :50 seconds from the beginning of the voice-over to the end of the voice-over. The SIG-out has also been standardized. Please see page 19 in the "How to Manual". Please re-record your voice-over, re-edit and resubmit. We hope to see this re-submitted – it's a worthwhile story!
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DATE: 12/6/02
SCHOOL EVALUATION TAPE #: 045
School: Daniel Hand High School
Town: Madison
Slug: Guide Puppies
Status: Re-submit
Length: :55
DELIVERY: Good job
INTERVIEWS: Good choice for your interview. Suggestion: a sound bite from the Fidelco Guide Dogs Association based in Bloomfield CT.
ORIGINALITY: Nice story with state wide appeal.
WRITING: good job. Interesting and clever intro into your story
VIDEO: More b-roll of the training process would help move your story forward.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING: see video.
OVERALL: This was a clever opening – unfortunately, television is a visual medium and the audience needs to see an image. With a black screen we would be receiving phone calls that something is wrong with our telecast! Also, the timing needs to be :50 seconds from the beginning of the voice-over to the end of the voice-over. Please re-edit and re-submit. This is a worthwhile story and we would like to see it re-submitted. Thanks.
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