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Bunnell High School
March 11, 2008
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Nitrous Oxide/Paintball"
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Work on enunciation. Slow down a bit for better delivery. Stand up was a little repetitive of the story. Try to wrap up with different information.
INTERVIEWS: The first interview was interesting. The second sound bite was too long. Could have used some of the sound bite information in voiceover.
ORIGINALITY: Interesting topic.
WRITING: Well written. Told an interesting story. Nice job showing one person who still uses the nitrous oxide and one who switched.
VIDEO: Good shots. Moved nicely.
AUDIO: A lot of ambient sound. Make sure you edit from the lavilier mic rather than the camera mic.
EDITING: Nice job.
OVERALL: Good. Next time work on a clear delivery.
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School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "CT DEP Green Plan"
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: A bit too fast. Work on adding emotion to the story with tone and inflection.
INTERVIEWS: Great person to interview. Would have been good to hear from someone from a construction company or the town to hear another perspective.
ORIGINALITY: Good story idea.
WRITING: Well told. Sound bite ran a little long but it had good info.
VIDEO: The video wasn't matching up with what was being said. Show the open space when you were talking about it. The interview was backlit so you couldn't see his face because it was too dark.
AUDIO: Good levels.
EDITING: Match the video with the script.
OVERALL: Relevant story. Next time focus on editing the video to the script to tell the story.
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School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Gas Prices"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good energy. Make sure the reporter stays impartial in the stand up. The wrap up was an opinion and needs to be attributed. He could say - so and so group thinks this is why government should regulate.
INTERVIEWS: Excellence job showing both sides of the story. Nice work seeking out a person of authority to interview. Consumer who was interviewed should have been at his car or gas pump. Didn't make sense to shoot him at his house.
ORIGINALITY: Great story idea, but very ambitions for 1 min story. Too complex to cover in such limited time.
WRITING: This is such a complex story that it is really to much to cover in a one minute student news story. Story could have been about people who want to have government regulation. Speculator concept is very hard to talk about in 1 min. Hard for general viewer to understand and would probably take a 3 to 4 minute story to explain. Needed to focus more and drop conclusion at the end. You need to attribute the thought that government needs to regulate the industry. Should not come across as being the reporter's opinion. Nice job getting people on both sides of the story to contribute.
VIDEO: Could have used a tight shot of the person pumping gas, paying for gas, putting gas cap back on, etc. Needed more footage. The shots of the parked cars not using gas didn't relate to the story. Don't show full shot of company sign up on screen for 4 or 5 seconds. Really singles out one company as being high priced. Stand up was much too dark. Highly backlit.
AUDIO: Consistant levels.
EDITING: You really didn't show what you were talking about. Need to make sure the video matches the script.
OVERALL: Need to rewrite with more focus. Try to find one part of the complex story to write about. Re-shoot the stand up with different writing and better lighting.
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School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Graffiti Violence"
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good job doing the stand up in front of graffiti.
INTERVIEWS: The sound bites were good from both interview subjects. The first interview was shot from too high above the interviewee. Should be at eye level with the subject. There was a spot that was too loose on the editing where we heard the reporter asking part of the question. A little too much light in the background on 1st interview.
ORIGINALITY: Interesting.
WRITING: There are two sides to the story. In the future you could do the other positive side of the story for another student news story.
VIDEO: A few tight shots of the graffiti would really shown the detail of the work. Would have been good to see the janitor cleaning graffiti at the school. A tight shot of the bucket and sponges would have been good.
AUDIO: Consistant levels.
EDITING: You mentioned the community service side. Would have been nice to see a mural when you are talking about that.
OVERALL: Good story. Nicely done.
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School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Teen Fire Volunteers"
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good. Would have been cool to have the stand up in a fire truck.
INTERVIEWS: Nice choice of people to interview. Good bites.
ORIGINALITY: Great choice of subject.
WRITING: Well focused story. Nicely told.
VIDEO: Good video. Should have used a light for the inside shots though. Outside shots were great but interior shots were not as well lit. We would have been great to show firefighters in action. Maybe shots of them fighting a fire or at least training.
AUDIO: Consistant levels. Would have been good to have natural sound.
EDITING: Good job.
OVERALL: Good.
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School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Alcohol Free Music"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good. Nice delivery style.
INTERVIEWS: Great sound bite. Good person to talk to and was interesting to listen to. Unfortunately we couldn't see him.
ORIGINALITY: Great idea for a story.
WRITING: The writing was not focused. Good order would be to talk about how teens love music and it's important for them to go to places where they can listen and play that aren't bars. Then talk about the places they can go. You spent too much time talking about the background and not enough on the places they can go.
VIDEO: Steady camera work. Interview was much too dark. There was a glitch in video with buzz on the café sign shot. The story was about music but we never saw anyone performing at any of these places.
AUDIO: Seems to be a glitch with a buzz on the shot of the sign with the Café.
EDITING: There was something strange about the stand up. The person at the end was still talking but we couldn't hear him.
OVERALL: Need to re-write to better focus the story. The style and delivery was good but the story didn't seem to go from point A to B in an orderly fashion. Also need to re-shoot interview with light. Too dark to broadcast. Also need some shots of someone playing music and kids listening.
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School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Don't Let the Bed Bugs Bite"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Very monotone. Need to add energy to delivery.
INTERVIEWS: Good person to talk to and good bite.
ORIGINALITY: Newsworthy topic.
WRITING: You can't single out a business or school for having a bed bug problem in these stories. Student news stories run for a long time and the problem may have been resolved when story is still running. We don't know when the business had the issue or the scale of the problem. Keep it general by just saying universities. Don't identify a specific place. University officials or apartment owners will take issue with their business being featured as a place with bed bugs. Also, address how they get rid of them?
VIDEO: This is a tough story to visualize. If you don't have footage of the bed bugs and without disparaging anyone it is tough. Would have been good to see exterminator spraying for bugs.
AUDIO: Good levels.
EDITING: No issues.
OVERALL: Worth re-shooting to take out any identifiable buildings. Take out University of Bridgeport footage. Instead of talking about them specifically you could say - at least one college in CT has had a problem. You could use generic interior shot of a college dorm. Also, you need to re-record voiceover with more energy.
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School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: iPod Hearing Damage
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Clear delivery.
INTERVIEWS: Good job showing both sides of the story. The parent wasn't the best choice for an interview. A doctor would have been a good source or at least a parent who was a nurse would have been better. Look for an expert. It would have been great to hear from an expert that said we will have a generation of hearing impaired and then another expert disagreeing.
ORIGINALITY: Great story choice.
WRITING: The way it was written makes it sound that iPod are the only brand that cause damage. You should mention all mp3 players could cause this problem but iPods are the most popular. You also say they "are" dangerous, but it is actually that they "can" be dangerous. Give some options on how to avoid damage such as noise cancelling earphones or turning the volume down.
VIDEO: Good. Nice mix of shots. Good job using tight shot. The shot of the stand up should have been closer. It was too wide and reporter was on the edge.
AUDIO: Good job.
EDITING: The story flowed well. Good job using establishing shots of interviewees. Nice job finding a variety of students using the iPods. When you use the line "Look around everyone is using…" it would have been great to see a group of people using them. A great shot would have been students on a bus or getting of a bus that are using iPods.
OVERALL: Great story choice. Well written, well shot, good audio. Work on interview sound bites for next time. Ask better questions.
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School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: Wiffleball: The Great Comeback
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 53
DELIVERY: Add information in the stand up. You don't want to leave the audience with a question. You want the story to answer questions.
INTERVIEWS: Neither sound bite really added to the story. Try to use sound bites to add emotion to the story.
ORIGINALITY: Interesting story idea.
WRITING: There wasn't a really focus. A good focus could have been the teams going to NY to compete. There was too much information. The story started off with a lot of details about whiffleball and then to a guy on team. A better focus would have helped. General info is good and info about team is good but one has to be dominant instead of 50/50.
VIDEO: We never see the team. The shots were way too dark. Shoot earlier in the day or use a light. All medium shots of the people playing whiffleball. There were only shots of the batter not of catcher or pitcher. There was a glitch in video of first sound bite. More b-roll was needed.
AUDIO: Great use of natural sound with the crack of the bat.
EDITING: Nice job using establishing shots. Watch use of dissolves.
OVERALL: Ok. There was a lack of focus and video to made the story stand out. The story comes in at almost 53 seconds. That is too long. It needs to be 50 seconds to fit into our broadcast schedule.
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School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: The Price of Fashion
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Great job. Great energy and confidence.
INTERVIEWS: Good job showing two sides. Try to go a little deeper. How do you justify the cost of buying expensive clothes? What makes this hot and this not hot?
ORIGINALITY: Interesting story idea. Good choice.
WRITING: The stand up was cute but didn't necessarily go along with the story. An interview with a school consulter or psychologist would have added to the story. It came across that some kids feel this way but not why. Make sure you answer why. Dig a little deeper for a real hook. The story didn't mention impressing friends until end. Good subject but no real story here.
VIDEO: No issues.
AUDIO: There was a lot of background noise in the interviews. It can be tough since mall is loud and you want to have good a background for the interview but try to look for a spot that is a little less noisy. The background noise on the second interview was way too loud. The opening voiceover had too much background noise and then just dropped out.
EDITING: Good job.
OVERALL: Pick something specific to focus on about some teens spending a lot of money on clothes. Next time pay more attention to the audio and writing.
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School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: Messages in Music
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good job with the delivery. Nice stand up. Good location for stand up.
INTERVIEWS: The sound bites didn't add to the story. You needed more substantial sound bites. Could have music teacher talk about through out history people have been afraid of the messages in music. Maybe an interview with someone in authority who thinks that many are arrested in venues that have this type of music. The sound bites need to go deeper.
ORIGINALITY: Good concept but it is difficult to address.
WRITING: It is a difficult story to tell. There are few facts so most of the story would need to be opinions from sound bites.
VIDEO: The video is copyrighted and we cannot air it on broadcast television with out permission. The story is very hard to illustrate. The video was very dark on the parent's sound bite.
AUDIO: Good job.
EDITING: Good.
OVERALL: Unfortunately we can't air this story because of the copy right on the music video. The fact that some kids like music that parents have reservation about really doesn't hold up the open or the stand up. You need more substantial writing in the voiceover. The story needs someone in authority to speak on the issue.
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School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: Explorer 659
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Very good. Nice location for stand up. Good composition of that shot.
INTERVIEWS: Great first sound bite. Good location for the first interview. The second interview was way too dark. Good job asking good questions and getting good sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Good story choice.
WRITING: Creative and well written. Nice job.
VIDEO: Good shots but it would have really added to have shots of the explorers in action and not just in the classroom.
AUDIO: No issues.
EDITING: The script talked about the explorer in action but didn't really show it expect in class.
OVERALL: Good job. Could have used more B-roll to show explorers in other situations.
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School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: Teen Gambling
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good.
INTERVIEWS: Good choice on people. Get more substantial sound bites. I enjoy doing this …but needs to be more than that. Why does the addict special do this? How bad is the problem.
ORIGINALITY: Great subject. Hard story. Good job picking something difficult.
WRITING: Good job adding a fact and legitimate source and quote.
VIDEO: All of the video was too dark. There were shadows on people's faces making it too hard to see them. The shot of the group playing cards was too long. That would have been a great place to mix in some close ups of cards, the money, etc. You can't see the guy on the left's face and the table with cards. Use a light. And be sensitive to the light balance.
AUDIO: No issues.
EDITING: There was a bad edit after addict specialist. There was glitch in the video. Everything was a medium shot. You needed more movement shots and close up shots.
OVERALL: Video was really the main problem. It's just too dark. You'd have to re-shoot this to be able to broadcast.
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School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: Video Game Violence
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good delivery in the stand up.
INTERVIEWS: Great sound bite from student. The teacher had a strong opinion on the subject.
ORIGINALITY: Great subject.
WRITING: Good job avoiding editorial and attributing your statements. Well written.
VIDEO: There were some lighting issues. Good job showing the game but beware of using a full shot of the game. You don't want the exact game to be recognizable because you are associating it with something negative.
AUDIO: Good use of natural sound.
EDITING: There was a jump cut from two guys in the hallway to one that being interviewed. It would have been better to just use the video of them talking instead of the jump cut.
OVERALL: There was no pad on the end. The editing was the weaker part of the story. Be careful of dark shots.
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2005-2006 Evaluations
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: Foreign Policy
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Work on enunciating.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices. Nice choice of sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Timely and interesting.
WRITING: Good.
VIDEO: Use more B-roll. The shot of the police cars did not really fit (or don't use for so long). You could have shown news paper headlines of foreign issues or stills. More shots of kids learning in the classroom would have been good.
AUDIO: Good.
EDITING: Use video that goes along with the script. Find wartime stills or headlines that you could use. More B-roll would help with editing.
OVERALL: Good.
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Date Posted: February 8, 2006
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: Paintball Explosion
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.84
DELIVERY: Great job.
INTERVIEWS: Wonderful choices and sound bites. Nice job showing both sides of the story.
ORIGINALITY: Good. Timely.
WRITING: Good facts. Nice job on the writing.
VIDEO: Great shots! Nice variety. Nice job rolling B-roll over your interviews. Great job using both close ups and long shots. Very good framing on your 2nd interview.
AUDIO: Great. Felt like we were there. Great use of ambient sound.
EDITING: Order was perfect. Nice flow. Great job!
OVERALL: Great work!
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Date Posted: February 8, 2006
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: Car Modifications
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.08
DELIVERY: Nice job, but a bit fast.
INTERVIEWS: Great interviews! Truly showed both sides of the story. Great balance!
ORIGINALITY: Newsworthy topic.
WRITING: Nice work. Good use of statistics and lots of information.
VIDEO: Lots of great shots. More shots of modified cars really would have added to the story. Be sure to use a tripod. Be sure lighting is good or use your own lighting. There were shadows at the dealership and on the interview.
AUDIO: No problems. Natural sound of engines or people working on cars could have added to the story.
EDITING: Good. More B-roll would have made this story even better!
OVERALL: Great job!
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Date Posted: February 8, 2006
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: Baseball Card Shows
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.75
DELIVERY: Good, but practice the stand-up. You fumbled over a few words.
INTERVIEWS: Good interviews. The first interview should have been a tighter shot. Was the first interviewee the event organizer? Be sure to clearly introduce him. The child's interview really added to the story! It would have been great if you could have gotten an interview with one of the players.
ORIGINALITY: Nice feature piece.
WRITING: Nice job! Great line to start out story.
VIDEO: Always use a tripod! There were some shaky shots. Also, more close-ups of the baseball cards really would have added to the story. Great shot of Bubba Crosby.
AUDIO: Good. Nice use of ambient sound. Mixed very well.
EDITING: Good job. Nice work using B-roll over the interview.
OVERALL: Good job!
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Date Posted: February 8, 2006
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: Stratford's Economic Development
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Good. Nice job summarizing in your stand-up. Nice location for stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Great interview. Wonderful info. An interview with a storeowner would have been good.
ORIGINALITY: Great. Timely and newsworthy.
WRITING: Nice job telling the story! Stories like this can be confusing but you did a great job.
VIDEO: Great variety of shots. Good job. A chart showing the anticipated economic growth may have been helpful.
AUDIO: Good.
EDITING: Good. Nice job matching the video with the audio. Nice job cutting between shots. Good flow.
OVERALL: Great job!
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Date Posted: February 8, 2006
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: Overcrowding Effects Academics
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Ok. Would have been better if stand-up was more relaxed
INTERVIEWS: Great choices. It would have been good to hear from a student as well. Good sound bites from interviews, but it would have been great to have the assistant principal address what could be done to help the problem.
ORIGINALITY: Ok.
WRITING: Good statistics. Good job covering all the questions.
VIDEO: Nice shots of the halls, detention and the school. More B-roll would have made the story stronger. You needed more shots of crowded hallways. It would have been great to have video of someone who was late running through the hall after the bell. Good framing of your interview.
AUDIO: Ok. It would have been great to hear some natural sound of school bells, students in the hallways, etc.
EDITING: No problems. Rolling some B-roll over the interview would have been great.
OVERALL: Good job overall. Incorporating these suggestions could make the story or your next even better.
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Date Posted: February 8, 2006
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: Garbage Museum
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Be sure to practice your stand-up. You fumbled over a few words. Nice spot for your stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Good interviewee choice, but bad sound bite for this story. A different clip would have worked better. She talks about America Recycles Day and that doesn't really fit into the story. It seemed very out of place. Another interview would have really added. Hearing from someone on the tour would have been great. Work on your introduction. You say the exact same thing she said, "She's excited…" , and then she starts out "I'm excited". Work on using other words so it doesn't sound repetitive.
ORIGINALITY: Good.
WRITING: Great facts. Interesting writing. Don't use initials. Tell us the full name. Not everyone knows what it stands for.
VIDEO: Good shots. Needs even more! Try to cut from one to the next more quickly. Do not stay on a shot for too long. Also, use better lighting for the interview. There were some glitches in the video during the stand-up.
AUDIO: Good. Nice use of ambient sound. The sound of the dumpster dumping and broken glass really added to the story.
EDITING: Good, but more shots will add to the story and make it a stronger piece.
OVERALL: Good, but find a different sound bite for the interview. A clip about how the center educates on recycling could work as a bridge to the second half of the story, but Recycling Day clip doesn't fit into the story. Find a different clip from the interview and add one or two more shots, and you'll have a great story. Please re-submit so we can get this on the air.
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Date Posted: February 8, 2006
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: CT Post Mall Expansion
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Delivery in voiceover was flat. Good energy in the stand-up. Look at the camera when you are doing the stand-up! Memorize your script or put cue cards near camera.
INTERVIEWS: Interview did not add to story. What kind of shopper was she? We couldn't hear. Interview more than one person while you are shooting and pick the best. A better person to have interviewed would have been a mall representative. How much more revenue are they hoping the expansion will bring?
ORIGINALITY: Newsworthy topic.
WRITING: Good facts to support the story.
VIDEO: Good shots. More B-roll would have been great, especially close-ups of the construction.
AUDIO: Too much loud background noise and sound. It was very hard to hear the stand-up. It was very distracting. Be sure to use a mic not the camera mic.
EDITING: None of the shots of the buildings matched with the audio. You were talking about Target and we were looking at something else. You need be sure the audio and what we see matches up. It makes the story much easier to understand. You cut to the interview too early. You were talking and we were looking at her talking head.
OVERALL: Good story idea, nice shots, and good writing. Work on editing and pay attention to detail! Also, work on the sound problems. Please re-submit with adjustments. Thanks!
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Date Posted: February 8, 2006
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: Adventure Challenge
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Work on diction and energy. The delivery was flat. You need to make the story appealing through the story telling.
INTERVIEWS: Great interview subjects. Nice job a person in the program, one who runs the program, and one who went through the program.
ORIGINALITY: Good.
WRITING: Good writing, but it was hard to understand at first due to the delivery. The opening line was great it was lost in the tone. Remember not to put your opinion in the stand up. You could say "some students feel" or "some Stratford teachers feel".
VIDEO: Good shots. You could have used more B roll when you were talking about how kids can work together or trust each other. The framing on the stand up needs work. There is too much head space on the stand up.
AUDIO: Good.
EDITING: OK. A stronger read with emotion will help with the editing and overall story.
OVERALL: Nice work, but keep suggestions in mind to improve story.
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Date Posted: November 29, 2005
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: Stratford Elects a Mayor
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: Pretty good. Nice stand-up and summary. Work on diction.
INTERVIEWS: Good choice. Nice sound bite and good clip of the winner announcement. Great initiative to be there the night of the election and get in the moment clips. It also would have been nice to hear about his plans for what he'll do for the town.
ORIGINALITY: Great! Newsworthy. Wonderful initiative!
WRITING: Good job. It would have been even better if you had told us what type of government Stratford was changing from. What are the mayor's plans for the city? Be careful not to be redundant in your introduction for the interview. You say he is ecstatic about the winning and he says he's so excited. Might have considered different wording in the intro.
VIDEO: Great job getting shots of the line of people waiting to vote, the results, and campaign signs. Great framing of the interview.
AUDIO: No problems.
EDITING: Good.
OVERALL: Good job!
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2004-2005 Evaluations
Date Posted: April 11, 2005
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: BHS Volleyball Champs
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.88
DELIVERY: When you do your voiceover practice it a couple times. It sounded like you fumbled over a few words. More enthusiasm in the voiceover would help the flow of the story.
INTERVIEWS: Good interviews. Great choices and nice job introducing the interviews.
ORIGINALITY: Interesting, newsworthy piece.
WRITING: Well written.
VIDEO: Great shots of the volleyball game and the fans in the stands.
AUDIO: Nice job using ambient sound. The audio on the first interview was a bit lower than the rest of the audio.
EDITING: You need to work on your edits. Make them sharp. Be careful not to clipping audio and having two audio tracks overlap. Interviews were cut into a bit too quick, and also ended abruptly. When you were introducing the coach you were still talking when he was talking.
OVERALL: Nice piece. Work on sharp crisp edits and re-record your voiceover and it will make your story much stronger.
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Date Posted: April 11, 2005
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: Stratford Mayoral Election
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.18
DELIVERY: Good delivery. Enthusiastic and clear.
INTERVIEWS: Good job getting two different points of views. Good introductions. It would have been great if you could have gotten some comments from a town council representative. How do they feel about this change?
ORIGINALITY: Newsworthy story.
WRITING: Good job telling us what is going on and writing into your interviews. Good job writing into your interviews.
VIDEO: Good outside shots. It would have been great to have footage from a town council meeting. If you had gone to a meeting and gotten some inside shots it would have really added to your piece.
AUDIO: Make sure your levels are consistent throughout the story. The first interview was lower. When you record your stand up, be aware of your surroundings. It was a bit hard to hear, due to traffic or wind.
EDITING: Good job. Next time, try spacing out your interviews so it is less talking heads. Mix it up with some B-roll.
OVERALL: Good story. Next time include more footage and really get into the action. For example, go to the town council meeting. Think about visuals. Many times action will help you tell your story.
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Date Posted: April 11, 2005
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: Target Construction
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 49.60
DELIVERY: Nice job. Good pace and clear delivery.
INTERVIEWS: Good interview, but we need to get the other side of the story as well. You need an interview with someone for the construction, such as another citizen, a developer, a city representative, or someone from Target. With only one interview from someone that is opposed to the construction, your story is lopsided.
ORIGINALITY: Good story idea. Has a large impact on the community.
WRITING: The writing in this story is very one sided. Remember as a news story it should not be biased, and as a journalist your opinion should not be in the story. Reporters and newsrooms have to be neutral when reporting.
VIDEO: Good shots of construction site. We would have liked to see more footage. The interview talks about this construction being right across from a residential area. It would have been great to have a wide shot that showed both the construction and the residential area, when that was mentioned.
AUDIO: The audio for the interview was a bit lower than the voiceover. Make sure to always use a microphone.
EDITING: Good job, but the interview was a bit long. Use short meaningful sound bites. You can paraphrase some of his comments in the voice over when you are introducing the interview.
OVERALL: Newsworthy story idea. Work on the writing to show both sides of the story and add an interview of someone that is for the construction. A story should have balance by ensuring that you have both sides of an issue. Be sure to stay objective when reporting.
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Date Posted: April 11, 2005
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: Movie Piracy
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.85
DELIVERY: Well spoken, but a bit fast in the beginning.
INTERVIEWS: Good interviews. Great job getting two opposing views and showing both sides of the story. The locations of your interviews were great. Nice job.
ORIGINALITY: Very interesting and timely.
WRITING: Good writing. You included lots of information and covered all the questions. You use an abbreviation, MPA, but remember viewers do not always know what these abbreviations stand for. You need to tell us what the abbreviation stands for.
VIDEO: Good shots. Nice job getting both indoor and outdoor shots. The footage of the computer screen was very jumpy. It made it very difficult to see what was on the screen.
AUDIO: The background noise in the beginning was distracting, especially when it just dropped out. Make sure you use the microphone for all your interviews.
EDITING: Good job. Nice work matching the video to the audio.
OVERALL: Good story. Very relevant and informative. To make the story even stronger bring the natural sound down in the beginning, slow down a bit, and explain what the MPA stands for.
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Date Posted: April 11, 2005
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: For Better or Worse: Teen Death
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.75
DELIVERY: Good delivery and even pace.
INTERVIEWS: Good interviews and introductions. It would have been informative to know who the teacher you were interviewing was referring to. Was she speaking of all the teen deaths that have happened over her time as a teacher, did she lose a family member or was she referring to a student that had recently passed away?
ORIGINALITY: Good.
WRITING: More details and statistics would have made this story stronger. Is Stratford's teen death toll higher than most high school? Did a student die this year? Have the number of teen deaths increased?
VIDEO: Nice shots. Good placement for your stand-up.
AUDIO: Good audio levels. Remember to use a microphone for all your interviews. It seemed like the teacher was talking into a camera microphone.
EDITING: Good job for the most part. There was one glitch at the beginning. A new shot was up for a ¼ second that should not have been there. The video of the two kids playing with cars seemed a bit out of place, until a few seconds later when you mention younger siblings. You may want to hold off on that video until it is being mentioned.
OVERALL: Nice work. Adding more details to the writing and working on the small glitch in the video would make this piece even better.
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Date Posted: April, 11, 2005
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: Teen Gambling
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.87
DELIVERY: Good delivery. Nice location for stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Great interviews. Very good choices for interviewees. Great job fitting in three interviews that all added to the story. They would have been even stronger if you added a little more information to the introductions. For example, did the parent's son or daughter lose a lot of money gambling? Make sure you select the best sound bite from your interviews to feature in the story.
ORIGINALITY: Timely. Gambling is a hot topic right now.
WRITING: Well written. Good job covering who, what, where, when, why, and how.
VIDEO: Great gambling shots. The football shots were a bit shaky. Always use a tripod
AUDIO: Good levels.
EDITING: The footage matched the script nicely.
OVERALL: Good job. Nice work putting all the pieces together to make an interesting piece.
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Date posted: March 25, 2004
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Paintball"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY (How is the voice used to tell the story [pitch, tone, diction]): Good job on your voice-over. Your stand-up is well done, but we will need you to place yourself in another location. Suggestion: if you are on a paintball field this will be a more universal location and not supporting a single store.
INTERVIEWS (Sound bites interesting and did they enhance the story?): Good.
ORIGINALITY (Story creative, unique, statewide appeal?): Good angle used.
WRITING (Report written clearly, creatively, & grammatically correct?): Nice job getting the facts of the growth seen in this sport into your script.
VIDEO (Pix illustrated the story? Tri-pod used, lighting, composition?): More b-roll is needed. Currently you have only wide angle shots. How about close-up and medium shots. We also need to see more images of different people playing the sport. (see editing note)
AUDIO (Clarity, natural sound, enhance the story?): Good
EDITING(Pictures and sound used in the proper sequence to tell a story? Pictures match the script?): You need more images in order to have adequate shots to cover your script. You mention the different ages and sexes now playing the sport, but we don't see this anywhere in your story. Remember TV is a visual and audio genre. We need to see and hear what the story is.
OVERALL(All the elements used to tell an interesting story for the viewer?): You have to be careful not to focus on a business sign when you are telling an overall story. Currently you have the "Splatter Zone" storefront throughout your story. This will read more like an advertisement for the company. Please replace the images of the storefront with more b-roll. Thank you.
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Date posted: March 9, 2004
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Trading Cards"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good voice-over and delivery.
INTERVIEWS: The interview sound bites should not be rehearsed and should add facts or support the data in your script.
ORIGINALITY: The premise of the story is good, what is the universal appeal of the story?
WRITING: You need more facts to support your premise. If it's collectable, what is the price range of the cards? Are there card playing clubs around town. My town library offers a regular scheduled Yu-Gi-Yo tournament for middle and high school students. I'm sure there are other town community centers and libraries doing the same in your area. By including your town events you are opening the area of interest to community wide.
VIDEO: You will need more b-roll to support your story. Suggestion: at the beginning of your script you mention a list of different trading cards, we need to see an example of each card you mention as you are mentioning it.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING: See video
OVERALL: You will need more images to support your story. Please try to expand this into the community area.
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Date posted: March 9, 2004
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Stratford Arts Commission"
Status:Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Try to slow down in your voice-over recording. It's a little fast
INTERVIEWS: Good intro and sound bite
ORIGINALITY: Good community story.
WRITING: Good job covering the facts of the subject.
VIDEO: More b-roll with a variation in your images will help your editing process. We should see close-ups and medium shots.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING: Overall this was good. More images would help with the flow of the piece.
OVERALL:
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Date posted: March 5, 2004
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "New Driving Laws"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY (How is the voice used to tell the story [pitch, tone, diction]): Please slow down in your voice-over. If you smile when recording this will add energy, without added speed. If a voice-over is too fast it makes it difficult for the viewing hearing for the first time to understand.
INTERVIEWS (Sound bites interesting and did they enhance the story?): Good
ORIGINALITY (Story creative, unique, statewide appeal?): Good, timely subject
WRITING (Report written clearly, creatively, & grammatically correct?): Good job covering both sides with your soundbites.
VIDEO (Pix illustrated the story? Tri-pod used, lighting, composition?): More b-roll is needed. The night shot will come out totally black when we dubbed down another generation to air. Also, more b-roll of varying angles is needed. How about medium and close-ups? More images of kids driving, (without the car being packed with friends!) How about an image of the mother with her teenager. This will set-up the interview shot. Also, you don't want an interviewee talking directly into the camera, with their lips moving but we can't hear the dialog. You can setup an interview with the person doing someone or talking to someone. When framing your interview, go ahead and get in close with your framing. This will bring the interviewee into the story. You don't want dead space above their heads.
AUDIO (Clarity, natural sound, enhance the story?): Good
EDITING(Pictures and sound used in the proper sequence to tell a story? Pictures match the script?): See video.
OVERALL(All the elements used to tell an interesting story for the viewer?): We will need you to give this one more try in editing.
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Date posted: March 5, 2004
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Teen Drivers"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Try to memorize your script before recording the voice-over. This will help the flow of your piece.
INTERVIEWS: Good
ORIGINALITY: Good job covering a timely issue.
WRITING: Good job covering the facts. Be careful not to editorialize your wrap-up.
VIDEO: Good job getting close-ups. This story would benefit from more images of teens driving. You should only use an image once in your story. The car crash photo is only needed once and for a few seconds. Next time, tighten up on your framing from the interviews. You want a headshot or shoulder shot to bring the interviewee into the story – no dead space above the head should be seen.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING: Overall good.
OVERALL
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Date posted: March 5, 2004
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Birdeye Basketball"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Please slow down in your voice-over delivery.
INTERVIEWS: Good interview subjects. The first interview sound bite could be tightened: cut the first line and start at "I thought it was a perfect sport to put my daughter in because, etc.". Nice job on the second sound bite.
ORIGINALITY: The story needs to be focused on the community aspect of the basketball program offered at the Birdseye complex. Is it offered free?, What ages, Who runs it, etc.
WRITING: You need to answer the 5 W's & H for the program offered. WHO, WHAT, WHEN, WHERE, WHY and HOW.
VIDEO: Good
AUDIO: Overall good. Nice job putting your ending stand-up on location. The location sound drowns out your wrap-up so be careful with sound levels.
EDITING: Good
OVERALL: Please don't editorialize in your story. Stick to the facts and let the community program and the sound bites tell the story. The script will need to be tightened up, re-edit and re-submit. It's a worthwhile story to do one more time.
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Date posted: March 5, 2004
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Coffee Shop"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good. Good job placing your stand-up on location.
INTERVIEWS: Good 1st interview. Suggestion: interview with the owner of the coffee shop. What percentage does he see of his customers is youth based.
ORIGINALITY: good
WRITING: Okay
VIDEO: You need more b-roll to match images to your script. IE: you talk about all the things people can do in a coffee shop, we should see them as you list them. IE: laptop use, tv, music, etc. The coffee shops of today are quickly becoming the community centers of many small towns. Currently all we see is different types of drinks, not the activities taking place.
AUDIO: good
EDITING: see video
OVERALL: Please get more video and re-edit one more time.
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Date posted: March 5, 2004
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Fox Student News"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good. Try to memorize your script and practice reading it out loud several times before recording. This way you won't stumble over anyone's name. In real life, you would need to re-record the voice-over, it's a big faux pas to get's someone's name wrong or to stumble over it.
INTERVIEWS: Good interview subjects. The 2nd sound bite could be shortened a bit.
ORIGINALITY: Good.
WRITING: good job writing into your sound bites.
VIDEO: More b-roll would be good. Suggestion: how about a team of students actually shooting a story. Currently the images are just of students working on computers, to the uninformed the images speak of a computer class, not a broadcast class.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING: See video note.
OVERALL:
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Evaluations for 2002-2003
Date:7/10/03
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Paint Ball"
Status: Re-submit
Length:
DELIVERY: Good delivery on your voice-over.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices on your interview subjects and sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Good
WRITING: Good job writing into your sound bites. Due to the sensitivity of focusing just on the price of the "guns" aspect of paintball, we suggest broadening the premise to include the cost of all the equipment as well as the playing time.
VIDEO: More b-roll on the game being played, including medium and close-up images.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING: See video and overall.
OVERALL: We would prefer you be specific with the term "guns" and reference them as "paintball guns" each time. Due to the Student News airing within children's programming we have to be extremely careful with the content of all the programs – including Student News. In this same area, do you have a tighter shot of your first interview that would not show a teenager holding a gun?
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Date:7/10/03
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "On-line Gaming"
Status: Re-submit
Length:
DELIVERY: Good delivery and stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Good
ORIGINALITY: Good, interesting story.
WRITING: Try to stick to specific facts. In your opening you jump from referring to advance technology to the PS2 network adopter – do you need a PS2 adopter to play on-line? The script is unclear in this section and makes a jump from one thought to another. Also, how long has on-line gaming been available – you mention several years? Will future computers come with the ability to play on-line games without having to purchase special equipment, and therefore become more available to the general public? Because this is new technology, the more facts about the technology and it's future use the better.
VIDEO: It is my understanding you have release forms to use the images from the gaming companies. Next time please submit the release forms with your tapes. Thanks.
AUDIO: There should not be a break in your voice-over without a specific reason.
EDITING:
OVERALL: This is very close to air. One more time in script and editing. Thanks.
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Date:7/3/03
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Bridgeport Bluefish/Sound Tigers"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY (How is the voice used to tell the story [pitch, tone, diction): This was a little fast, but otherwise good.
INTERVIEWS (Sound bites interesting and did they enhance the story?): Good
ORIGINALITY (Story creative, unique, statewide appeal?): See note on writing.
WRITING (Report written clearly, creatively, & grammatically correct?): As it stands, this is more of a commercial for the Blue Fish and Sound Tigers then a news story. What is the 'hook' of the story, (The focus)? Possible considerations: the impact the teams are having on the community, and/or the economy.
VIDEO (Pix illustrated the story? Tri-pod used, lighting, composition?): More variation in your shots will help in your editing and pacing of the piece. Make sure to get plenty of medium and close-up images. Good job framing your interview subjects.
AUDIO (Clarity, natural sound, enhance the story?):
EDITING(Pictures and sound used in the proper sequence to tell a story? Pictures match the script?): See video note.
OVERALL(All the elements used to tell an interesting story for the viewer?): You are almost there with this piece. Please rethink your script. Thanks.
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Date:7/3/03
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "The Garbage Museum"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY (How is the voice used to tell the story [pitch, tone, diction): Good job placing your stand-up on location. To help add energy to your voice-over try smiling while recording the script. This is an old radio trick to add energy and pacing without adding speed.
INTERVIEWS (Sound bites interesting and did they enhance the story?): Good choice. Suggestion: a second interview with a person/child who is experiencing the exhibits.
ORIGINALITY (Story creative, unique, statewide appeal?): Good story with statewide appeal.
WRITING (Report written clearly, creatively, & grammatically correct?): Good job covering the facts.
VIDEO (Pix illustrated the story? Tri-pod used, lighting, composition?): Good variation in your b-roll.
AUDIO (Clarity, natural sound, enhance the story?): Good consistent levels. Suggestion: This is a perfect story for natural sound from the machines.
EDITING(Pictures and sound used in the proper sequence to tell a story? Pictures match the script?): Good job matching the images to the script. Suggestion: try to not have one static image on screen for longer then a couple of seconds.
OVERALL(All the elements used to tell an interesting story for the viewer?): Well done.
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Date:7/3/03
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Budget Cuts"
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50
DELIVERY: When recording your voice-over try memorizing your script first, then recording it like you where talking to a family member. Also, smile throughout your recording, this will help with the pacing of the delivery, without adding speed.
INTERVIEWS: Good. Suggestion – how about the Superintendent of schools for their perspective.
ORIGINALITY: Good, timely issue.
WRITING: Nice job covering the facts. Be careful when writing into and out of your sound bites that you are supporting the sound bite you will use.
VIDEO: Good. Suggestion; more variation in your shots. You need more medium and close-ups to help with the editing. Currently, you have too few images to pace the story correctly.
AUDIO: Be careful with the nat sound in your stand-up. At times it overpowers your stand-up.
EDITING:
OVERALL Overall this is a well done piece.
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Date:7/3/03
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Real Life Money from Video Games"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good voice-over. In your stand-up remember to smile – this is suppose to be fun.
INTERVIEWS: Good
ORIGINALITY: Good concept, but the premise needs tightening up.
WRITING: There are many viewers who are unfamiliar with on-line gaming (I am one of them), at the end of your piece I still wasn't clear as to What is on-line gaming??? You need to go back and answer the basic questions all journalist need to answer in a story; Who, What, When, Where, Why and How.
VIDEO: Unable to judge due to lack of original footage.
AUDIO: Good consistent levels.
EDITING: Good
OVERALL: We are going to have to ask that the script be re-written to include the 5 W's & H. Remember your audience is all ages across the state. Thanks
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Date:7/3/03
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: High School Myths
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good voice-over delivery. It's best to place yourself in the midst of your story (ie. Location) for the stand-up.
INTERVIEWS: Interviews should add information to your story. How about a local historian or the historical society to give you background info on the white lady.
ORIGINALITY: Good job going outside the school for a story concerning the community.
WRITING: Currently this is a subjective piece. More facts need to be included in your story on the myth, it's history and the effect it has on the community.
VIDEO: More images are needed. If you go to the historical society for interviews this would be another great place for images.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING:
OVERALL: Good first try.
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Date:7/3/03
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "School Uniforms"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: When recording your voice-over try memorizing your script first, then recording it like you where talking to a family member. Also, smile throughout your recording, this will help with the pacing of the delivery, without adding speed
INTERVIEWS: The sound bites should add information and move the story forward.
ORIGINALITY: Interesting concept. Are school uniforms becoming the norm in public schools?
WRITING: Stay objective in your reporting, currently this is an opinion piece. Remember to answer the 5 W's & H (Who, What, When, Where, Why, and How)
VIDEO: More b-roll to support your script is needed. The images should match what your script is stating.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING: see video note.
OVERALL:
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Date:7/3/03
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Whats Up With Pot Holes"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good on voice-over. Suggestion for stand-up – dress the part of a reporter, this will add credibility to your story.
INTERVIEWS: Good choice going to the DEP for your sound bite. I'm not sure the interview subject is who DEP should have assigned to you. If your interview is not working, it's okay to ask for a second person. Then you can take the best soundbite when you are editing.
ORIGINALITY: Good.
WRITING: Good. Question: why do pot holes show up every year? The DEP could answer this questions for you!
VIDEO: Good variation
AUDIO: Good consistent levels.
EDITING: Good
OVERALL
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Date:7/3/03
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Backyard Wrestling"
Status: Resubmit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good voice-over delivery.
INTERVIEWS: The interviews should reflect both sides of the issue.
ORIGINALITY: Okay. This is a difficult and controversial subject to try to tackle in a :50 second piece.
WRITING: Good
VIDEO: Some of your footage looks to be staged. Images are just as important when reporting on both sides of an issue.
AUDIO: Good consistent levels with good nat sound layered in.
EDITING:
OVERALL: Due to the content of the images we won't be able to air this piece. Student News is broadcast during family and children's viewing times. Due to FCC guidelines much of your footage, if emulated would be a danger to kids. We need to ask you to rethink your storyboard. Thank you
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Date:7/3/03
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Safe Haven Law"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :49
DELIVERY: Good. Note: In your SIG-out, there is no need to mention your photographer. This will save on your timing.
INTERVIEWS: Good choice on your interview subject and sound bite.
ORIGINALITY: Good, timely subject
WRITING: Good job covering a difficult subject in ;50 seconds.
VIDEO: Good job getting b-roll from the hospital.
AUDIO: Good consistent levels.
EDITING: Good job matching your images to your script.
OVERALL: Well done.
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Date:7/3/03
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Underage Drinking"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Your deliver for your voice-over was very fast and made it difficult to understand. A good test is to have someone who is not familiar listen to the story without viewing it. On your stand-up, try to memorize what you are going to say ahead of time. It's a good idea to practice a few times. Even then, you may need to take several takes to get the stand-up correct.
INTERVIEWS: Good choice for your first interview with the police officer. Make sure each interview (sound bite) used will add to your story and move it forward.
ORIGINALITY: Good
WRITING: Good job getting the facts in to support your premise.
VIDEO: More b-roll is needed to support your script. Try not to re-use any shots in the same story.
AUDIO:
EDITING: Your images should match the script. You need approximately 30 minutes of a variety of shots to edit down to a 1 minute story.
OVERALL: This is a good start, but more images are needed to support your story. You mentioned the mortality rate at the beginning of the story, that is the only time we need to see the cemetery.
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Date:7/2/03
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Student Athletes and Supplements"
Status: "Re-submit"
Length: 1:00
DELIVERY: A little fast – try to slow down in your voice-over delivery. A trick of the trade is to smile throughout your voice-over, this will add energy without adding speed.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices. Nice job getting both sides of your story. Be careful to use only the best of your soundbites. Don't let your interviews tell the entire story.
ORIGINALITY: Good interesting story.
WRITING: Good job writing into and out of your sound bites.
VIDEO: currently most of your images are wide or medium shots – more close-ups will help you in your editing processes and the pace of your piece.
AUDIO: There is a problem with the sound in the ending Stand-up. Please test your mic and re-record your SIG-out.
EDITING: Please don't leave a break in the sound for any extended period of time. The stretch between the end of the voice-over and the beginning of the SIG-out can be tightened up.
OVERALL: This needs to be edited down to :50 seconds. The timing of the piece runs from the moment the voice-over begins to the end of the SIG-out. Also, your SIG-out will need to be re-shot due to the sound problem. Thanks.
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Date:7/2/03
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Story Owner"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: A little fast on the voice-over. Also, try to record your voice-over in one sitting. There is a break in the voice-over where it should be smooth throughout. The voice-over script should be memorized before you start to record it. The stand-up at the end (SIG-out) has you walking in front of the store. Only walk if you are transitioning from one area or scene to another. The movement should have a purpose in telling the story.
INTERVIEWS: The interview with the women store owner has bad sound. Please don't rely on your camera mic for anything other than natural sound. Always use a hand-held mic to record the interviews.
ORIGINALITY: Good, interesting story.
WRITING: Nice job writing into your sound bites. Also nice choice on the sound bites you selected to use to tell your story.
VIDEO: Okay
AUDIO: See interview
EDITING:
OVERALL: We will need the interview re-shot with better audio. As it is currently, once we dub down another generation to air we will lose this interview sound entirely. Thanks
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Date:7/2/03
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "BAYM"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Nice pacing on your voice-over.
INTERVIEWS: Good choices on your interview subjects and sound bites.
ORIGINALITY: Interesting story with statewide appeal.
WRITING: Nice job writing into and out of your sound bites and covering the basic facts in your piece.
VIDEO: Try not to shoot your interviews and stand-up against a blank wall. Also be careful to keep the rule of 3rd's in mind when framing your interview and stand-ups. You have plenty of establishing shots, next time remember to also get plenty of medium and close-up shots. When you shooting footage keep the editing process in mind – you will either want to start wide, and go closer as you tell a story – or start close-up and go wide. Without plenty of close-ups you won't be able to do either.
AUDIO: good
EDITING: see video
OVERALL Nice job putting the elements you had together to tell your news story.
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Date:7/2/03
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "7/11 Store Opening"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :35
DELIVERY: Good pacing on your voice-over.
INTERVIEWS: Good 1st interview. Your interviews (sound bites) should move the story forward and contribute to the story. A suggestion: the second interview should be another view point of a store opening in the neighborhood.
ORIGINALITY:
WRITING: Clever opening used in your script. Currently, your story reads too much like an infomercial. News stories need to be impartial and not show just one view point. What is the focus of your story?? Suggestion: are there any negative impacts in the community to having a 7/11 open on this location?
VIDEO: more b-roll roll is needed. Also, a few of your images are very dark. Be careful when shooting with less then perfect natural light.
AUDIO: okay.
EDITING:
OVERALL: The story needs to be :50 seconds from the moment the voice-over begins to the end of the voice-over/stand-up. Please re-edit to fit the required length. Thank you.
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Date:7/2/03
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Connecticut Hardcore"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: Good. Try smiling through the voice-over and SIG-out. This will add energy without adding speed to your voice-over.
INTERVIEWS: Suggestion: one of your interviews needed to state a different view point.
ORIGINALITY: Interesting, current subject.
WRITING: Good job writing into your sound bites. A journalist should stay impartial to it's subject matter. Currently, your story shows only one side to the subject.
VIDEO: Many of your images are very dark. Be careful with indoor shots without proper lighting.
AUDIO: Good
EDITING:
OVERALL: Once we dub another generation down in-order to broadcast, the images will be too dark to view.
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Date:7/2/03
School: Bunnell High School
Town: Stratford
Slug: "Video Game Violence"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50
DELIVERY: A little fast in the delivery of the voice-over. Try not to do a stand-up in front of an essentially blank wall. You should put yourself in the midst of the action. The rule of thumb: if the story is about a pot hole – stand in the pot hole for the SIG-out.
INTERVIEWS: Good. A suggestion: to balance your story an interview from a game manufacturer. There are several in the state.
ORIGINALITY: Good story concept.
WRITING: Good job writing into your sound bite.
VIDEO: See overall. 99.9% of the images should be shot by the students and not borrowed. Suggestion: how about kids playing the games, kids renting/buying the games, kids at the arcades.
AUDIO: okay
EDITING: See video note and overall note. Do you have any additional footage to support your story you could use?
OVERALL: The video clips used from the video games comprise much of your footage, without written approval from the game manufacturers we won't be able to air this. Please re-edit with footage shot by your team and re-submit. Thanks.
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